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Text edits from Lantera part 2 of 2

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  1. 16 14
      locations/gopnik_house
  2. 55 51
      locations/gskver
  3. 175 133
      locations/placer_act
  4. 68 62
      locations/placer_gskver
  5. 21 22
      locations/placer_man
  6. 376 231
      locations/placer_sex
  7. 11 9
      locations/podval_rape

+ 16 - 14
locations/gopnik_house

@@ -2,17 +2,21 @@
 gs 'stat'
 
 if gophouse = 0:
-	'You sit on a rickety chair at the table in a dirty apartment with shabby wallpaper. You drink and eat, sitting at the table with the <<$kol_man_text>>.'
+	'You take your glass of vodka and sit down on a rickety chair at the table, between two of the guys. The apartment is in rather poor condition; there''s very little furniture, and the wallpaper is peeling off the walls. Nevertheless, you enjoy the Gopniks'' company, <<$bname>>''s in particular.'
+	''
 
 	if alko < 6:
-		'You feel very drunk, but are still able to think.'
+		'The vodka has you feeling quite drunk, but you are still able to think. At a certain point in the conversation, you see the smiles on the Gopniks'' faces make place for rather greedy grins. Suddenly everyone''s looking at you, ogling your body from top to bottom.'
+		'A few of the guys approach you and pick you up, despite your meek protests. You''re too drunk to stop them, and just let it happen. While they carry you to another room, one of them hisses to you: "You''ve made use of our hospitality for long enough, <<$name>>... it''s time you do something for us in return."'
+		'You guess this is what they do with all the unlucky girls they meet in the park. The room they''re carrying you to has no furniture; just a mattress on the ground. The Gopniks unceremoniously dump you on top of it, and reach down for their pants.'
 	elseif alko >= 6:
-		'You feel yourself getting dizzy and the earth starts to slip away from under your feet.'
+		'The vodka has you feeling quite drunk, and soon you are too drunk to really think straight. When you hold onto the table to stop yourself from falling off your chair, you see the smiles on the Gopniks'' faces make place for rather greedy grins. Suddenly everyone''s looking at you, ogling your body from top to bottom.'
+		'A few of the guys approach you and pick you up, despite your meek protests. You''re way too drunk to stop them, and just let it happen. The world won''t stop spinning while they haul you around, and you feel rather disoriented when the Gopniks dump you down onto a sole mattress in an otherwise empty room.'
 	end
 
-	'A couple of guys pick up and drag you into another room, where they lay you on the sofa.'
-
-	act 'Further':
+	''
+	
+	act 'Continue':
 		rape += 1
 		gang += 1
 		gophouse = 1
@@ -22,8 +26,6 @@ if gophouse = 0:
 		guy += kol_man
 		ciklkm = kol_man
 
-		if gophouserapeQW = 0:gophouserapeQW = 1
-
 		gt $curloc
 	end
 elseif gophouse = 1:
@@ -41,15 +43,15 @@ elseif gophouse = 1:
 		dynamic $analsexrude
 	end
 
-	if ciklkm > 0:'Then the space between your legs is filled by another guy.'
-
+	if ciklkm > 0:'All of the guys want to fuck you at least once. You see one of them impatiently stroking his cock, keeping it erect while he is waiting for the Gopnik that is currently fucking you to finish. There might be more beyond your vision range though, you''re not quite sure. And frankly, you''re also too drunk to care.'
+	'Once the Gopnik finishes, his friend quickly takes his place between your legs.'
 	gs 'stat'
 
 	if ciklkm > 0:jump 'markgophouserape'
 
 	if RAND (0,1) = 0:
-		'Finally it''s all over, you feel someone pull your clothes back on to you and button them up, before you are once more dragged somewhere.'
-		act 'Look around':podvalrape = 0 & dormrape = 0 & gt'gorodok'
+		'Finally the Gopniks are finished with you. They talk loudly about what a good fuck you were while they get dressed. When they realize you''re too drunk to get dressed, they help you pull your clothes back on and sloppily button them up, before they drag you outside. After you walk for a few minutes, <<$bname>> slaps your ass and tells you: "You should be able to find your way home from here. You were a good fuck, <<$name>>. Come look us up in the park again if you want more where that came from."'
+		act 'Find your way back to the main streets':podvalrape = 0 & dormrape = 0 & gt'gorodok'
 		
 	else
 		act 'Open your eyes':
@@ -61,8 +63,8 @@ elseif gophouse = 1:
 			gs 'stat'
 			
 			'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/placer/podvalwrite'+rand(1,6)+'.jpg"></center>'
-			'With difficulty you come to, your body aches, your head pops, and someone is mocking you. You look down and see that you are now covered in obscene words like a public toilet.'
- 			act 'Look around':podvalrape = 0 & dormrape = 0 & gt'gorodok'
+			'You passed out at some point during their fuck session. When you come to your body aches, your head is throbbing, and some kid is mocking you. When you look down, you realize why: those bastards have written obscene words all over your face and body! You look like a public toilet, and quickly cover up their writing as good as you can while you get up.'
+ 			act 'Find your way back to the main streets':podvalrape = 0 & dormrape = 0 & gt'gorodok'
 		end  	
 	end
 end

+ 55 - 51
locations/gskver

@@ -15,66 +15,70 @@ cls
 gs 'stat'
 gs 'time'
 
-if $clothingworntype = 'nude':willpower -= 15 & manna -= 15 & 'You hear how vakrug all whispering and poking a finger -- Look, that <<$surname>> younger chudit.'
+if $clothingworntype = 'nude':willpower -= 15 & manna -= 15 & 'You notice passers-by in the park pointing at you as you walk, and overhear one older lady telling her friend: "Look at her... it''s that <<$surname>> girl. Youth these days, they have no shame at all!"'
 
 if month=3 or month=4 or month=5:
 	if hour>=6 and hour<=17:
-		'<center><img src="images/nigma/gor/Lake/skver.spring.jpg"></center>'
-		'Little Square. Spring has came, melting the worst of the snow. The trees are begining to reveal themselves.'
-		'On the ground, there are puddles of melted snow. It is funny watching people, walking through the park, trying to jump over them. Although, some guys, unconcerned walk straight through the puddles.'
-		'Courting couples dance along merrily, in there own worlds, dodging water dripping from the trees.'
+		'<center><img src="images/nigma/gor/lake/skver.spring.jpg"></center>'
+		'The main square of Pavlovsk Park. Spring has come, melting the worst of the snow. The trees are sprouting new leaves.'
+		'There are puddles on the ground everywhere, all remains from the melted snow. A lot of people in the park are having fun with them, trying to jump over them and mocking those that fail. They''re not particularly deep though, and plenty of others just walk through without giving them a second thought.'
+		'The park is not particularly crowded, this time of year. Many people think it''s still too cold to spend much time outdoors.'
 		''
 	else
-		'<center><img src="images/nigma/gor/Lake/skver.spring.night.jpg"></center>'
-		'Small square. With the arrival of spring, many people are using the park again, but even they are not around now. Night drove the people away and now the public garden is deserted, leave only you, a lone occupant breaking the silence and tranquility of the sleeping plants.'
+		'<center><img src="images/nigma/gor/lake/skver.spring.night.jpg"></center>'
+		'The main square of Pavlovsk Park. Spring has come, melting the worst of the snow. The trees are sprouting new leaves.'
+		'There is no particular reason to visit the park during the night, and as a result it''s largely deserted. In the distance you see one person running through the park, probably using it as a shortcut to go home faster.'
 		''
 	end
 end
 if month=6 or month=7 or month=8:
 	if hour>=6 and hour<=19:
 		'<center><img src="images/gevent/skver.jpg"></center>'
-		'Little Square, where people often rest, walk and date and where kids come to play.'
+		'The main square of Pavlovsk Park. At this time of year, it''s one of the primary places in town that locals and tourists enjoy spending their spare time in. It''s always busy: people are resting, walking, playing and dating to their heart''s desires, enjoying the nice surroundings.'
 		''
 	else
-		'<center><img src="images/nigma/gor/Lake/skver.summer.night.jpg"></center>'
-		'Little Square. During the day there are a lot of people, but now there is not a soul in the park.'
+		'<center><img src="images/nigma/gor/lake/skver.summer.night.jpg"></center>'
+		'The main square of Pavlovsk Park. At this time of year, it''s one of the places where locals and tourists enjoy going in their spare time.'
+		'However, there is no particular reason to visit the park during the night, and as a result it''s largely deserted. In the distance you see one person running through the park, probably using it as a shortcut to go home faster.'
 		''
 	end
 end
 if month=9 or month=10 or month=11:
 	if hour>=6 and hour<=18:
-		'<center><img src="images/nigma/gor/Lake/skver.autumn.jpg"></center>'
-		'Little Square. Autumn has came, with some trees already begining to shed their leaves. The leaves that are still hanging, are changing colour and showing a curtain of reds and browns.'
-		'As people walk by chatting, some taking photos of the falling leaves, others just enjoying the view and the smell of autumn.'
+		'<center><img src="images/nigma/gor/lake/skver.autumn.jpg"></center>'
+		'The main square of Pavlovsk Park. Autumn has come, and some of the trees are already shedding their leaves. The leaves that are still on the trees have changed colour, and are a beautiful mix of red and brown.'
+		'Everywhere in the park, people are enjoying nature. Some are taking photos of the fallen leaves, kids are playing everywhere, and couples are walking hand-in-hand, simply enjoying each other''s company.'
 		''
 	else
-		'<center><img src="images/nigma/gor/Lake/skver.autumn.night.jpg"></center>'
-		'Small autumnal square. It is quite cold at night, you cross your arms and rub them to stay warm. The very few people here are rushing home to the heat and warm cocoa.'
+		'<center><img src="images/nigma/gor/lake/skver.autumn.night.jpg"></center>'
+		'The main square of Pavlovsk Park. Autumn has come, and some of the trees are already shedding their leaves.'
+		'It gets quite cold at night, and you try to stay active to keep yourself warm. The lone soul you see running across the park is probably trying to get home faster, to warm up with some nice cocoa.'
 		''
 	end
 end
 if month=1 or month=2 or month=12:
 	if hour>=7 and hour<=16:
-		'<center><img src="images/nigma/gor/Lake/skver.winter.jpg"></center>'
-		'Little Square, where people often rest, walk and date and where kids come to play.'
-		'Everywhere snow, and kids can not miss this opportunity. They make snowmen and have snowball fights. Some grown-ups, feeling like children again, join them playing in the snow.'
+		'<center><img src="images/nigma/gor/lake/skver.winter.jpg"></center>'
+		'The main square of Pavlovsk Park. It''s winter, and the park is quite busy with locals and tourists alike.'
+		'There''s snow everywhere, and kids from the whole town have gathered here to make snowmen and enjoy snowball fights. Some of the adults are joining them, happy to play like kids again for just a moment.'
 		''
 	else
-		'<center><img src="images/nigma/gor/Lake/skver.winter.night.jpg"></center>'
-		'A cold night, there''s a much lower chance of meeting someone in a snowy park. People generally stay home in their warm, cozy homes. Only occasionally you might see an animal, out in search of food.'
+		'<center><img src="images/nigma/gor/lake/skver.winter.night.jpg"></center>'
+		'The main square of Pavlovsk Park. It''s winter, and the nights in Pavlovsk are very cold.'
+		'As you expected, the park is mostly deserted at this time of day. You occasionally see a wild animal, scrounging for food.'
 		''
 	end
 end
 
 *nl
 
-if hour > 8 and hour < 19:'Here is a small <a href="exec:minut += 5 & gt ''gskino''">Theater</a>'
+if hour > 8 and hour < 19:'There''s a small <a href="exec:minut += 5 & gt ''gskino''">movie theater</a> in the park. It only has a single screen.'
 
