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KevinSmarts 8 vuotta sitten
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4 muutettua tiedostoa jossa 124 lisäystä ja 124 poistoa
  1. 104 104
      locations/meet
  2. 7 7
      locations/restaurant
  3. 8 8
      locations/restoran
  4. 5 5
      locations/restoranM

+ 104 - 104
locations/meet

@@ -34,9 +34,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	if love = 3:
 		'<<$boyA>> has hired a wedding limousine and it''s outside waiting for you. This is it, you are getting married today.'
 
-		act 'Sit in a limousine':
+		act 'Sit in the limousine':
 			cla
-			'You get into the limo, and it drives off. Soon the limo delivers to the wedding, <<$boyA>> is waiting for you as you walk down the aisle.'
+			'You get into the limo, and it drives off. Soon you arrive at the wedding, <<$boyA>> is waiting for you as you walk down the aisle.'
 
 			act 'Marry husband':
 				cla
@@ -55,7 +55,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 				silavagH = silavagA
 				husbFin = financeA
 				husbandMark = 1
-				'The wedding reception took place at a cafe. There were not many guests neither you or the groom have that many friends or family. It was a lot of congratulations, toasts, merrymaking and crying. By the evening, all were drunk and you and your husband staggered into a taxi, which took you home.'
+				'The wedding reception takes place at a cafe. There aren''t many guests since neither you nor the groom have that many friends or family members. There is a lot of congratulations, toasts, merrymaking and crying. By the evening, everybody is drunk and you and your husband stagger into a taxi, which takes you home.'
 
 				act 'Wedding night':gt 'husbsex', 'room'
 			end
@@ -63,8 +63,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 
 		exit
 	elseif love = 2:
-		'<<$boyA>> looks very excited and suddenly pulls the ring out of the box.'
-		'(<<$boyA>>) - <<$name>>. I offer you my hand and heart with very, come for my husband.'
+		'<<$boyA>> looks very excited and suddenly pulls a ring out of a box.'
+		'<<$boyA>> says "<<$name>>. I offer you my hand and heart. Would you marry me?"'
 
 		act 'No (turn him down)':
 			minut += 60
@@ -75,15 +75,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 
 		act 'Yes':
 			cla
-			'You agreed and put a ring on your finger. <<$boyA>> rejoiced and hugged kissed you.'
-			'(<<$boyA>>) - And now you gone choose a wedding dress.'
+			'You agree and put the ring on your finger. <<$boyA>> rejoices and happily hugs and kisses you.'
+			'<<$boyA>> says "Now you need to find a wedding dress."'
 
-			act 'Go for the dress':
+			act 'Go looking for the dress':
 				cla
 				minut += 60
 				love = 3
-				'You got in a taxi with his bride and went to the store to choose a dress. You have chosen an expensive and luxurious dress and <<$boyA>> paid his purchase.'
-				'After all these winding through the city and you''re tired <<$boyA>> to drive you home, warning that the next meeting you''re married.'
+				'You get into a taxi with your soon to be husband and go to the store to choose a dress. You choose an expensive and luxurious dress. <<$boyA>> pays for the purchase.'
+				'After a long day you feel tired and ask <<$boyA>> to drive you home, warning him that the next time you''ll meet you will get married.'
 
 				act 'Leave':gt 'street'
 			end
@@ -93,40 +93,40 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	end
 
 	if mop > 1 and ($clothingworntype = 'expensive' or $clothingworntype = 'formal') and curly > 0 and love = 1 and harakBoyA = 0:
-		'<<$boyA>> looks very excited, he decided to look around you that you are willing to appear before his mother.'
+		'<<$boyA>> looks very excited. He decides that you are now ready to meet his mother.'
 
 		act 'Meet the parents':gt 'love', 'mother'
 
 		exit
 	elseif mop > 1 and ($clothingworntype = 'expensive' or $clothingworntype = 'formal') and curly > 0 and love = 1 and harakBoyA = 1 and tanga = 1:
-		'<<$boyA>> examining you decided that you are ready to appear before his friends.'
+		'<<$boyA>> examins you and decides that you are ready to meet his friends.'
 
