KevinSmarts 9 anos atrás
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1 arquivos alterados com 19 adições e 19 exclusões
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      locations/roomPRE

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locations/roomPRE

@@ -9,9 +9,9 @@ lcolor = rgb(106, 90, 205)
 
 if pre = 0:
 	pre = 1
-	'You wake up to the sound of your alarm clock. You hear Luda, your wife, mumbling something next to you about "Don''t want to" and "Too early", after which she pulls her blanket up and rolls over. Reaching over to your clock, you turn it off.' 
+	'You wake up to the sound of your alarm clock. You hear Luda, your wife, mumbling next to you, "Don''t want to, it''s too early." She pulls her blanket up and rolls over. You reach over to your clock and turn it off.' 
 	*nl 
-	'<i>There are days when I just want to keep on sleeping</i>, you think to yourself. <i>But that''s not happening today.</i>'
+	'<i>There are days when I just want to keep on sleeping</i>, you think to yourself. <i>But I can''t today.</i>'
 
 	act 'Go to the bathroom':
 		cla
@@ -20,7 +20,7 @@ if pre = 0:
 		clr
 		gs 'statPRE'
 		'<center><img src="images/picPRE/self.jpg"></center>'
-		'Quietly, so that you won''t wake up your daughter, you go to the bathroom and take care of your morning routine.'
+		'Quietly, so that you don''t wake up your daughter, you go to the bathroom and take care of your morning routine.'
 
 		act 'Leave the apartment':
 			cla
@@ -29,7 +29,7 @@ if pre = 0:
 			clr
 			gs 'statPRE'
 			'<center><img src="images/picPRE/carPRE1.jpg"></center>'
-			'In a parking lot near the house stands your car. You press the button on your key as you approach and unlock it.'
+			'In a parking lot near your house sits your car. You unlock it with the key remote and climb in.'
 
 			act 'Go to work':
 				cla
@@ -38,7 +38,7 @@ if pre = 0:
 				clr
 				gs 'statPRE'
 				'<center><img src="images/picPRE/carPRE.jpg"></center>'
-				'You get behind the wheel, turn the key and start up the engines, and drive off to work. The roads are filled with traffic, but it''s the morning rush hour, so what else would you expect. You drive for what feels like an eternity, give or take an hour, but you eventually reach the office. The music on the radio was pleasent, at least.'
+				'You turn the key, the engines roars into life and you drive to work. The roads are filled with traffic, but it''s the morning rush hour, so it''s no surprise. You drive for what feels like an eternity, give or take an hour, but you eventually reach the office. The music on the radio was pleasent, at least.'
 
 				act 'Park at the office':
 					cla
@@ -47,26 +47,26 @@ if pre = 0:
 					clr
 					gs 'statPRE'
 					'<center><img src="images/picPRE/officePRE.jpg"></center>'
-					'You pull into a parking lot near the building and manage to find a good spot. You greet the security guard on your way into the building and go upstairs, into your office. Shortly after you sit down at your desk and boot up your computer, your boss''s secretary comes in and hands you a folder with several travel documents.' 
+					'You pull into a parking lot near the building and manage to find a good spot. You greet the security guard on your way into the building, go upstairs and enter your office. Shortly after you sit down at your desk and boot up your computer, your boss''s secretary comes in and hands you a folder with several travel documents.' 
 					*nl 
 					'"Am I going on a business trip or something?" you ask her.' 
 					*nl 
-					'"Yes, the director said it had something to do with a construction project, outside somewhere in the middle of nowhere, but that''s pretty much all I know," Oksana says.' 
+					'"Yes, the director said it had something to do with a construction project, out in the middle of nowhere, but that''s pretty much all I know," Oksana says.' 
 					*nl 
 					'After she leaves, you read over the travel documents and fill them out. Time to go to the director.'
 
-					act 'Go to your boss':
+					act 'Go and see your boss':
 						cla
 						*clr
 						minut += 20
 						clr
 						gs 'statPRE'
 						'<center><img src="images/picPRE/man.jpg"></center>'
-						'You head into the director''s office, after which you greet him and give him the papers to sign. The director, Roman Gromov, scans through the text before giving his wide authoritative stroke.'
+						'You head into the directors'' office, greet him and hand him the papers to sign. The director, Roman Gromov, scans through the text before signing it off with a broad, sweeping stroke.'
 						*nl 
-						'"Ms. Glavbukh is probably already in the office. Go get the travel money while I make a few calls. We''ll discuss your trip when you get back."'
+						'"Ms. Glavbukh is in her office. Go get some travel money while I make a few calls. We''ll discuss your trip when you get back."'
 
-						act 'Go to the chief accountant for travel':
+						act 'Go to the chief accountant':
 							cla
 							*clr
 							minut += 30
@@ -74,9 +74,9 @@ if pre = 0:
 							clr
 							gs 'statPRE'
 							'<center><img src="images/picPRE/glavbuh.jpg"></center>'
-							'Marina is indeed already in the office. After filing your signed travel documents, she grumbles a bit before giving you the money.'
+							'Marina is indeed already in her office. After filing your signed travel documents, she grumbles about antiquated systems as she counts out the money.'
 
-							act 'Go back to the director':
+							act 'Return to the director':
 								cla
 								*clr
 								minut += 15
@@ -89,22 +89,22 @@ if pre = 0:
 								*nl 
 								'Roman hangs up and turns to you.'
 								*nl 
-								'"Last night, while excavating the pit for the base, the workers stumbled upon something; one of the excavators dug into a hollow space of some sort. Luckily Igor was close by and realized he needed to stop the excavation.' 
+								'"Last night, while excavating for the foundations, the workers stumbled upon something; one of the excavators dug into a hollow space of some sort. Luckily Igor was on site and he halted the excavation.' 
 								*nl 
-								'Damn! It''s not clear what exactly it is, though. Maybe an abandoned bunker or something. But in any case, if there are any more open chambers under the foundation, further construction of the complex may not be possible. So what I want you to do, is to go to the construction site, figure out just what it is and solve this mess as quickly as possible."'
+								'Damn! It''s not clear what exactly it is, though. Maybe an abandoned bunker or something. But in any case, if there are any more open chambers under the foundation, we might not be able to build on the land. So what I want you to do, is to go to the construction site, figure out exactly what the problem is and solve this whole mess as quickly as possible."'
 
-								act 'I should at least meet-':
+								act 'Remind him of the correct procedures':
 									cla
 									*clr
 									minut += 5
 									clr
 									gs 'statPRE'
 									'<center><img src="images/picPRE/man.jpg"></center>'
-									'"I think we should get-" you say, but are quickly interrupted by your boss.'
+									'"Firstly we need to talk to..." you start to say, but are quickly interrupted by your boss.'
 									*nl 
-									'"Michael, do you realize what''s at stake here? We''re near the end of our credit line, still have unfinalized agreements on the project''s contract, and we already have guys digging the pit. You realise that if there is a too big a hole under the foundation, we won''t be able to continue the construction and will find ourselves on the brink of ruin. So this mysterious structure situation must be addressed immediately. And I have to stay here to keep a lid on things and buy us time."'
+									'"Michael, do you realize what''s at stake here? We''re near the end of our credit line, still have unfinalized agreements on the project''s contract, and we already have guys digging the pit. If there is too big a hole under the foundation, build on the site and that could bankrupt the company. So this mysterious structure must be addressed immediately and I have to hold the fort here and keep a lid on things."'
 
-									act 'Okay, then I will not waste any more time':gt 'roadPRE'
+									act 'Doesn''t look like you have a choice':gt 'roadPRE'
 								end
 							end
 						end