-if GvstreBoy = 1:'You can see that in the park walks <a href="exec:numnpc = SkverBoy & gt ''Gnpc''"><<$nameBoyfrend[SkverBoy]>></a>.'
-!!if kotovLoveQW > 0 and hour >= 18 and hour < 20 and week < 6 or week >= 6 and kotovLoveQW > 0 and hour >= 9 and hour < 20:'You see in the park sitting on the bench <a href="exec:minut += 3 & gt ''kotovEv''">Vitek Kotov</a> with Druganov and beer.'
+if GvstreBoy = 1:'You see <a href="exec:numnpc = SkverBoy & gt ''Gnpc''"><<$nameBoyfrend[SkverBoy]>></a> walking across the main square of Pavlovsk Park. He doesn''t look like he''s going anywhere in particular, and seems to just be enjoying his walk.'
+!!if kotovLoveQW > 0 and hour >= 18 and hour < 20 and week < 6 or week >= 6 and kotovLoveQW > 0 and hour >= 9 and hour < 20:'You see <a href="exec:minut += 3 & gt ''kotovEv''">Vitek Kotov</a> sitting on a bench in the park, drinking beer by himself. Judging from the empty bottles near the bench, he''s already had a few.'
 if StoryLine = 1 and BeInSchool > 0:
 	if hour >= 18 and hour < 20 and week < 6 or week >= 6 and hour >= 9 and hour < 20:
-		'You see in the park sitting on the bench <a href="exec:minut += 3 & gt ''gopskver''">Vitek Cats, Dan Ryzhov and Shul''ga.</a>'
+		'You see your classmates <a href="exec:minut += 3 & gt ''gopskver''">Vitek, Dan and Vasily</a> sitting on a park bench, drinking beer.'
 	end
 end
 
@@ -84,54 +88,54 @@ if rexPark = 1 and rexParkDay = daystart and hour >= 16 and hour < 18:
 end
 
 if hour > 6 and hour < 23 and month >= 5 and month <= 10:
-	act 'Rest on the bench':
+	act 'Sit down on the bench and rest':
 		cla
        	*clr
        	gs'time'
        	gs'stat'
         '<center><img src="images/lmps/сидит.jpg"></center>'
-		waiting = input ("How many minutes of sitting? (Not more 120 minutes)")
+		waiting = input ("How long would you like to rest? (No more than 120 minutes)")
 		if alco > 0:
-        	act 'Sleep on a bench':
+        	act 'Sleep on the park bench':
                 cla
                 *clr
-				health = health + 5
-				hapri = 0
-				InSleep = 1
-				cloth_vid = 0
-				if tanga = 1:tanga = 0
-				gs'time'
+			health = health + 5
+			hapri = 0
+			InSleep = 1
+			cloth_vid = 0
+			if tanga = 1:tanga = 0
+			gs'time'
                 '<center><img src="images/lmps/спитл.jpg"></center>'
         
-                if mop > 1:mop = 0 & vidageday = vidageday - 1 & 'Makeup smeared in the face, you think, that is harmful to the appearance of sleep with makeup, skin ages faster from this.'
+                if mop > 1:mop = 0 & vidageday = vidageday - 1 & 'Your make-up ended up getting smeared all across your face. You realize this is probably very bad for your skin, you really shouldn''t sleep before cleaning your face.'
         
-                'You slept through the night on a bench in the park, and surprisingly enough sleep itself.'
+                'You''re feeling tired, and decide to try and get some sleep on the park bench. To your surprise no one disturbs you, and you wake up feeling rested.'
                 ''
-		        act 'Up':
+		        act 'Get up':
 				cla
 				InSleep = 0
 				minut += 480
-				son = 100
+				son = 30
 				gt'gskver'
 			end
-        end
+        	end
 	end		
 
 		if waiting <= 0 or waiting > 120:
 			minut = minut + 15
 		elseif waiting > 0 and waiting <= 120:
-			minut += waiting
-			manna += 10
+			minut = minut + waiting
+			manna = manna + 10
 			willpower = willpower + 10
-			if son < 30 and waiting >= 60:son += 6
+			if son < 30:son += 2
 		end
 
-		act 'Consult a watch':gt curloc
+		act 'Check the time and get up from the bench':gt curloc
 	end	
 
 end
 
-act 'Walk (0:15)':
+act 'Go for a walk (0:15)':
 	cla
 	*clr
 	minut += 15
@@ -146,7 +150,7 @@ act 'Walk (0:15)':
 end
 
 if hour >= 8 and hour < 22:
-	act 'Distributing flyers to earn money (50 rubles) (1:00)':
+	act 'Distribute flyers to earn money (50 rubles) (1:00)':
 		cla
 		*clr
 		minut += 60
@@ -155,14 +159,14 @@ if hour >= 8 and hour < 22:
 		gs 'stat'
 		gs'time'
 		'<center><img src="images/etogame/flaer.jpg"></center>'
-		'You an hour handing out flyers park visitors. Then you got 50 rubles.'
+		'You spend an hour handing out flyers to park visitors, advertising something or another. You get paid 50 rubles for your efforts.'
 
-		act 'Move away':gt 'gskver'
+		act 'Continue':gt 'gskver'
 	end
 end
 
-if $clothingworntype = 'exercise' and hour > 5 and hour < 22 and daybegskver ! daystart:
-	act 'Run on the square (1:00)':
+if sport > 0 and hour > 5 and hour < 22 and daybegskver ! daystart:
+	act 'Go for a run in the park (1:00)':
 		cls
 		minut += 60
 		if salo > 3:salo -= rand(1, 3)
@@ -172,13 +176,13 @@ if $clothingworntype = 'exercise' and hour > 5 and hour < 22 and daybegskver ! d
 		daybegskver = daystart
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img src="images/etogame/parkbeg.jpg"></center>'
-		'You are within an hour running through the square'
+		'You prepare yourself for a nice run in the beautiful park of Pavlovsk, and pace yourself so you last for a full hour. You feel great after your run.'
 
-		act 'Further':place = 1 & Frend_num = 0 & gt 'placer'
+		act 'Continue':place = 1 & Frend_num = 0 & gt 'placer'
 	end
 end
 
-act 'Get out of the park':minut += 5 & gt 'gorodok'
+act 'Leave the park':minut += 5 & gt 'gorodok'
 
 --- gskver ---------------------------------
 

+ 175 - 133
locations/placer_act

@@ -6,45 +6,45 @@ if plact = 0:
 	gs 'BnameGen'
 
 	if Frend_num > 0:
-		$text_mod = ' Your girlfriend <<$ev_name>> introduces herself.'
+		$text_mod = ' Your girlfriend <<$ev_name>> introduces herself too.'
 	else
 		$text_mod = ''
 	end
 
-	'You stop and look at the guy who approached you, he introduces himself, "My name is <<$bname>>."'
-	'To which you reply, "I''m <<$name>>."'+$text_mod
+	'You stop and look at the guy who approached you. You don''t think you''ve ever seen him before. He introduces himself: "My name is <<$bname>>."'
+	'You smile as you reply: "I''m <<$name>>."'+$text_mod
 
 	if know_status = 2:
-		!!gopa
+		!!random Gopniks
 		if month=1 or month=2 or month=12 or month=11:
 			'<center><img src="images/gevent/skver_znacom_1.jpg"></center>'
 		else 
 			'<center><img src="images/gevent/skver_znacom_3.jpg"></center>'
 		end
-		'<<$bname>> invites you to join him for some beer.'
+		'<<$bname>> invites you: "Pleased to meet you, <<$name>>! Would you like to have a beer with me?"'
 
 		!!if Frend_num = 0:end
-		if Frend_num > 0:'<<$ev_name>> whispers to you "I''m not sure about this, we should go.."'
+		if Frend_num > 0:'<<$ev_name>> whispers to you: "I''m not so sure about this, <<$nickname>>! I think we should go..."'
 	else
-		!!norms
+		!!random normal guys
 		if month=1 or month=2 or month=12 or month=11:
 			'<center><img src="images/gevent/skver_znacom_1.jpg"></center>'
 		else 
-			'<center><img src="images/gevent/skver_znacom_2.jpg"></center>'
+			'<center><img src="images/gevent/skver_znacom_3.jpg"></center>'
 		end
-		'<<$bname>> invites you to join him for some beer.'
+		'<<$bname>> invites you: "Pleased to meet you, <<$name>>! Would you like to have a beer with me?"'
 
 		if kol_man = 1 and Frend_num > 0:
-			'<<$ev_name>> whispers to you "Interesting, who do you think he likes? You or me?"'
+			'<<$ev_name>> whispers to you: "Who do you think he likes more, <<$nickname>>? You or me?"'
 		elseif kol_man > 1:
-			'Vying for the guys attention, you invite the <<$kol_man_text>> to join you.'
-			if Frend_num > 0:'<<$ev_name>> whispers to you "They''re cute, let''s stay for a while."'
+			'Vying for the guys'' attention, you happily accept <<$bname>>''s invitation and introduce yourself to everyone.'
+			if Frend_num > 0:'<<$ev_name>> whispers to you: "They''re cute, <<$nickname>>! Let''s stay for a while and see what happens?"'
 		end
 	end
 
-	act 'Drink beer':plact = 1 & gt $curloc
+	act 'Drink some beer':plact = 1 & gt $curloc
 
-	if Frend_num = 0:act 'Leave':gt 'gskver'
+	if Frend_num = 0:act 'Decline and leave':gt 'gskver'
 
 	if Frend_num > 0:
 		act 'Leave with your friend':
@@ -54,10 +54,10 @@ if plact = 0:
 			if p_slut < 80:gt 'placer_end'
 
 			if p_slut >= 80:
-				'<<$ev_name>> whispers to you "Do not be such a bore, stay and have some fun."'
+				'<<$ev_name>> whispers to you: "Don''t be such a bore, <<$name>>! I want to stay, he''s cute! Come on, stay with me and live a little!"'
 