 		act 'Meet his friends':gt 'love', 'frends'
 
 		exit
 	end
 
-	if skin = 0:bfa -= 2 & $meetskin = 'worth looking at his feet'
-	if skin = 1:bfa -= 1 & $meetskin = 'throws at you view'
-	if skin = 2:$meetskin = 'Looking at you'
-	if skin = 3:bfa += 1 & $meetskin = 'seeing you smiling'
-	if skin = 4:bfa += 2 & $meetskin = 'seeing you smiling'
+	if skin = 0:bfa -= 2 & $meetskin = 'looking at his feet'
+	if skin = 1:bfa -= 1 & $meetskin = 'giving you a quick glance'
+	if skin = 2:$meetskin = 'looking at you'
+	if skin = 3:bfa += 1 & $meetskin = 'smiling at you'
+	if skin = 4:bfa += 2 & $meetskin = 'smiling at you'
 
 	if harakBoyA = 0:
-		if mop <= 2 and mop > 0:bfA += 1 & $meetmop = 'you are so beautiful today.'
-		if mop = 4:bfA -= 1 & $meetmop = 'great weather today.'
+		if mop <= 2 and mop > 0:bfA += 1 & $meetmop = 'You look very beautiful today.'
+		if mop = 4:bfA -= 1 & $meetmop = 'Great weather we are having today.'
 	elseif harakBoyA = 1:
-		if mop <= 3 and mop > 0:bfA += 1 & $meetmop = 'you are so beautiful today.'
-		if mop = 4:bfA -= 1 & $meetmop = 'clearly you made up, not like Halloween.'
+		if mop <= 3 and mop > 0:bfA += 1 & $meetmop = 'You look very beautiful today.'
+		if mop = 4:bfA -= 1 & $meetmop = 'Your makeup looks like you''re going to a Halloween party.'
 	elseif harakBoyA = 2:
-		if mop = 4:bfA += 1 & $meetmop = 'you are so beautiful today.'
-		if mop <= 2 and mop > 0:bfA -= 1 & $meetmop = 'great weather today.'
+		if mop = 4:bfA += 1 & $meetmop = 'You look very beautiful today.'
+		if mop <= 2 and mop > 0:bfA -= 1 & $meetmop = 'Great weather we are having today.'
 	end
 
-	if mop = 0:bfA -= 1 & $meetmop = 'Um, you have flowed cosmetics.'
-	if hapri = 1 and curly > 0:bfA += 2 & $meethair = 'You have a very beautiful hairstyle.'
-	if hapri = 1 and curly = 0:bfA += 1 & $meethair = 'You have pretty hair.'
-	if hapri = 0:bfA -= 1 & $meethair = 'I look at you in a hurry for our meeting.'
+	if mop = 0:bfA -= 1 & $meetmop = 'Um, your makeup is running.'
+	if hapri = 1 and curly > 0:bfA += 2 & $meethair = 'Your hair looks very beautiful.'
+	if hapri = 1 and curly = 0:bfA += 1 & $meethair = 'You have pretty hair today.'
+	if hapri = 0:bfA -= 1 & $meethair = 'You look like you were in a hurry.'
 	if harakBoyA = 0:$meet = '"Hello darling, I am glad to see you, <<$meetmop>> <<$meethair>>"'
 	if harakBoyA = 1:$meet = '"Hello <<$name>>, I am glad to see you, <<$meetmop>> <<$meethair>>"'
 	if harakBoyA = 2:$meet = '"Hi <<$name>>! Glad to see you, <<$meetmop>> <<$meethair>>"'
@@ -137,13 +137,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 		if haerBoyA ! hcol:
 			bfA = bfA - 5
 
-			if haerBoyA = 0:$meetcol = '<<$boyA>> tells you that you would go black hair.'
-			if haerBoyA = 1:$meetcol = '<<$boyA>> tells you that you would have gone blond hair color.'
-			if haerBoyA = 2:$meetcol = '<<$boyA>> tells you that you would have gone red hair.'
-			if haerBoyA = 3:$meetcol = '<<$boyA>> tells you that you would go light hair color.'
+			if haerBoyA = 0:$meetcol = '<<$boyA>> tells you that he prefers black hair.'
+			if haerBoyA = 1:$meetcol = '<<$boyA>> tells you that he prefers blonde hair.'
+			if haerBoyA = 2:$meetcol = '<<$boyA>> tells you that he prefers red hair.'
+			if haerBoyA = 3:$meetcol = '<<$boyA>> tells you that he prefers light hair colors.'
 		elseif haerBoyA = hcol:
 			bfA += 1
-			'<<$boyA>> says that you have a wonderful hair color.'
+			'<<$boyA>> notes that you have a wonderful hair color.'
 		end
 	end
 
@@ -151,25 +151,25 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 		if haerBoyA ! hcol:
 			bfA = bfA - 5
 
-			if haerBoyA = 0:$meetcol = '<<$boyA>> tells you that you would go black hair.'
-			if haerBoyA = 1:$meetcol = '<<$boyA>> tells you that you would have gone blond hair color.'
-			if haerBoyA = 2:$meetcol = '<<$boyA>> tells you that you would have gone red hair.'
-			if haerBoyA = 3:$meetcol = '<<$boyA>> tells you that you would go light hair color.'
+			if haerBoyA = 0:$meetcol = '<<$boyA>> tells you that he prefers black hair.'
+			if haerBoyA = 1:$meetcol = '<<$boyA>> tells you that he prefers blonde hair.'
+			if haerBoyA = 2:$meetcol = '<<$boyA>> tells you that he prefers red hair.'
+			if haerBoyA = 3:$meetcol = '<<$boyA>> tells you that he prefers light hair colors.'
 		elseif haerBoyA = hcol:
 			bfA += 1
-			'<<$boyA>> says that you have a wonderful hair color.'
+			'<<$boyA>> notes that you have a wonderful hair color.'
 		end
 	elseif dayA > 30 and harakBoy = 0:
 		if haerBoyA ! hcol:
 			bfA = bfA - 5
 
-			if haerBoyA = 0:$meetcol = '<<$boyA>> tells you that you would go black hair.'
-			if haerBoyA = 1:$meetcol = '<<$boyA>> tells you that you would have gone blond hair color.'
-			if haerBoyA = 2:$meetcol = '<<$boyA>> tells you that you would have gone red hair.'
-			if haerBoyA = 3:$meetcol = '<<$boyA>> tells you that you would go light hair color.'
+			if haerBoyA = 0:$meetcol = '<<$boyA>> tells you that he prefers black hair.'
+			if haerBoyA = 1:$meetcol = '<<$boyA>> tells you that he prefers blonde.'
+			if haerBoyA = 2:$meetcol = '<<$boyA>> tells you that he prefers red hair.'
+			if haerBoyA = 3:$meetcol = '<<$boyA>> tells you that he prefers light hair colors.'
 		elseif haerBoyA = hcol:
 			bfA += 1
-			'<<$boyA>> says that you have a wonderful hair color.'
+			'<<$boyA>> notes that you have a wonderful hair color.'
 		end
 	end
 
@@ -179,14 +179,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	if lip = 3:$meetlip = 'large, plump lips'
 	if lip = 4:$meetlip = 'thick and huge lips'
 
-	'At the entrance <<$meetskin>> <<$boyA>>. You''ll see he comes to you and says. <<$meet>> <<$meetcol>>'
+	'At the entrance <<$meetskin>> stands <<$boyA>>. He comes over to you and says. <<$meet>> <<$meetcol>>'
 
-	if financeA = 0:$clom = 'deshovy dressed in a tracksuit.'
+	if financeA = 0:$clom = 'dressed in a tracksuit.'
 	if financeA = 1:$clom = 'dressed in jeans and a sweater.'
 	if financeA = 2:$clom = 'dressed in a respectable and expensive jacket.'
-	if harakBoyA = 0:'<<$boyA>> looks timid and not confident young man <<$clom>>'
-	if harakBoyA = 1:'<<$boyA>> looks calm and confident young man <<$clom>>'
-	if harakBoyA = 2:'<<$boyA>> looks cocky and brash young man <<$clom>>'
+	if harakBoyA = 0:'<<$boyA>> looks like a timid and not very confident young man <<$clom>>'
+	if harakBoyA = 1:'<<$boyA>> looks like a calm and confident young man <<$clom>>'
+	if harakBoyA = 2:'<<$boyA>> looks like a cocky and brash young man <<$clom>>'
 
 	! WD: Uninitialised ~ 'giftDay' us  'giftDayA'
 	if dayA >= 2 and financeA = 2 and giftDayA < (dayA - giftNum):
@@ -201,7 +201,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 
 			giftNumA = giftNum
 			money += gift
-			'<<$boyA>> reached into his pocket and pulled out a gift for you <<gift>> <b>₽</b>.'
+			'<<$boyA>> reaches into his pocket and pulls out a gift for you. He gives you <<gift>> <b>₽</b>.'
 		end
 
 	! WD: Uninitialised ~ 'giftDay' us  'giftDayA'
@@ -217,7 +217,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 
 			giftNumA = giftNum
 			money += gift
-			'<<$boyA>> reached into his pocket and pulled out a gift for you <<gift>> <b>₽</b>.'
+			'<<$boyA>> reaches into his pocket and pulls out a gift for you. He gives you <<gift>> <b>₽</b>.'
 		end
 