-				act 'Drink beer':plact = 1 & gt $curloc
-				act 'Leave alone':gt 'gskver'
+				act 'Drink some beer with them':plact = 1 & gt $curloc
+				act 'Leave your friend behind and go':gt 'gskver'
 
 				if dom > p_dom / 2:
 					act 'Drag your friend away':gt 'placer_end'
@@ -85,22 +85,22 @@ if plact = 1:
 	if kol_man = 1:$textsub2 = 'guy'
 	if kol_man > 1:$textsub2 = 'guys'
 
-	'You<<$textsub>> join the <<$textsub2>>. <<$bname>> pours beer into cups. You drink while the <<$kol_man_text>> mess around, chat and try to entertain you<<$textsub>>.'
+	'You<<$textsub>> join the <<$textsub2>> for some beers, and go to a more secluded area of the park. <<$bname>> pours beer into plastic cups and hands them out. The beer is nice and cold, and you<<$textsub>> have a chat with <<$bname>> while the <<$kol_man_text>> mess around.'
 
 	if know_status = 2:
-		!!gopa
+		!!gopniks in the park, 3-6
 		if Frend_num = 0:
 			if know_gor_slut = 0:
 				horny += 5
-				'One of the guys comes up to you from behind and puts his arm around your waist kissing your neck. The others drink beer and talk among themselves, without paying attention to you.'
+				'<<$bname>> excuses himself for a moment, and then surprises you when he comes up to you from behind. He puts his arms around your waist while kissing your neck. The other guys are mostly ignoring you and are talking among one another, though you do see one or two jealous glances from them.'
 
-				act 'Kiss':
+				act 'Kiss the guy':
 					cls
 					horny += 5
 					minut += 5
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/Ev/kiss.jpg"></center>'
-					'You kiss the man and his hands begin to stroke your body. "Come on you sweet little thing, let''s find some place more secluded."'
+					'You kiss <<$bname>> on his lips and embrace him, and soon his hands are exploring your body. He whispers to you: "Come on, you cute little thing... let''s go somewhere a bit more private" while he roughly kneads your ass through your clothes. His friends are watching you intently.'
 
 					if dom > 0:
 						act 'Refuse and leave':gt 'gskver'
@@ -114,20 +114,25 @@ if plact = 1:
 						gs 'cum_cleanup'
 						fbreath = 0
 						gs 'stat'
-						'Together with the guys you go down the street to a shabby looking house. One of the guys opens the door and leads everyone into an apartment. The boys quickly clear the table, put out vodka and artful snacks. The vodka is poured into glasses and one of them is handed to you. You drink the cheap vodka which taste a bit little rubber and eat anchovies from a bowl.'
+						'The guys holler when they hear you agree... you guess they''re just happy for their friend?'
+						'<<$bname>> takes you by the hand, and you walk down the street with the group of Gopniks. They lead you to a shabby house, and let you in.'
+						'The boys quickly clear the empty beer bottles from the table, and put out some vodka and snacks. The vodka is poured into glasses, and <<$bname>> offers you one with a generous smile.'
+						'You slam it down, feeling a shiver run down your spine when you feel the vodka slide down towards your stomach. It doesn''t taste particularly well, but you figure it would be rude to not accept their hospitality. You have a few bits of anchovies from a bowl while you talk to the guys. All of them are suddenly showing far more interest in you than before.'
 
-						act 'Further':gt 'gopnik_house'
+						act 'Continue':gt 'gopnik_house'
 					end
 				end
 
-				act 'Step_back':
+				act 'Ask him to stop touching you':
 					cls
 					minut += 5
 					gs 'stat'
-					'You pull away from the guy avoiding the kiss and remove his hands.'
+					'You push <<$bname>>''s hands away from your body, and quietly whisper to him: "Please, stop touching me like that! Do you treat all girls like this?"'
 
 					if rand(0, 2) = 0:
-						'One of the guys says "In short boys, beer is for children, let''s be men and drink vodka." He produces a bottle of vodka and the others enthusiastically support this idea and one of the guys runs off somewhere and returns with snacks and plastic cups. The boys pour vodka into plastic cups, one of them is handed to you.'
+						'One of his friends pulls out a bottle of vodka from his backpack, and says: "Come on guys, beer is for kids! Today we drink like men!"'
+						'His friends cheer loudly, while another guy quickly runs off to gather some snacks and plastic cups, which the guy who brought the vodka forgot for some reason.'
+						'Soon his friend returns with the cups, and the vodka is poured out into the plastic cups. When they hand out the cups, you notice that yours has a fair bit more vodka in it than the cups the guys get.'
 
 						act 'Drink':
 							cls
@@ -137,12 +142,14 @@ if plact = 1:
 							gs 'cum_cleanup'
 							fbreath = 0
 							gs 'stat'
-							'You drink the cheap vodka which taste a little like rubber and eat some anchovies from a jar. Your cup is immediately filled with more vodka, and the boys try to persuade you to drink it.'
+							'You smile at the guys and propose a toast: "To meeting new friends!"'
+							'They happily toast with you. You eat some anchovies from a jar that someone brought, while you take sips of your vodka. It''s the cheap kind, and it doesn''t taste very good.'
+							'When your cup is nearly empty, <<$bname>> generously pours more in your glass with a confident smile. The guys persuade you to keep drinking, saying how much they are enjoying you spending time with them.'
 
 							if dom > 0:
-								act 'Refuse to drink and leave':gt 'gskver'
+								act 'Refuse to drink more and leave':gt 'gskver'
 							end
-							act 'Drink':
+							act 'Keep drinking':
 								cls
 								minut += 5
 								alko += 3
@@ -150,21 +157,24 @@ if plact = 1:
 								gs 'cum_cleanup'
 								fbreath = 0
 								gs 'stat'
-								'You drink another cup of cheap vodka which still tastes like rubber and eat some more anchovies.'
+								'You smile at them and bring the cup to your lips, slowly sipping it down. It still doesn''t taste very good, but you''re starting to care less as you become more and more drunk.'
 
 								if alko < 6:
-									'You feel very drunk, but are still able to think. A few guys pick reach under your arms and pick you up, then lead you from the square, soon the whole group of you came to a house and walk down some steps to the basement, where they lay you on a dirty mattress.'
+									'The vodka has you feeling quite drunk, but you are still able to think. At a certain point in the conversation, you see the smiles on the Gopniks'' faces make place for rather greedy grins. Suddenly everyone''s looking at you, ogling your body from top to bottom.'
+									'A few of the guys approach you and pick you up, despite your meek protests. You''re too drunk to really resist, and just let it happen. They carry you towards one of the old houses in the area, and help you down the stairs to the basement. While they carry you there, one of them hisses to you: "You''ve made use of our hospitality for long enough, <<$name>>... it''s time you do something for us in return."'
+									'You guess this is what they do with all the unlucky girls they meet in the park. The basement they guide you to smells horrible. The smell of sewage makes you sick to your stomach, while the guys push you down onto the sole mattress in the basement.'
 								elseif alko >= 6:
-									'You feel dizzy and the earth starts to slip away from under your feet. Several strong hands grip you and you are dragged somewhere. You could not focus your vision and aren''t sure where they have brought you. This place smells like sewerage, so much so that you start to feel sick.'
+									'You feel very dizzy, and your vision is a bit blurry now. Suddenly you feel a few strong hands on your arms, pulling you up. You try to ask them where they are taking you, but the guys just grin and tell you not to worry as they leave the park with you between them. You have no clue where they''re taking you, but after a few minutes you''re dumped onto a dirty mattress. The room you''re in smells horrible, you begin to feel sick from the obnoxious sewage odour.'
 								end
 
-								act 'Further':gt 'podval_rape'
+								act 'Continue':gt 'podval_rape'
 							end
 						end
 
 						act 'Leave':gt 'gskver'
 					elseif rand(0, 1) = 0:
-						'One of the guys said "Come on boys, why hang around in the square all night? The flat is free, let''s go back there." They all raise their cups and cheer, you take that as a yes.'
+						'One of the guys suggests: "Hey guys, we don''t have to hang around in the park all day! The house should be available right now, maybe we can show <<$name>> around there and not have people stare us down all day!"'
+						'The guys all raise their cups and cheer, which you''re pretty sure counts as a yes. The boys then all look at you expectantly, hoping you will come with them.'
 
 						act 'Go with the guys':
 							cls
@@ -174,28 +184,33 @@ if plact = 1:
 							gs 'cum_cleanup'
 							fbreath = 0
 							gs 'stat'
-							'Together with the guys you go down the street to a shabby house. One of the guys opens the door and leads you all into an apartment. The boys quickly clear the table, put out vodka and artful snacks. The vodka is poured into glasses and one of them is handed to you. You drink the cheap vodka which taste a bit little rubber and eat anchovies from a bowl.'
+							'You''re having a good time with them... why not? You nod at the guys and smile as you say: "Sounds like fun, guys! Let''s go!"'
+							'The guys leave the park with you in the middle of their group, happily chatting about everyday things while they guide you to a shabby old house. One of them produces a key, and you follow them inside.'
+							'It''s a rather poorly maintained house, but you don''t want to be rude and take a seat on a chair while some of the guys are busy putting out some snacks and pouring vodka into glasses. You notice that your glass has a lot more vodka in it than the other guys get, but don''t think much of it... maybe they''re just trying to be nice?'
+							'The boys drain their glasses quickly, and encourage you to do the same. You bravely follow their lead, and swallow down the vodka with one large gulp.'
 
-							act 'further':gt 'gopnik_house'
+							act 'Continue':gt 'gopnik_house'
 						end
 
-						act 'Leave':gt 'gskver'
+						act 'Mumble an excuse and leave':gt 'gskver'
 					else
-						'One of the guys said "Come on boys, why hang around in the square all night? I know a place, there''s noone there so we can drink in peace." After exchanging looks and nods the proposal is accepted.'
+						'One of the guys suggests: "Hey guys, there''s no need for us to hang around in the park all day. I know a place where we can hang out and enjoy a drink in private!"'
+						'After some debate, the guys agree to go there. From some of the stares your group has been getting while you enjoyed your drinks, you can''t blame them. They all look at you expectantly, hoping you will come with them.'
 
 						act 'Go with the guys':
 							cls
 							minut += 5
 							gs 'stat'
-							'Together with the guys you go down the street to a shabby house. One of the guys leads you all down a few steps to the basement.'
+							'You agree to join them, and the Gopniks happily guide you out of the park. You walk for a few minutes, until you stop in front of a shabby looking house. To your surprise, they don''t open the door to the house, but walk around the back and open an unlocked trap door to a basement.'
 
 							act 'Follow them into the basement':
 								cls
 								minut += 5
 								gs 'stat'
-								'You go into the dark basement, the floor is damp and it smells of sewage. In the corner you see a shabby mattress and a bunch of empty bottles. All friendliness has disappeared gone from the guys and one of them splashs some vodka into a glass and hands it to you, saying roughly. "Drink this."'
+								'You walk down the stairs after them, and enter the basement. It''s dark, damp and smells of sewage. When someone flicks on a light, you see that the room holds little more than a soiled mattress and a lot of empty bottles.'
+								'When you look at the Gopniks to ask what''s going on, you cal tell that all friendliness is gone from their faces. Ohe of them splashes vodka into some glasses and hands you one: "Drink this, slut. You''re going to need it."'
 