 	! WD: Uninitialised ~ 'giftDay' us  'giftDayA'
@@ -233,7 +233,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 
 			giftNumA = giftNum
 			money += gift
-			'<<$boyA>> reached into his pocket and pulled out a gift for you. He gave you <<gift>> <b>₽</b>.'
+			'<<$boyA>> reaches into his pocket and pulls out a gift for you. He gives you <<gift>> <b>₽</b>.'
 		end
 	end
 
@@ -247,28 +247,28 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 			if spdirtyb = 0:
 				'<center><img src="images/etogame/kiss.jpg"></center>'
 
-				if harakBoyA = 0:bfa -= 2 & 'You pressed your <<$meetlip>> to solid lips male mouth open and thrust his tongue into his mouth. <<$boyA>> blushed and pulled away.'
-				if harakBoyA = 1:bfa -= 1 & 'You pressed your <<$meetlip>> to solid lips male mouth open and thrust his tongue into his mouth. <<$boyA>> gently obsasal your language.'
-				if harakBoyA = 2:bfa += 2 & 'You pressed your <<$meetlip>> to solid lips male mouth open and thrust his tongue into his mouth. <<$boyA>> aggressively pushed his tongue into your mouth and almost started to fuck you in the mouth with his tongue.'
+				if harakBoyA = 0:bfa -= 2 & 'You press your <<$meetlip>> onto his and thrust your tongue into his mouth as soon as he opens it. <<$boyA>> blushes and pulls away.'
+				if harakBoyA = 1:bfa -= 1 & 'You press your <<$meetlip>> onto his and thrust your tongue into his mouth as soon as he opens it. <<$boyA>> gently returns the kiss.'
+				if harakBoyA = 2:bfa += 2 & 'You press your <<$meetlip>> onto his and thrust your tongue into his mouth as soon as he opens it. <<$boyA>> aggressively pushes his tongue into your mouth and almost starts to fuck it with his tongue.'
 
 				act 'Finish the kiss':xgt 'meet', 'a'
 
 				exit
 			elseif spdirtyb > 0:
 				'<center><img src="images/etogame/cumlip.jpg"></center>'
-				'<<$boyA>> kissed you in your smelling sperm <<$meetlip>> and pull away. "What is it?" he asked, "Do you smell mouth sperm."'
+				'<<$boyA>> kisses you on your <<$meetlip>> that still smell like cum. He pulls away quickly. "What is this?" he asks, "Your mouth smells like sperm."'
 
 				if izvrat = 1:
 					bfa += 5
 					DOM += 1
-					'<<$boyA>> blushed and lowered his eyes, you''ll clearly see how he formed a mound on his trousers.'
+					'<<$boyA>> blushes and lowers his eyes. You can see the growing bulge in his pants.'
 
 					act 'Finish the kiss':xgt 'meet', 'a'
 
 					exit
 				else
 					bfa = 0
-					'<<$boyA>> angry you threw myself "Oh, you dirty whore! Get lost, that I would not see you anymore, all we had done for!"'
+					'<<$boyA>> angrily spats at you, "Oh, you dirty whore! Get lost, I don''t want to see you anymore. I''m done with you!"'
 
 					act 'Leave':gt 'street'
 
@@ -283,28 +283,28 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 			if cumlip = 0:
 				'<center><img src="images/etogame/kiss1.jpg"></center>'
 
-				if harakBoyA = 0:'You framed to kiss her lips and <<$boyA>> a little embarrassed kissed you.'
-				if harakBoyA = 1:bfa += 2 & 'You framed for a kiss lips <<$boyA>> quickly kissed you.'
-				if harakBoyA = 2:bfa -= 1 & 'You framed for a kiss lips <<$boyA>> juicy kiss you, pressing his lips to your firm <<$meetlip>>.'
+				if harakBoyA = 0:'You move in for a kiss and <<$boyA>> a little embarrassed kisses you back.'
+				if harakBoyA = 1:bfa += 2 & 'You move in for a kiss on his lips. <<$boyA>> quickly kisses you.'
+				if harakBoyA = 2:bfa -= 1 & 'You move in for a kiss and <<$boyA>> replies with a juicy kiss himself, pressing his lips to your firm <<$meetlip>>.'
 
 				act 'Finish the kiss':xgt 'meet', 'a'
 
 				exit
 			elseif spdirtyb > 0:
 				'<center><img src="images/etogame/cumlip.jpg"></center>'
-				'<<$boyA>> kissed you in your smelling sperm <<$meetlip>> and pull away. "What is it?" he asked, "Do you smell mouth sperm."'
+				'<<$boyA>> kisses you on your <<$meetlip>> that still smell like cum. He pulls away quickly. "What is this?" he asks, "Your mouth smells like sperm."'
 
 				if izvrat = 1:
 					bfa += 5
 					DOM += 1
-					'<<$boyA>> blushed and lowered his eyes, you''ll clearly see how he formed a mound on his trousers.'
+					'<<$boyA>> blushes and lowers his eyes. You can see the growing bulge in his pants.'
 
 					act 'Finish the kiss':xgt 'meet', 'a'
 
 					exit
 				else
 					boya = 0
-					'<<$boyA>> angry you threw myself "Oh, you dirty whore! Get lost, that I would not see you anymore, all we had done for!"'
+					'<<$boyA>> angrily spats at you, "Oh, you dirty whore! Get lost, I don''t want to see you anymore. I''m done with you!"'
 
 					act 'Leave':gt 'street'
 
@@ -318,9 +318,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 			DOM += 1
 			'<center><img src="images/etogame/kiss2.jpg"></center>'
 
-			if harakBoyA = 0:bfa += 1 & 'You framed and cheek <<$boyA>> timidly kissed you.'
-			if harakBoyA = 1:'You framed and cheek <<$boyA>> you kissed.'
-			if harakBoyA = 2:bfa -= 2 & 'You framed and cheek <<$boyA>> kissed you discouraged with views.'
+			if harakBoyA = 0:bfa += 1 & 'You offer your cheek and <<$boyA>> timidly kisses you.'
+			if harakBoyA = 1:'You offer your cheek and <<$boyA>> kisses you.'
+			if harakBoyA = 2:bfa -= 2 & 'You offer your cheek and <<$boyA>>, looking dissapointed, kisses you.'
 
 			if giftDayA = dayA:
 				bfa -= 3
@@ -339,9 +339,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 			cla
 			DOM += 2
 
-			if harakBoyA = 0:bfa -= 1 & 'You nodded and said hello, <<$boyA>> get confused and blushed slightly.'
-			if harakBoyA = 1:bfa -= 2 & 'You nodded and said hello <<$boyA>> frowned slightly.'
-			if harakBoyA = 2:bfa -= 3 & 'You nodded and said hello <<$boyA>> chuckled and grinned.'
+			if harakBoyA = 0:bfa -= 1 & 'You nod and say hello. <<$boyA>> gets confused and blushes slightly.'
+			if harakBoyA = 1:bfa -= 2 & 'You nod and say hello. <<$boyA>> frowns slightly.'
+			if harakBoyA = 2:bfa -= 3 & 'You nod and say hello. <<$boyA>> chuckles and grins.'
 
 			if giftDayA = dayA:
 				bfa -= 3
@@ -358,25 +358,25 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	elseif venera >= 4:
 		bfa = 0
 		'<center><img src="images/etogame/venera.jpg"></center>'
-		'<<$boyA>> take a closer look at you and said, "What have you got with the lips? They are very sore. Is that genital herpes? I''d better go, do not want to get infected. Goodbye."'
+		'<<$boyA>> takes a closer look at you and says, "What is wrong with your lips? They are very sore. Is that genital herpes? I better go, I do not want to get infected. Goodbye."'
 
 		act 'Leave':gt 'street'
 
 		exit
 	elseif spdirtyv > 0:
 		'<center><img src="images/etogame/cumface.jpg"></center>'
-		'<<$boyA>> take a closer look at you and said, "What have you got stuck in your hair? Is that sperm?"'
+		'<<$boyA>> takes a closer look at you and says, "What is that in your hair? Is that sperm?"'
 
 		if izvrat = 1:
 			bfa += 5
 			DOM += 1
-			'<<$boyA>> blushed and lowered his eyes, you''ll clearly see how he formed a mound on his trousers.'
+			'<<$boyA>> blushes and lowers his eyes. You can see the growing bulge in his pants.'
 
-			act 'Yes it is the sperm still have questions?':
+			act 'Yes it is the sperm. Any other questions?':
 				cla
 				gs 'stat'
-				'(You) - Yes, it''s sperm still have questions?'
-				'<<$boyA>> shook his head.'
+				'(You) - Yes, it is sperm. Any other questions?'
+				'<<$boyA>> shakes his head.'
 
 				xgt 'meet', 'a'
 			end
@@ -384,7 +384,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 			exit
 		else
 			boya = 0
-			'<<$boyA>> angry you threw myself "Oh, you dirty whore! Get lost, that I would not see you anymore, all we had done for!"'
+			'<<$boyA>> angrily spats at you, "Oh, you dirty whore! Get lost, I don''t want to see you anymore. I''m done with you!"'
 
 			act 'Leave':gt 'street'
 