-								act 'Drink':
+								act 'Drink the vodka':
 									cls
 									minut += 5
 									alko += 3
@@ -203,9 +218,9 @@ if plact = 1:
 									gs 'cum_cleanup'
 									fbreath = 0
 									gs 'stat'
-									'You drink the shot and your thoughts seem foggy and the ground is shaking and rumbling underfoot. You are helped to sit down on the dirty mattress on the floor.'
+									'As soon as you gulp down the vodka, the guys laugh and you feel several hands firmly grasping your shoulders, guiding you towards the dirty mattress. Several of the boys instantly reach for their pants, and you see their erect cocks clearly despite the dim light in the room.'
 
-									act 'Further':gt 'podval_rape'
+									act 'Continue':gt 'podval_rape'
 								end
 
 								act 'Refuse to drink':
@@ -213,9 +228,11 @@ if plact = 1:
 									minut += 5
 									manna = 0
 									gs 'stat'
-									'You refused the drink and one of the guys grabs your arm firmly and tosses you onto the mattress.'
+									'You refuse to accept the drink, hoping they will let you go. Of course, they have no intentions of doing so.'
+									'The guy shrugs: "Suit yourself, slut. You''re getting fucked either way."'
+									'He takes the glass out of your hand, and two guys grab you by your shoulders and roughly push you down onto the mattress.'
 
-									act 'Further':gt 'podval_rape'
+									act 'Continue':gt 'podval_rape'
 								end
 							end
 
@@ -224,9 +241,11 @@ if plact = 1:
 								minut += 5
 								manna = 0
 								gs 'stat'
-								'You refuse to go down to the basement and decide to leave. As soon as you turn around you are grabbed by the arm and forcfully dragged into the dark basement. The floor is damp and it smells of sewage. You are thrown onto a dirty mattress on the floor .'
+								'Wait... what? This looks way too shady for you.'
+								'You refuse to go down there, and thank the boys for the nice time in the park before you try to leave. However, as soon as you turn around, you feel several arms grabbing you from behind and dragging you down the stairs quite forcefully. The basement smells like sewage, and has little more than a dirty mattress in it. You feel quite stupid now; you''re probably not the first girl who they took down here, and you fear you won''t be the last.'
+								'The guys roughly shove you down onto the mattress, and pull their erect cocks out of their pants. One of them snarls at you: "You''re not going anywhere until you take care of us all, whore."'
 
-								act 'Further':gt 'podval_rape'
+								act 'Continue':gt 'podval_rape'
 							end
 						end
 
@@ -234,18 +253,19 @@ if plact = 1:
 					end
 				end
 			elseif know_gor_slut = 1 and BjBeerQW > 1 and bjgangrand = 1:
-					'One of the guys said,: "I know her, same <<$gnikname>> <<$name>>, that sucks for beer, my buddy showed a video where they fall in her natolkali entire company and all eblo obstruhali.' 
-					'And then it is such a mother sends greetings, finally rzhaka."'
-					'Another guy came, You took the chin. You twitched, but he slapped you across the face: "Softly, bitch, place".'
-					'Then you pulled the lip with your finger and laughed: "I love huesosok with nice face and whorish <<$lipbalmstat3>> <<$liptalk>>, it is a pleasure to fuck them in the mouth".' 
-					'You took your hands on both sides. "Come, Spent beer"'
+					'One of the guys suddenly laughs: "Wait a minute, I know her! That''s <<$name>>, everyone knows she''s a <<$gnikname>>. She gives guys blowjobs just to get a beer! My buddy showed me a video where they gave like three guys a blowjob, and then happily said hi to her mother with the cum still on her face!"' 
+					'One of the other guys approaches you, and puts his hand on your chin while he takes a good look at your face. When he sees you flinch, he slaps you across the face quite hard. He orders you: "Don''t move, bitch."'
+					'You''re too afraid to fight him, and just let him do what he wants while he runs his fingers over your lips and slips a finger inside your mouth, which you begin to suck on without even giving it any thought.'
+					'He laughs: "I love a nice slut with a pretty face and <<$liptalk>>. Fucking them in the mouth and watching them gag on my cock... I can see you''re eager to get started. Soon enough, slut. Soon enough."' 
+					'Two of them put their hands on your upper arms and shoulders, and roughly guide you towards the exit of the park: "Walk, slut. We''ll go some place quiet, so you can earn your beer."'
 
-				act 'Go "work"':
+				act 'Go ''earn your beer''':
 					cls
 					gs'stat'
 
-					'You went with the guys, and they have taken away from the square to one inconspicuous little house, where one of the guys opened the door to the basement and looked in, then you are taken to a dimly lit basement.' 
-					'You saw the empty bottles and dirty mattress on the ground. One of the guys came to you "Well, Star home video, on her knees mouth pipe" and began to unbutton his pants.'
+					'The guys have a firm grip on you as they guide you out of the park and towards a shabby looking house. You probably couldn''t run away even if you wanted to, so you meekly let them guide you to a trap door at the back of the house. One of them quickly goes down to check, and then signals his friends: "We''re clear. Bring her in, guys."'
+					'The guys firmly pull you down the stairs, and push you down onto a dirty mattress as you enter the room. When you look around you notice there''s nothing here besides the mattress, and a whole lot of empty booze bottles. They must use this place more often, and you wonder how many poor girls have already met a similar fate on this mattress before you.'
+					'Several of the guys pull their pants down and expose their erect cocks, while one of them grins at you: "Well now, movie star! We know you''re good at this, so we expect a top notch performance from you. If you don''t satisfy us, we''ll just have you stay a while longer while we think of something else you can do for us."'
 
 					act 'Kneel down and open your mouth':
 						cls
@@ -260,29 +280,33 @@ if plact = 1:
 						gs'stat'
 
 						'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/placer/blowbang2.jpg"></center>'
-						'You sat down on his haunches and surrounded you guys took out their members, you start to suck them diligently what poocheredi, then simultaneously, sometimes helping hands like a real mnogostanochnitsa.' 
-						'Guys did not last long and went down on your face covering his sperm. One of the guys hit you right in the eye.'
+						'You realize the only way you''re getting out of this basement is by doing as they say, and you slowly get down to your knees. The guys see your resignation, and enthusiastically begin to rub their cocks against your cheeks, spreading their precum all over you. You close your lips around the closest one and diligently suck him off. After a while you really start to get into it, and reach out for two additional cocks to masturbate with your hands while your mouth is busy.'
+						'You even exceed their expectations by taking two cocks in your mouth at the same time, doing your best to make them all cum as quick as possible. They tell you to look them in the eye as they shoot their warm loads all over your face one by one. One of them is particularly mean, aiming directly at your eye. His friends cheer when a spurt of cum lands directly in it.'
 							
-						act 'Rub your eyes':
+						act 'Wipe the cum from your eye':
 							cla
 							cls
 							'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/placer/blowbang<<blowbangrand>>.jpg"></center>'
-							'While you`re discouraged sit on your lap and rub tears and semen on her cheeks, they continued to mock and brought a humiliating sign on your forehead.' 
-							'-"It is to such a slut like you, I did not forget their place" - said the boys. Are you ready to burn with shame, but did not dare to contradict them. Plenty pokurazhitsya they finally let you go.'
+							'You wince, trying to wipe the cum from your eye. It stings quite badly, and you feel your eyes tearing up.'
+							'The Gopniks don''t care, and write some humiliating text on your forehead with a marker they found somewhere.'
+							'One of them says: "We''re doing you a favor, slut. This way, everyone will recognize you for what you are, and it will help you remember your place."'
+							'You feel deeply humiliated, but are too embarrassed to contradict them. After a few more minutes of degrading talk, they finally let you leave the basement."'
 			
-							act 'Escape':gt'gskver'
+							act 'Find your way back to the main streets':gt'gskver'
 						end
 					end
 				end
 			elseif know_gor_slut = 1:
-				'One of the guys said "Slysh <<$name>>, we''re up to date, what do you <<$gnikname>>". Another guy came up to you "In_short, nipple, Now let''s go to one place and will show you where your skills. Will balk, get the teeth, all clear?"'
+				'One of the guys tells you: "<<$name>>, we all know you''re a <<$gnikname>>". One of his friends pitches in: "In other words: we''re going to some place quiet and we''re going to fuck you. Cause trouble and we''ll knock your teeth out. Understood?"'
 
 				act 'Go with the guys':
 					cls
 					gs 'stat'
-					'You went with the guys , where one of the guys opened the basement door and looked in, then you took the floor in a dark basement. You saw the empty bottles and dirty mattress on the ground. One of the guys came to you "Well nipple, Come to work." and began to unbutton his pants.'
+					'You meekly nod, knowing you can''t stand up to all of them. Just doing what they want is probably your easiest way out of here.'
+					'They guide you to a shabby house near the park, and guide you down into the basement below the house. Besides a dirty mattress and a lot of empty bottles, the basement is empty.'
+					'Several of them already drop their pants, revealing their stiff cocks. One of them tells you: "You know why you''re here, slut. Get to work."'
 
-					act 'To squat':
+					act 'Squat before them':
 						cls
 						bj += kol_man
 						guy += kol_man
@@ -291,50 +315,55 @@ if plact = 1:
 						gang += 1
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/placer/blowbang.jpg"></center>'
-						'You sat on his haunches and surrounded you guys took out their members, you started sucking them like a real nadrachivat mnogostanochnitsa. The guys did not last long and took turns to finish on your face covering his sperm.'
+						'You obediently squat before them, and take two cocks into your hands. You masturbate them slowly, spreading their precum over them as you close your lips around the first.'
+						'You do your best to please them all as good as you can, and suck them off one by one like your life depended on it. For all you know, maybe it does.'
+						'The guys don''t last long at all, and cum all over your face one by one. Once the last guy is spent, they wave you off. One of them snorts: "Not bad, slut. I see your reputation is well deserved."'
 
-						act 'Leave':gt 'gskver'
+						act 'Leave the basement and return to the park':gt 'gskver'
 					end
 				end
 			end
 		elseif Frend_num > 0:
 			if know_gor_slut = 0:
 				horny += 5
-				'One of the guys came up to your friend and hugged her. Another guy pretty Unleashed came up to you and grabbed your waist.'
+				'You see one of the guys come behind to your friend, closing his arms around her in a bear grip as he kisses her neck. Another guy does the same to you, and kisses your neck quite aggressively while he has a tight grip on your waist.'
 
-				act 'kiss':
+				act 'Kiss him':
 					cls
 					gs 'stat'
-					'You began to kiss a guy and he started to touch you. Other guys have offered to go to the hut continue the fun.'
+					'You kiss the guy passionately, and just try to enjoy him groping your body. In the corner of your eye you see <<$ev_name>> receiving a similar treatment, several more guys gathering around the two of you. They''re all pawing at your ass and boobs greedily, and suggest you go with them to their home for some more fun.'
 
 					act 'Go with the guys':gt 'placer_gop_orgy'
 				end
 
-				act 'Go with a friend':
+				act 'Grab your friend and leave':
 					cls
 					gs 'stat'
-					'You are estranged from Gopnik and skazale girlfriend, that are on the go. <<$ev_name>> also became a going away.'
+					'You can''t do this! You break free from the Gopniks and quickly take <<$ev_name>>''s hand. You drag her along as you walk away from the Gopniks. She''s a bit reluctant to leave them at first, but trusts your judgement enough to follow you without objections.'
 
-					act 'Leave':gt 'placer_end'
+					act 'Leave the park':gt 'placer_end'
 				end
 
 				exit
 			end
 
 			if know_gor_slut = 1:
-				'One of the guys said "Slysh <<$name>>, we''re up to date, what do you <<$gnikname>>, polyubasu your girlfriend too." Another guy came up to you. "In short nipples, Now let''s go to one place, and there you are with a friend show their skills. will abut, get the teeth, all clear?"'
+				'One of the guys says: "<<$name>>, we all know you''re a whore. If your little girlfriend is with you, we can only assume she is, too."'
+				'Another guy pitches in: "In other words: you and your girlfriend are going to entertain us at our place. If you''re good enough, we''ll let you go afterwards."'
 
 				act 'Go with the guys':gt 'placer_gop_orgy'
 
-				act 'Go with a friend':
+				act 'Try to leave with your friend':
 					cls
 					gs 'stat'
-					'You stated that Gopnik not going anywhere, guys started coming to you threateningly "Hey sheep, ohuel you something? You nicho not beguiled? You eblische something break?" One of them grabbed you by the hand.'
+					'You firmly tell the guys: "I don''t think so guys, we''re not going anywhere with you."'
+					'Several of them surround <<$ev_name>>, and threaten you: "We weren''t asking, bitch. Either you''re coming with us to share the load, or your cute little friend here is going to have to satisfy all of us by herself. You probably won''t see her again today in that case, we''re going to need her services for quite a while if she has to do it all alone."'
+					'You can see <<$ev_name>>''s eyes widen, giving you a begging look. It''s quite obvious she is feeling very intimidated, and really doesn''t want to go with them by herself.'
 
 					act 'Go with the guys':gt 'placer_gop_orgy'
 
 					if dom > 20:
-						act 'Leave':gt 'placer_end'
+						act 'Talk them down and leave with your friend':gt 'placer_end'
 					end
 				end
 
@@ -352,33 +381,37 @@ if plact = 1:
 		if kol_man = 1:
 			if Frend_num = 0 and kol_man = 1:
 				if slut_vid > 0:
-					'A guy came up to you and hug you.'
+					'The guy comes up to you, and aggressively kisses you on your mouth.'
 
-					act 'kiss':
+					act 'Kiss him back':
 						cls
 						gs 'stat'
-						'You began to kiss a guy, he took you by the hand and led somewhere, you were in the bushes with a guy. He unbuttoned his pants and pulled out his already erect member.'
+						'That came a bit out of the blue... but wow, he''s a good kisser! You kiss the guy back enthusiastically.'
+						'After a while he takes you by the hand, and leads you to some bushes. Before you know what''s going on, he pulls down his pants. His erect cock comes jumping out, bouncing lightly. He looks at you with a meaningful look on his face, expecting you to service it.'
 
-						act 'hey! What are you doing?':
+						act '"Hey, what are you doing!?"':
 							cls
 							gs 'stat'
-							'You angrily yelled at the guy "Hey?" The guy smiled "Come virginity something of themselves to build, smeared like a cheap whore, hodish here in the park, snimaeshsya. Come shorter, not my my brain."'
+							'You angrily exclaim: "Hey, are you crazy!? What''s the meaning of this?"'
+							'The guy just grins at you: "Everyone knows you''re a whore, <<$name>>. We''ve all seen the video... it''s way too late for you to start being a prude now. Come on, it''d only take a minute. What do you say?"'
 							dynamic $d_park_placer_bj
 
-							act 'Leave':gt 'gskver'
+							act 'Refuse and leave':gt 'gskver'
 						end
 
-						act 'Are you crazy? And if someone sees?':
+						act '"Are you crazy? What if someone sees?"':
 							cls
 							gs 'stat'
-							'You hissed angrily at the guy "Are you crazy? And if someone sees?" The guy smiled, "Come, no one is".'
+							'You hiss angrily at the guy: "Are you crazy? What if someone sees us here?"'
+							'The guy smiles: "Look around, <<$name>>! We''re alone, we''ll be fine!"'
 
-							act 'I can not do':
+							act '"Not here, sorry"':
 								cls
 								gs 'stat'
-								'You have flatly refused to be engaged than something similar in a public place and the guy offered to go to him.'
+								'You look at the guy with disbelief and tell him: "Look... you''re kind of cute, but there''s no way I would do that in a public place like this."'
+								'The guy still smiles, and offers: "Well... how about we go to my place then? No one will be able to see us there!"'
 
-								act 'Go to guy':
+								act 'Go to his place':
 									cls
 									gs 'stat'
 									tiperand = rand(0, 1)
@@ -388,7 +421,7 @@ if plact = 1:
 									if tiperand = 2:gt 'fbGar'
 								end
 
-								act 'Leave':gt 'gskver'
+								act 'Refuse and leave':gt 'gskver'
 							end
 
 							dynamic $d_park_placer_bj
@@ -397,9 +430,9 @@ if plact = 1:
 						dynamic $d_park_placer_bj
 					end
 				else
-					'The guy offered you to go to his apartment.'
+					'The guy offers: "Hey babe... how about you and I go back to my place? I bet we could have some fun together, no one would disturb us..."'
 
-					act 'Go to guy':
+					act 'Go to his place':
 						cls
 						gs 'stat'
 						tiperand = rand(0, 1)
@@ -411,19 +444,19 @@ if plact = 1:
 				end
 			elseif Frend_num > 0 and kol_man = 1:
 				if tiploverand = 0:
-					'While you''re having fun and drinking beer <<$bname>> pay attention to you more often, than your girlfriend. When the beer was over .'
+					'You''re having fun, drinking beers with your friend and the guy you just met. After a while you realize that he is mostly just paying attention to you though, while pretending your friend <<$ev_name>> isn''t there.'
 
-					act 'kiss':
+					act 'Kiss the guy':
 						cls
 						gs 'stat'
-						'Man whispering in your ear "Come to my <<$name>>."'
+						'<<$bname>> whispers in your ear: "Come on <<$name>>, let''s go to my place..."'
 
 						if p_slut < 50:
-							'<<$ev_name>> seems to have understood all "Fair_Enough, until the light, I''ll go home."'
+							'<<$ev_name>> seems to understand where this is going, and nods at you: "Okay, <<$name>>... I guess I should leave the two of you alone. I''ll see you later?"'
 
-							act 'Go with a friend':gt 'placer_end'
+							act 'Leave with your friend':gt 'placer_end'
 
-							act 'Go to guy':
+							act 'Say goodbye and go with the guy':
 								cls
 								gs 'stat'
 								tiperand = rand(0, 2)
@@ -433,26 +466,26 @@ if plact = 1:
 								if tiperand = 2:gt 'fbGar'
 							end
 						elseif p_slut >= 50:
-							'<<$ev_name>> smiled and licked her lips "And take me with you?"'
+							'<<$ev_name>> smiles as she licks her lips: "He''s cute, <<$name>>... take me with you?"'
 
-							act 'Go the whole company at the apartment':minut += 5 & gt 'placer_house'
+							act 'Go to his apartment together':minut += 5 & gt 'placer_house'
 						end
 					end
 				elseif tiploverand = 1:
-					'While you''re having fun and drinking beer <<$bname>> pay attention to your girlfriend more often, than you. When the beer was over .'
+					'You''re having fun, drinking beers with your friend and the guy you just met. After a while you realize that he is mostly just paying attention to <<$ev_name>> though, while pretending you are not there.'
 
-					act 'watch':
+					act 'See what happens':
 						cls
 						gs 'stat'
 
 						if p_slut < 30:
-							'<<$ev_name>> kissed Man ​​refused and suggested you go.'
+							'<<$ev_name>> kisses the guy for a while, but when he whispers something to her she apologizes to him: "Sorry, <<$bname>>... I can''t just leave <<$name>> hanging. We should be going."'
 
-							act 'Go with a friend':gt 'placer_end'
+							act 'Leave with your friend':gt 'placer_end'
 						end
 
 						if p_slut >= 30 and p_slut < 60:
-							'<<$ev_name>> kissing a guy and he starts to caress her whispering something in her ear. <<$ev_name>> turns to you and says, she goes to the guy to visit.'
+							'<<$ev_name>> kisses the guy, and he begins to grope her body. She quickly whispers something in his ear, and you see him nod. Then <<$ev_name>> turns to you: "Sorry <<$name>>, <<$bname>> promised me he''d show me his cool rock collection. His apartment is small though, there''d be no room for the both of us... I''ll see you later?"'
 
 							if Frend_num = 14:
 								KatjaLust += 10
@@ -463,12 +496,12 @@ if plact = 1:
 								KatjaBJ += 1
 							end
 
-							act 'Leave':gt 'gskver'
+							act 'Watch her leave with the stranger':gt 'gskver'
 						elseif p_slut >= 60:
-							'<<$ev_name>> kissing a guy and he starts to caress her whispering something in her ear. <<$ev_name>> turns to you and offers you innocently "Well <<$name>>, you''re with us?"'
+							'<<$ev_name>> kisses the guy, and he begins to grope her body. She quickly whispers something in his ear, and you see him nod. Then <<$ev_name>> turns to you and asks innocently: "Hey <<$name>>... <<$bname>> asks if you want to come with us for some fun. What do you say?"'
 
-							act 'Leave':gt 'gskver'
-							act 'Go the whole company at the apartment':minut += 5 & gt 'placer_house'
+							act 'Refuse and tell her to have fun':gt 'gskver'
+							act 'Go to his apartment together':minut += 5 & gt 'placer_house'
 						end
 					end
 				end
@@ -476,15 +509,16 @@ if plact = 1:
 		elseif kol_man > 1:
 			if Frend_num = 0:
 				if slut_vid > 0:
-					if kol_man = 2:$textsub = 'The second guy looks at you with interest.'
-					if kol_man > 2:$textsub = 'The other guys looking at you with interest'
+					if kol_man = 2:$textsub = 'The second guy looks at you knowingly, as if he recognizes you from somewhere. He has a greedy look in his eyes.'
+					if kol_man > 2:$textsub = 'The other guys look at you knowingly, as if they recognize you from somewhere. They have greedy looks in their eyes.'
 