@@ -395,15 +395,15 @@ end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'a':
 	if spdirtyc > 0:
-		'"Hey, what are you smeared?" asked <<$boyA>> looking at your ass. "It''s sperm!"'
+		'"Hey, what is this?" asks <<$boyA>> looking at your ass. "It''s sperm!"'
 
 		if izvrat = 1:
 			bfa += 5
 			DOM += 1
-			'<<$boyA>> blushed and lowered his eyes, you''ll clearly see how he formed a mound on his trousers.'
+			'<<$boyA>> blushes and lowers his eyes. You can see the growing bulge in his pants.'
 		else
 			bfa = 0
-			'<<$boyA>> angry you threw myself "Oh, you dirty whore! Get lost, that I would not see you anymore, all we had done for!"'
+			'<<$boyA>> angrily spats at you, "Oh, you dirty whore! Get lost, I don''t want to see you anymore. I''m done with you!"'
 
 			act 'Leave':gt 'street'
 
@@ -414,124 +414,124 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'a':
 	if financeA = 0:
 		if ($clothingworntype = 'expensive' or $clothingworntype = 'formal') and PCloSkirt > 0:
 			bfa -= (harakBoyA + 1)
-			'"And you dress smartly, " remarked skeptical <<$boyA>> looking at your expensive dress.'
+			'"And you dress smartly, " remarks a skeptical <<$boyA>> looking at your expensive dress.'
 		end
 
 		if PCloSkirtShortness > 0 or $clothingworntype = 'exercise':
 			bfa += (harakBoyA + 1)
-			'"A classy outfit, " said <<$boyA>>'
+			'"A classy outfit, " says <<$boyA>>'
 		end
 
 		mesorand = rand(0, 1)
 
 		if mesorand = 0:
-			'<<$boyA>> offered you a beer in the stairwell.'
+			'<<$boyA>> offers you a beer in the stairwell.'
 
-			act 'Sorry, but I urgently need to escape':
+			act 'Sorry, but I need to go':
 				cla
 				bfa -= (harakBoyA + 1)
 				gt 'street'
 			end
 
-			act 'Come on':gt 'podezdM', 'start'
+			act 'Go with him':gt 'podezdM', 'start'
 
 			exit
 		elseif mesorand = 1:
-			'<<$boyA>> suggest that you take a walk in the park.'
+			'<<$boyA>> suggests that you take a walk in the park.'
 
-			act 'Sorry, but I urgently need to escape':
+			act 'Sorry, but I need to go':
 				cla
 				bfa -= (harakBoyA + 1)
 				gt 'street'
 			end
 
-			act 'Come on':gt 'parkM', 'start'
+			act 'Go with him':gt 'parkM', 'start'
 
 			exit
 		end
 	elseif financeA = 1:
 		if ($clothingworntype = 'expensive' or $clothingworntype = 'formal'):
 			boyA += (harakBoyA + 1)
-			'"Great clothes, " said admiringly <<$boyA>>.'
+			'"Great clothes, " <<$boyA>> says admiringly.'
 		end
 
 		if $clothingworntype = 'exercise':
 			bfa -= (harakBoyA + 1)
-			'"And you''re athletic girl" skeptical noticed <<$boyA>> looking at your clothes.'
+			'"And you''re an athletic girl" <<$boyA>> notices skeptically, looking at your clothes.'
 		end
 
 		mesorand = rand(0, 2)
 
 		if mesorand = 0:
-			'<<$boyA>> suggest that you go to the movies.'
+			'<<$boyA>> suggests that you go to the movies.'
 
-			act 'Sorry, but I urgently need to escape':
+			act 'Sorry, but I need to go.':
 				cla
 				bfa -= (harakBoyA + 1)
 				gt 'street'
 			end
 
-			act 'Come on':gt 'kinoM', 'start'
+			act 'Go with him':gt 'kinoM', 'start'
 
 			exit
 		elseif mesorand = 1:
 			'<<$boyA>> suggest that you take a walk in the park'
 
-			act 'Sorry, but I urgently need to escape.':
+			act 'Sorry, but I need to go.':
 				cla
 				bfa -= (harakBoyA + 1)
 				gt 'street'
 			end
 
-			act 'Come on':gt 'parkM', 'start'
+			act 'Go with him':gt 'parkM', 'start'
 
 			exit
 		elseif mesorand = 2:
-			'<<$boyA>> suggest that you sit in a cafe.'
+			'<<$boyA>> suggests that you go to a cafe.'
 