-					'One of the guys came up to you and hug. <<$textsub>>.'
+					'<<$bname>> comes up to you, and aggressively kisses you on your mouth while he hugs you. <<$textsub>>.'
 
-					act 'kiss':
+					act 'Kiss him back':
 						cls
 						gs 'stat'
-						'Guys suggested you go to their apartment.'
+						'His lips taste like the beer you''ve both been drinking. You ease up against him and kiss him back, happy to surrender to him for just one moment. The guy feels your body relax and begins to grope your ass greedily, hoping he can get you to put out more.'
+						'When you don''t object, he pulls away and asks you: "Hey, <<$name>>... you''re cute! We''re staying in a hostel just minutes away from the park. Want to come party with us there?"'
 
 						act 'Go with the guys':
 							cls
@@ -495,52 +529,60 @@ if plact = 1:
 							minut += 30
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/placer/drunk.jpg"></center>'
-							'You went to the hostel with the guys, on the way the guys still have bought booze. The room was almost nothing, only a few iron beds. The boys began to thump, all pouring and pouring you. Soon. Through gripped you feel you intoxication, that you dragged clothing.'
+							'The guys cheer when you say you''ll come with them, and <<$bname>> takes your hand while he guides you out of the park. You make a quick stop at a liquor store, so one of the guys can buy some booze for the party.'
+							'When you enter the hostel room, you see it has nothing but a few iron beds for furniture. <<$bname>> pulls you down onto a bed with him, and begins to make out with you again while another guy pours the booze into some glasses and hands everyone a glass.'
+							'The guys can stomach their alcohol a lot better than you, and before you know it you''re absolutely hammered. They look like they''re still feeling fine.'
+							'Once they realize you''re drunk enough for them to make their move, they begin tugging at your clothes and undress you on one of their beds. You''re too drunk to tell them to stop, and just let it happen.'
 
-							act 'further':gt 'placer_sex'
+							act 'Continue':gt 'placer_sex'
 						end
 					end
 				else
-					'Guys suggested you go to their apartment.'
+					'<<$bname>> comes up to you, and aggressively kisses you on your mouth while he hugs you.'
+					'His lips taste like the beer you''ve both been drinking. You ease up against him and kiss him back, happy to surrender to him for just one moment. The guy feels your body relax and begins to grope your ass greedily, hoping he can get you to put out more.'
+					'When you don''t object, he pulls away and asks you: "Hey, <<$name>>... you''re cute! We''re staying in a hostel just minutes away from the park. Want to come party with us there?"'
 
 					act 'Go with the guys':
 						cls
-						alko += 20
+						alko += 10
 						cumspclnt = 2
 						gs 'cum_cleanup'
 						fbreath = 0
 						minut += 30
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/placer/drunk.jpg"></center>'
-						'You went to the hostel with the guys, on the way the guys still have bought booze. The room was almost nothing, only a few iron beds. The boys began to thump, all pouring and pouring you. Soon. Through gripped you feel you intoxication, that you dragged clothing.'
+						'The guys cheer when you say you''ll come with them, and <<$bname>> takes your hand while he guides you out of the park. The group makes a quick stop at a liquor store, so one of the guys can buy some booze for the party.'
+						'When you enter the hostel room, you see it has nothing but a few iron beds for furniture. <<$bname>> pulls you down onto a bed with him, and begins to make out with you again while another guy pours the booze into some glasses and hands everyone a glass.'
+						'The guys can stomach their alcohol a lot better than you, and before you know it you''re absolutely hammered. They look like they''re still feeling fine.'
+						'Once they realize you''re drunk enough for them to make their move, they begin to take off your clothes and undress you on one of their beds. You''re too drunk to tell them to stop, and just let it happen.'
 
-						act 'further':gt 'placer_sex'
+						act 'Continue':gt 'placer_sex'
 					end
 				end
 			elseif Frend_num > 0:
 				if slut_vid > 0:
-					'One of the guys came up to you and hug, you also noticed, that other guy came up to your friend and hugged her.'
+					'You see one of the guys come behind to your friend, closing his arms around her in a bear grip as he kisses her neck. Another guy does the same to you, and kisses your neck quite aggressively while he has a tight grip on your waist.'
 
-					act 'kiss':
+					act 'Kiss him':
 						cls
 						horny += 10
 						minut += 5
 						gs 'stat'
-						'You started to kiss a guy and his hands began to fumble through the body, corner of your eye you notice <<$ev_name>> Man kisses too. The guy broke the kiss and offered to go to his apartment or continue to rest all together.'
+						'You kiss the guy passionately, and just try to enjoy him groping your body. In the corner of your eye you see <<$ev_name>> receiving a similar treatment, several more guys gathering around the two of you. They''re all pawing at your ass and boobs greedily, and suggest you go with them to their home for some more fun. <<$bname>> whispers in your ear: "Want to go to my place, babe? We can get some alone time there... or we can bring your friend along and all go there together?"'
 
-						act 'Go the whole company at the apartment':minut += 5 & gt 'placer_house'
-						act 'Go to guy for him':minut += 5 & gt 'placer_house_one'
+						act 'Bring your friend along and go to their place':minut += 5 & gt 'placer_house'
+						act 'Go with him for some alone time, leaving your friend':minut += 5 & gt 'placer_house_one'
 					end
 				else
-					'Guys have offered you my friend and go to their apartment.'
+					'You see one of the guys move up behind your friend, closing his arms around her in a bear grip as he kisses her neck. Another guy does the same to you, and kisses your neck quite aggressively while he has a tight grip on your waist. <<$bname>> whispers in your ear: "Hey babe... how about you and your friend come back to my place? I bet we could have some fun together..."'
 
 					act 'Go with the guys':
 						cls
 						minut += 5
 						gs 'stat'
-						'You are the whole company went to the apartment of one of the guys'
+						'You leave the park with <<$ev_name>> and the guys, and chat with them while they lead you to their apartment.'
 
-						act 'further':gt 'placer_house'
+						act 'Continue':gt 'placer_house'
 					end
 				end
 			end
@@ -550,7 +592,7 @@ if plact = 1:
 	gs 'stat'
 
 	if Frend_num = 0:
-		act 'Leave':
+		act 'Turn around and walk away':
 			cls
 			gs 'stat'
 
@@ -559,7 +601,8 @@ if plact = 1:
 
 				if slut_vid > 0:
 					if know_status = 2:
-						'Man angrily remarked "And the fig then has made up like a whore?"'
+						'<<$bname>> disappointedly remarks: "We know you''re a whore... why are you being such a prude?"'
+						'You shrug at him and keep walking... that remark sure made your decision to leave a lot easier! What a jackass!'
 
 						act 'Leave':gt 'gskver'
 					else
@@ -568,17 +611,16 @@ if plact = 1:
 				end
 			elseif know_gor_slut = 1:
 				if know_status = 2:
-					'You turned on the boys and went to the door.'
-					tipgopreactrand = rand(0, 1)
+					'You shake your head and apologize: "Sorry boys... I have places to be. Maybe some other time" as you leave. You walk away in a brisk pace, and are gone before they can object.'
 
-					act 'Leave':gt 'gskver'
+					act 'Return to the park':gt 'gskver'
 				else
 					gt 'gskver'
 				end
 			end
 		end
 	elseif Frend_num > 0:
-		act 'Go with your friend':gt 'placer_end'
+		act 'Leave with your friend':gt 'placer_end'
 	end
 end
 

+ 68 - 62
locations/placer_gskver

@@ -9,52 +9,52 @@ if encounter = 0:
 	!!no one in the park
 	$textEvent = 'The park is quiet and deserted. There is no one in sight.'
 elseif encounter = 1:
-	!!people in the park 1mother walking with a baby 2old_man 3woman with shopping bags 4two young girls
+	!!people in the park 0mother walking with a baby 1old_man 2woman with shopping bags 3two young girls 4number of guys 5a couple
 	encrand = rand(0, 4)
 
-	if encrand = 0:$textEvent = 'In the park you see a young mother with a stroller walking along a path.'
-	if encrand = 1 and cloth_vid = 0:$textEvent = 'In the park a lonely old man with a newspaper in his hand strolls down a path.'
+	if encrand = 0:$textEvent = 'You see a young mother with a stroller walking along a path.'
+	if encrand = 1 and cloth_vid = 0:$textEvent = 'A lonely old man with a newspaper in his hand strolls down a path.'
 
 	if encrand = 1 and bimbolevel >= 1:
-		$textEvent='In a park a lonely old man with a newspaper in his hand is strolling downa path. He comes up to you and says, "Hello young lady, I have something for you, come with me."'
+		$textEvent='A lonely old man with a newspaper in his hand is strolling down a path. He looks at you greedily when he sees your appearance and walks over to you. When he reaches you, he extends his hand and says: "Hi there, young lady! If you have a minute, come with me! I have something for you!"'
 
-		act 'See':gt 'parkBimbo','pos1'
+		act 'Go see what he has':gt 'parkBimbo','pos1'
 	end
 
-	if encrand = 2:$textEvent = 'In the park you see a woman with shopping bags who must have decided to take a short-cut through the square.'
-	if encrand = 3:$textEvent = 'In the park you see two young girls taking a stroll.'
+	if encrand = 2:$textEvent = 'You see a woman hauling several shopping bags though the park, they look quite heavy. It''s probably the quickest way home for her.'
+	if encrand = 3:$textEvent = 'You see two young girls taking a stroll in the park.'
 
 	if encrand = 4:
 		kol_man = rand(1, 5)
 
-		if kol_man = 1:$textSub = 'is a guy'
-		if kol_man = 2:$textSub = 'are two guys'
-		if kol_man = 3:$textSub = 'are three guys'
-		if kol_man = 4:$textSub = 'are four guys'
-		if kol_man = 5:$textSub = 'are five guys'
+		if kol_man = 1:$textSub = 'a guy'
+		if kol_man = 2:$textSub = 'two guys'
+		if kol_man = 3:$textSub = 'three guys'
+		if kol_man = 4:$textSub = 'four guys'
+		if kol_man = 5:$textSub = 'five guys'
 
-		$textEvent = 'Walking through the park <<$textSub>>.'
+		$textEvent = 'You see <<$textSub>> walking through the park, holding a case of beer.'
 		mass_ver_zn = 1
 		know_status = 1
 	end
 elseif encounter = 2:
 	!!dog in the park
-	$textEvent = 'The park is quiet and deserted the only sign of life is a stray dog ​​sniffing around near a bin.'
+	$textEvent = 'This part of the park is quiet and deserted. The only sign of life is a stray dog, sniffing around near a garbage bin.'
 elseif encounter = 3:
 	!!young people in the park company
-	$textEvent = 'On a bench in the park sits a group of teenagers.'
+	$textEvent = 'You see a group of teenagers sitting on a park bench, listening to some music.'
 	kol_man = rand(2, 6)
 	mass_ver_zn = 1
 	know_status = 1
 elseif encounter = 4:
 	!!Gopnik in the park
 	kol_man = rand(3, 6)
-	$textEvent = 'In the park sitting on their haunches are some Gopnik, drinking beer.'
+	$textEvent = 'Some Gopniks are sitting on their haunches just off to the side of one of the main paths, drinking beer. The area around them is littered with empty bottles.'
 	mass_ver_zn = 1
 	know_status = 2
 elseif encounter = 5:
 	!!couple in love in the park
-	$textEvent = 'In the park you see a couple in love who are taking a walk.'
+	$textEvent = 'You see a man and woman walking in the park, holding each other''s hands tightly. They''re clearly in love.'
 elseif encounter = 6:
 	!!in the square of the familiar class
 end
@@ -65,49 +65,53 @@ gs 'placer_man'
 
 if month=3 or month=4 or month=5:
 	if hour>=6 and hour<=17:
-		'<center><img src="images/nigma/gor/Lake/skver.spring.jpg"></center>'
-		'Little Square. Spring has came, melting the worst of the snow. The trees are begining to reveal themselves.'
-		'On the ground, there are puddles of melted snow. It is funny watching people, walking through the park, trying to jump over them. Although, some guys, unconcerned walk straight through the puddles.'
-		'Courting couples dance along merrily, in there own worlds, dodging water dripping from the trees.'
+		'<center><img src="images/nigma/gor/lake/skver.spring.jpg"></center>'
+		'The main square of Pavlovsk Park. Spring has come, melting the worst of the snow. The trees are sprouting new leaves.'
+		'There are puddles on the ground everywhere, all remains from the melted snow. A lot of people in the park are having fun with them, trying to jump over them and mocking those that fail. They''re not particularly deep though, and plenty of others just walk through without giving them a second thought.'
+		'The park is not particularly crowded, this time of year. Many people think it''s still too cold.'
 		''
 	else
-		'<center><img src="images/nigma/gor/Lake/skver.spring.night.jpg"></center>'
-		'Small square. With the arrival of spring, many people are using the park again, but even they are not around now. Night drove the people away and now the public garden is deserted, leave only you, a lone occupant breaking the silence and tranquility of the sleeping plants.'
+		'<center><img src="images/nigma/gor/lake/skver.spring.night.jpg"></center>'
+		'The main square of Pavlovsk Park. Spring has come, melting the worst of the snow. The trees are sprouting new leaves.'
+		'There is no particular reason to visit the park during the night, and as a result it''s largely deserted. In the distance you see one person running through the park, probably using it as a shortcut to go home faster.'
 		''
 	end
 end
 if month=6 or month=7 or month=8:
 	if hour>=6 and hour<=19:
 		'<center><img src="images/gevent/skver.jpg"></center>'
-		'Little Square, where people often rest, walk and date and where kids come to play.'
+		'The main square of Pavlovsk Park. At this time of year, it''s one of the primary places locals and tourists enjoy spending their spare time in. It''s always busy: people are resting, walking, playing and dating to their heart''s desires, enjoying the nice surroundings.'
 		''
 	else
-		'<center><img src="images/nigma/gor/Lake/skver.summer.night.jpg"></center>'
-		'Little Square. During the day there are a lot of people, but now there is not a soul in the park.'
+		'<center><img src="images/nigma/gor/lake/skver.summer.night.jpg"></center>'
+		'The main square of Pavlovsk Park. At this time of year, it''s one of the places where locals and tourists enjoy going in their spare time.'
+		'However, there is no particular reason to visit the park during the night, and as a result it''s largely deserted. In the distance you see one person running through the park, probably using it as a shortcut to go home faster.'
 		''
 	end
 end
 if month=9 or month=10 or month=11:
 	if hour>=6 and hour<=18:
-		'<center><img src="images/nigma/gor/Lake/skver.autumn.jpg"></center>'
-		'Little Square. Autumn has came, with some trees already begining to shed their leaves. The leaves that are still hanging, are changing colour and showing a curtain of reds and browns.'
-		'As people walk by chatting, some taking photos of the falling leaves, others just enjoying the view and the smell of autumn.'
+		'<center><img src="images/nigma/gor/lake/skver.autumn.jpg"></center>'
+		'The main square of Pavlovsk Park. Autumn has come, and some of the trees are already shedding their leaves. The leaves that are still on the trees have changed colour, and are an colourful mix of red and brown.'
+		'Everywhere in the park, people are enjoying nature. Some are taking photos of the fallen leaves, kids are playing everywhere, and couples are walking hand-in-hand, simply enjoying each other''s company.'
 		''
 	else
-		'<center><img src="images/nigma/gor/Lake/skver.autumn.night.jpg"></center>'
-		'Small autumnal square. It is quite cold at night, you cross your arms and rub them to stay warm. The very few people here are rushing home to the heat and warm cocoa.'
+		'<center><img src="images/nigma/gor/lake/skver.autumn.night.jpg"></center>'
+		'The main square of Pavlovsk Park. Autumn has come, and some of the trees are already shedding their leaves.'
+		'It gets quite cold at night, and you try to stay active to keep yourself warm. The lone soul you see running across the park is probably trying to get home faster, to warm up with some nice cocoa.'
 		''
 	end
 end
 if month=1 or month=2 or month=12:
 	if hour>=7 and hour<=16:
-		'<center><img src="images/nigma/gor/Lake/skver.winter.jpg"></center>'
-		'Little Square, where people often rest, walk and date and where kids come to play.'
-		'Everywhere snow, and kids can not miss this opportunity. They make snowmen and have snowball fights. Some grown-ups, feeling like children again, join them playing in the snow.'
+		'<center><img src="images/nigma/gor/lake/skver.winter.jpg"></center>'
+		'The main square of Pavlovsk Park. It''s winter, and the park is quite busy with locals and tourists alike.'
+		'There''s snow everywhere, and kids from the whole town have gathered here to make snowmen and enjoy snowball fights. Some of the adults are joining them, happy to play like kids again for just a moment.'
 		''
 	else
-		'<center><img src="images/nigma/gor/Lake/skver.winter.night.jpg"></center>'
-		'A cold night, there''s a much lower chance of meeting someone in a snowy park. People generally stay home in their warm, cozy homes. Only occasionally you might see an animal, out in search of food.'
+		'<center><img src="images/nigma/gor/lake/skver.winter.night.jpg"></center>'
+		'The main square of Pavlovsk Park. It''s winter, and the nights in Pavlovsk are very cold.'
+		'As you expected, the park is mostly deserted at this time of day. You occasionally see a wild animal, scrounging for food.'
 		''
 	end
 end
@@ -116,51 +120,53 @@ end
 
 if soniaPS=5 and rand(1,10)=>9 and hour>16 and hour<20:
 	''
-	'<center><b>Strolling past the bushes, you hear strange noises</B></center>'
+	'<b>While you walk past a row of bushes, you hear some strange sounds coming from behind them.</B>'
 	''
 	act'Investigate':
 		cla
 		*clr
 		gs'stat'
 		'<center><img src="images/Nigma/gor/sonia/sonia.skver.boy0,0.jpg"></center>'
-		'You carefully push peer through the bush and take a look. There you see your classmate Sonya. It seems Sonia was feeling wild, she is sucking a stranger in the park, only 20m away from where people walk.'
-		act'Further':
+		'You carefully walk towards the bushes and push some branches aside to see what''s going on. There you see your classmate Sonia, on her haunches in front of a muscular man. She''s giving the stranger a blowjob, not even 20 meters away from where people walk!'
+		act'Keep looking':
 			cla
 			*clr
 			horny+=20
 			gs'stat'
 			'<center><img src="images/Nigma/gor/sonia/sonia.skver.boy1,'+rand(0,2)+'.jpg"></center>'
-			'Finally, the guy wants more. Sonya gets up and turns around asking him to fuck her from behind. The invitation is quickly accepted.'
-			act'Escape':gt'gskver'
+			'After a while, the guy tells Sonia that he wants more. Sonia obediently gets up and asks him: "Would you like to fuck me from behind, sir?"'
+			'The stranger happily accepts the invitation, and watches in amazement when he notices Sonia eagerly grinding her hips back against him once he''s inside her. He had no idea she would be such a lusty slut for him, willing to do all the work!'
+			'You watch Sonia give herself to the man for just a moment longer, before you decide you really have to get going. You''re quite turned on from her little show. Sonia looks like she''s having a lot of fun, and for just a second you think about what it would feel like to be in her place.'
+			act'Leave them be':gt'gskver'
 		end
 	end
 end
 
 if Frend_num > 0:
-	'Together with <<$ev_name_om>> you come upon a quiet garden square. <<$textEvent>>'
+	'You arrive at one of the smaller plazas in the park, together with <<$ev_name_om>>. <<$textEvent>>'
 
 	if ver_zn = 0:
-		!!your friend guy
-		if kol_man = 1 and $text_znak = '':$kol_man_text_no = 'After the guy looks at you, he turns away.'
-		if kol_man > 1 and $text_znak = '':$kol_man_text_no = 'Once the guys have inspected you, they turn their backs and walk off.'
-		if kol_man > 0:'You look appreciatively at the <<$kol_man_text>>. <<$kol_man_text_no>>.'+$text_znak
+		!!your friend is a guy
+		if kol_man = 1 and $text_znak = '':$kol_man_text_no = 'The guy looks at you, and for a second you think he''s going to say something. However, when he gets closer, he wrinkles his nose and turns away.'
+		if kol_man > 1 and $text_znak = '':$kol_man_text_no = 'The guys look at you for a moment, but you see one of them shake his head. The guys then turn their backs to you, and pretend you''re not there.'
+		if kol_man > 0:'You give the <<$kol_man_text>> a cute smile as you walk past. You don''t think you''ve ever seen him before. <<$kol_man_text_no>>.'+$text_znak
 	elseif ver_zn = 1 and kol_man > 0:
-		!!your friend girl
-		'You and your friend look appreciatively at the <<$kol_man_text>>.'
+		!!your friend is a girl
+		'You give the <<$kol_man_text>> a cute smile as you walk past with your friend.'
 
-		if kol_man = 1:'The guy comes up to you and says, "<<$text_znak>>"'
-		if kol_man > 1:'Guys come to you and one of them says, "<<$text_znak>>"'
+		if kol_man = 1:'You don''t think you''ve ever seen him before. He approaches you and says: "<<$text_znak>>"'
+		if kol_man > 1:'You don''t think you''ve ever seen them before. The guys walk towards you, and one of them says: "<<$text_znak>>"'
 
-		act 'Meet':
+		act 'Agree to hang out':
 			cls
 
 			if p_dom < 80:
 				gt 'placer_act'
 			elseif p_dom >= 80:
 				gs 'stat'
-				'<<$ev_name>> hisses in your ear "I don''t associate with strangers you meet on the street. If you want to stay, I will go."'
+				'<<$ev_name>> hisses in your ear: "I don''t want to hang out with strangers, <<$nickname>>! They could be dangerous! If you want to stay here, I''m leaving."'
 