-			act 'Sorry, but I urgently need to escape.':
+			act 'Sorry, but I need to go.':
 				cla
 				bfa -= (harakBoyA + 1)
 				gt 'street'
 			end
 
-			act 'Come on':gt 'kafeM', 'start'
+			act 'Go with him':gt 'kafeM', 'start'
 
 			exit
 		end
 	elseif financeA = 2:
 		if ($clothingworntype = 'expensive' or $clothingworntype = 'formal') and PCloSkirt > 0:
 			bfa += (harakBoyA + 1)
-			'"You''ve got great taste in clothes, " said admiringly <<$boyA>> looking at your expensive dress.'
+			'"You''ve got great taste in clothes." <<$boyA>> says admiringly, looking at your expensive dress.'
 		elseif $clothingworntype ! 'expensive' and $clothingworntype ! 'formal':
 			bfa -= harakBoyA + 1
-			'"Dear naryadets" remarked skeptical <<$boyA>> examining your unpretentious clothes.'
+			'"You have an interesting taste in clothes." <<$boyA>> remarks skepitcally, examining your unpretentious clothes.'
 		end
 
 		mesorand = rand(0, 1)
 
 		if mesorand = 0:
-			'<<$boyA>> suggest that you go to a cafe.'
+			'<<$boyA>> suggests that you go to a cafe.'
 
-			act 'Sorry, but I urgently need to escape':
+			act 'Sorry, but I need to leave':
 				cla
 				bfa -= (harakBoyA + 1)
 				gt 'street'
 			end
 
-			act 'Come on':gt 'kafeM', 'start'
+			act 'Go with him':gt 'kafeM', 'start'
 
 			exit
 		elseif mesorand = 1:
-			'<<$boyA>> suggest that you go to a restaurant.'
+			'<<$boyA>> suggests that you go to a restaurant.'
 
-			act 'Sorry, but I urgently need to escape':
+			act 'Sorry, but I need to leave':
 				cla
 				bfa -= (harakBoyA + 1)
 				gt 'street'
 			end
 
-			act 'Come on':gt 'restoranM', 'start'
+			act 'Go with him':gt 'restoranM', 'start'
 
 			exit
 		end

+ 7 - 7
locations/restaurant

@@ -47,33 +47,33 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '1':
 
 
 	if bankfond >= 0:
-		act 'Put your money on personal account':
+		act 'Put money on your personal account':
 			cla
 			minut += 5
-			kartaIN = input ("How much money you want to deposit into the account?")
+			kartaIN = input ("How much money do you want to deposit into the account?")
 
 			if kartaIN <= 0 or kartaIN > money:
 				'Invalid operation.'
 			else
 				bankfond += kartaIN
 				money -= kartaIN
-				'You put into the account <<kartaIN>> <b>₽</b>, now on your account <<bankfond>> <b>₽</b>.'
+				'You put <<kartaIN>> <b>₽</b> into the account. You now have <<bankfond>> <b>₽</b> on your account.'
 			end
 
 			act 'Move away':gt 'restaurant', '1'
 		end
 
-		act 'Withdraw money from the personal account':
+		act 'Withdraw money from your personal account':
 			cla
 			minut += 5
-			kartaOUT = input ("How much money you want to withdraw from the account?")
+			kartaOUT = input ("How much money do you want to withdraw from the account?")
 
 			if kartaOUT <= 0 or kartaOUT > bankfond:
-				'Not correct operation.'
+				'Invalid operation.'
 			else
 				bankfond -= kartaOUT
 				money += kartaOUT
-				'You debited <<kartaOUT>> <b>₽</b>, now on your account <<bankfond>> <b>₽</b>.'
+				'You debited <<kartaOUT>> <b>₽</b>. You now have <<bankfond>> <b>₽</b> on your account.'
 			end
 
 			act 'Move away':gt 'restaurant', '1'

+ 8 - 8
locations/restoran

@@ -13,7 +13,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 
 	!!eto there_were glamur > 1 and vnesh > 50
 	if $clothingworntype = 'formal' and mop > 1 and hapri = 1 and sweat <= 0:
-		'A man at the entrance table politely interested in what you prefer in the VIP room or in the common room'
+		'A well-dressed man at the entrance politely asks you whether you prefer the VIP section or the common room'
 
 		if money >= 5000:
 			act 'VIP room (5,000 <b>₽</b>)':
@@ -25,7 +25,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 
 		act 'Common room':gt 'restoran', 'zal'
 	else
-		'It suits you man and politely informs you that customers must be well presented and wear formal clothing if they wish to dine here.'
+		'A man in a suit politely informs you that customers must look presentable and wear formal clothing if they wish to dine here.'
 	end
 
 	act 'Leave the restaurant':
@@ -48,7 +48,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'zal':
 	lcolor = rgb(106, 90, 205)
 	'<center><b><font color="maroon">restaurant, common room</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img src="images/etogame/restoran2.jpg"></center>'
-	'The room was pretty good atmosphere. Soft lighting and light furniture. Until you hear the sounds of music, the clink of glasses and female laughter. It seems you can finally relax a little.'
+	'The room emits a good atmosphere with its soft lighting and light furniture. You hear the sounds of music, the clinks of glasses and female laughter. It seems you can finally relax a little.'
 	!!etogame
 	nastjarand = rand(0, 100)
 