-				act 'Go with your friend':gt 'placer_end'
+				act 'Leave with your friend':gt 'placer_end'
 				act 'Say goodbye to your friend and stay':
 					Frend_num = 0
 					gt 'placer_act'
@@ -169,25 +175,25 @@ if Frend_num > 0:
 		end
 	end
 
-	act 'Continue to walk':gt 'placer_end'
+	act 'Continue on your walk':gt 'placer_end'
 elseif Frend_num = 0:
-	'You stroll through the quiet park. <<$textEvent>>'
+	'You stroll through the park by yourself, enjoying its beauty. <<$textEvent>>'
 
 	if ver_zn = 1:
-		'You look appreciatively at the <<$kol_man_text>>.'
+		'You give the <<$kol_man_text>> a cute smile as you walk past. '
 
-		if kol_man = 1:'The guy comes up to you and says, "<<$text_znak>>"'
-		if kol_man > 1:'Guys come to you and one of them says, "<<$text_znak>>"'
+		if kol_man = 1:'You don''t think you''ve ever seen him before. He approaches you and says: "<<$text_znak>>"'
+		if kol_man > 1:'You don''t think you''ve ever seen them before. The guys walk towards you, and one of them says: "<<$text_znak>>"'
 
 		act 'Meet':gt 'placer_act'
 	elseif ver_zn = 0 and kol_man > 0:
-		if kol_man = 1:$kol_man_text_no = 'After the guy looked at you, he turned away.'
-		if kol_man > 1:$kol_man_text_no = 'Once you guys are inspected, they turned their backs.'
+		if kol_man = 1:$kol_man_text_no = 'The guy looks at you, and for a second you think he''s going to say something. However, when he gets closer, he wrinkles his nose and turns away.'
+		if kol_man > 1:$kol_man_text_no = 'The guys look at you for a moment, but you see one of them shake his head. The guys then turn their backs to you, and pretend you''re not there.'
 
-		'You look appreciatively at the <<$kol_man_text>>. <<$kol_man_text_no>>.'
+		'You give the <<$kol_man_text>> a cute smile as you walk past.' & '<<$kol_man_text_no>>'
 	end
 
-	act 'Leave':gt 'gskver'
+	act 'Finish your walk':gt 'gskver'
 end
 
 gs 'stat'

+ 21 - 22
locations/placer_man

@@ -1,10 +1,9 @@
 # placer_man
-
 if mass_ver_zn > 0:
 	!!calculation of the probability of dating
 	ver_zn = 0
 	!guy check to ensure you have some sexual experience
-	if rand(0, 120) < vnesh and rand(0, 1) = 0 and guy > 0:
+	if rand(0, 30) < vnesh and rand(0, 1) = 0 and guy > 0:
 		ver_zn = 1
 		if kol_man = 1:
 			$kol_man_text = 'guy' & $kol_man_text_a = 'man' & $kol_man_prefiks_he = 'he'
@@ -41,8 +40,8 @@ if mass_ver_zn > 0:
 			!!if glamur > 0 or ski > 0:end
 			!!if sport > 0:end
 
-			$txt_a= 'Hello'
-			$txt_b= 'beautiful'
+			$txt_a= 'Hello there,'
+			$txt_b= 'beautiful!'
 
 			if know_status = 2:
 				textrand = rand(0, 1)
@@ -52,8 +51,8 @@ if mass_ver_zn > 0:
 
 				textrand2 = rand(0, 1)
 
-				if textrand2 = 0:$txt_b = 'gorgeous'
-				if textrand2 = 1:$txt_b = 'your elegance'
+				if textrand2 = 0:$txt_b = 'gorgeous!'
+				if textrand2 = 1:$txt_b = 'cutie!'
 			end
 
 			$text_znak = '<<$txt_a>> <<$txt_b>>'
@@ -61,34 +60,34 @@ if mass_ver_zn > 0:
 	elseif Frend_num = 0:
 		if know_gor_slut = 1:
 			if kol_man = 1:
-				$text_znak = ' The guy smiles significantly.'
+				$text_znak = ' The guy grins, he recognizes who you are.'
 			elseif kol_man > 1:
-				$text_znak = ' The boys whisper, "Hey, it''s <<$name>> <<$gnikname>>."'
+				$text_znak = ' The guys whisper to one another: "Look guys, it''s <<$name>>. She''s a pretty big <<$gnikname>>, from what I heard."'
 			end
 		end
 	else
-		$text_znak = 'Hi girls!'
+		$text_znak = 'Hey girl!'
 		if know_status = 2:$text_znak = 'Hi honey!'
 	end
 
-	if $clothingworntype = 'naughty' and CloQuality = 2:
+	if $clothingworntype = 'naughty' and PCloQuality < 4:
 		randtext = rand(0, 5)
 
-		if randtext = 0:$txt_a = 'Hey cum guzzler,'
-		if randtext = 1:$txt_a = 'Hey slut,'
-		if randtext = 2:$txt_a = 'Hey whore,'
-		if randtext = 3:$txt_a = 'Hey girl,'
-		if randtext = 4:$txt_a = 'Cool chick, hey'
-		if randtext = 5:$txt_a = 'Oh! A prostitute'
+		if randtext = 0:$txt_a = 'Nice clothes, slut!'
+		if randtext = 1:$txt_a = 'Hey, slut!'
+		if randtext = 2:$txt_a = 'Hey, whore!'
+		if randtext = 3:$txt_a = 'Hey girl!'
+		if randtext = 4:$txt_a = 'Aren''t you a whore?'
+		if randtext = 5:$txt_a = 'Oh, a prostitute!'
 
 		randtext2 = rand(0, 5)
 
-		if randtext2 = 0:$txt_b = 'how much for a blowjob?'
-		if randtext2 = 1:$txt_b = 'did I see you at the brothel?'
-		if randtext2 = 2:$txt_b = 'I''m saving one for you babe!'
-		if randtext2 = 3:$txt_b = 'not bad, nice boobs'
-		if randtext2 = 4:$txt_b = 'is this where you work?'
-		if randtext2 = 5:$txt_b = 'I''d like to see that mouth work.'
+		if randtext2 = 0:$txt_b = 'How much for a blowjob?'
+		if randtext2 = 1:$txt_b = 'Didn''t I see you at the brothel the other day?'
+		if randtext2 = 2:$txt_b = 'I''m saving up for you, babe!'
+		if randtext2 = 3:$txt_b = 'Nice rack!'
+		if randtext2 = 4:$txt_b = 'Is this where you usually work?'
+		if randtext2 = 5:$txt_b = 'I''d like to see you work that mouth.'
 		$text_znak = '<<$txt_a>> <<$txt_b>>'
 	end
 end

파일 크기가 너무 크기때문에 변경 상태를 표시하지 않습니다.
+ 376 - 231
locations/placer_sex


+ 11 - 9
locations/podval_rape

@@ -2,9 +2,10 @@
 gs 'stat'
 
 if podvalrape = 0:
-	'You ''re lying on a dirty mattress on the floor a dark basement smelling sewage, surrounded by empty bottles. Around you stand <<$kol_man_text>> and discuss among themselves "Well potsiki, pull the lot, who first pulls this slut?"'
+	'You try to focus your view, to see where you are. It looks like a basement... there are no windows anywhere, and the room is rather dark. The guys push you down onto a dirty mattress in the room. Other than a lot of empty bottles and the mattress you''re on, the room is empty. You guess this is where they often take girls they meet in the park.'
+	'The <<$kol_man_text>> are discussing among themselves: "Alright guys, we got the slut here. I''m surprised she came so readily. Anyway... who gets to go first this time?"'
 
-	act 'Further':
+	act 'Continue':
 		rape += 1
 		gang += 1
 		podvalrape = 1
@@ -34,7 +35,8 @@ elseif podvalrape = 1:
 		dynamic $analsexrude
 	end
 
-	if ciklkm > 0:'Then the space between your legs is filled by another guy.'
+	if ciklkm > 0:'All of the guys want to fuck you at least once. You see one of them impatiently stroking his cock, keeping it erect while he is waiting for the Gopnik that is currently fucking you to finish. There might be more beyond your vision range though, you''re not quite sure.'
+	'Once the Gopnik finishes, his friend quickly takes his place and offers you his dick.'
 
 	gs 'stat'
 
@@ -42,11 +44,11 @@ elseif podvalrape = 1:
 
 	endrandom = RAND (0,1)
 	if endrandom = 0:
-	'Finally, it`s all over, the guys get dressed and leave the cellar.'
-		act 'Escape':podvalrape = 0 & dormrape = 0 & gt'gorodok'
+	'Finally the Gopniks are finished with you. They talk loudly about what a good fuck you were while they get dressed. When they realize you''re too drunk to get dressed, they help you pull your clothes back on and sloppily button them up, before they drag you outside and put you down against the wall of the house. <<$bname>> slaps your face and tells you: "You should be able to find your own way home, we have places to be. You were a good fuck, <<$name>>. Come look us up in the park again if you want more where that came from."'
+		act 'Find your way back to the main streets':podvalrape = 0 & dormrape = 0 & gt'gorodok'
 	
 	elseif endrandom = 1:
-		act 'Recover':
+		act 'Open your eyes':
 			cla
 			cls
 			minut += 5
@@ -56,9 +58,9 @@ elseif podvalrape = 1:
 			gs 'stat'
 			
 			'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/placer/podvalwrite<<podvalwriterand>>.jpg"></center>'
-			'Even though the guyss have finished fucking you, they gather around while you are still out of it and the Gopnik painted obscenities all your body, laughing at you, helplessly sprawled on the floor, making half-hearted attempts to get to your feet.'
-			'Once you have gotten up, you grab your stuff and make your escape.'
- 			act 'Escape':podvalrape = 0 & dormrape = 0 & gt'gorodok'
+			'When the last Gopnik has had his fun with you and tucks his cock back into his pants, they all gather around you with some markers. You realize they''re drawing or writing things on your body and try to get up, but one of them easily pushes you back down. You still feel too drunk to stop them and decide to just let it happen, hoping it''ll come off easily once you get a chance to wash yourself. Eventually they allow you to get up, but not before your body is fully covered in lewd comments.'
+			'They guide you out of the basement and throw your belongings out the door before closing it, leaving you to get dressed in the front yard of the house. You quickly do, praying that no one will walk past and see the obscene texts on your naked body. Luckily, no one does and you manage to get dressed unseen. Then you look around, trying to figure out where those guys took you to begin with.'
+ 			act 'Find your way back to the main streets':podvalrape = 0 & dormrape = 0 & gt'gorodok'
 		end  	
 	end
 end

이 변경점에서 너무 많은 파일들이 변경되어 몇몇 파일들은 표시되지 않았습니다.