@@ -57,11 +57,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'zal':
 		nastjaday = daystart
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img src="images/etogame/nastja1.jpg"></center>'
-		'In the hall you notice a pretty girl, wondering why she was sitting alone. She looks pretty good. While you looked at prekrastno stranger she caught your eye on himself and suddenly looked at you.'
+		'In the hall you notice a girl, sitting alone. She looks pretty attractive. Your eyes linger on her for a bit and she seems to feel your gaze as she suddenly looks at you.'
 
 		act 'Look down':
 			cla
-			'She turned away'
+			'She turns away'
 
 			act 'Leave':gt 'restoran', 'zal'
 		end
@@ -80,7 +80,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'zal':
 			manna += 80
 			health += 20
 			money -= 5000
-			'On the recommendation of a chef, a wonderful dish you ordered and ate with pleasure in a noisy restaurant hall.'
+			'You order a wonderful meal, recommended by the chef, and eat it with pleasure in the noisy restaurant hall.'
 
 			act 'Leave':gt 'restoran', 'zal'
 		end
@@ -100,7 +100,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'vip':
 	lcolor = rgb(106, 90, 205)
 	'<center><b><font color="maroon">Restaurant, VIP room</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img src="images/etogame/restoran3.jpg"></center>'
-	'Caught in the vip box you caught yourself thinking that smile involuntarily. In the bed of a calm and friendly atmosphere. Soft lighting and furniture in the Empire style. You hear soft music. Finally, your new weak feminine essence, albeit briefly, but can feel safe.'
+	'You go into the VIP room and can''t help but smile involuntarily. Soft lighting and empire style furniture provide a calm and friendly atmosphere. You hear soft music and finally feel safe enough to let your guard down a little.'
 
 	if money >= 5000:
 		act 'Eat (5,000 <b>₽</b>)':
@@ -114,7 +114,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'vip':
 			health += 20
 			money -= 5000
 			gs 'stat'
-			'On the recommendation of a chef, a wonderful dish you ordered and ate with pleasure in the cozy vip room of the restaurant.'
+			'You order a wonderful meal, recommended by the chef, and eat it with pleasure in the VIP room of the restaurant.'
 
 			act 'Leave':gt 'restoran', 'vip'
 		end

+ 5 - 5
locations/restoranM

@@ -1,7 +1,7 @@
 # restoranM
 if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	minut += 30
-	'You came to the restaurant and sat at a table. <<$boyA>> ordered the waiter food and good wine. You have to wait when you bring the food.'
+	'You go into the restaurant and sit at a table. <<$boyA>> orders a meal and good wine. You have to wait a little until the food arrives.'
 
 	if dayA > 15 and harakBoyA = 2:gs 'boylove', 'tits'
 	if dayA > 20 and harakBoyA = 1:gs 'boylove', 'tits'
@@ -11,7 +11,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	if dayA > 30 and harakBoyA = 0:gs 'boylove', 'figure'
 
 	gs 'anekdot'
-	'<<$boyA>> anecdote tells you "<<$anek>>."'
+	'<<$boyA>> tells you an anecdote"<<$anek>>."'
 
 	act 'Laugh':
 		cla
@@ -26,7 +26,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 		xgt 'restoranM', 'a'
 	end
 
-	act 'Not funny':
+	act 'Its not funny':
 		cla
 		DOM += 1
 		bfa -= 1
@@ -37,7 +37,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'a':
 	minut += 30
 	alko += 1
-	'Finally you brought food. <<$boyA>> pour you wine and proposed a toast to love.'
+	'Finally you get your food. <<$boyA>> pours you some wine and proposes a toast to love.'
 
 	act 'Eat':
 		cla
@@ -53,7 +53,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'b':
 	gs 'food', 'dyn_meal'
 	alko += 2
 	gs 'stat'
-	'After some time with food and wine, and was done with <<$boyA>> proposed to hold you.'
+	'After you finish your meal and empty the wine, <<$boyA>> proposes to take you to his home.'
 
 	act 'Go Home':gt 'sexm', 'start'
 end