Эх сурвалжийг харах

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KevinSmarts 8 жил өмнө
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  1. 6 5
      locations/butik
  2. 44 43
      locations/carF
  3. 112 113
      locations/young_shop

+ 6 - 5
locations/butik

@@ -1,4 +1,5 @@
 # butik
+
 if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	$metka = $ARGS[0]
 	$loc = $CURLOC
@@ -15,17 +16,17 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	lcolor = rgb(106, 90, 205)
 	'<center><b><font color="maroon">Boutique</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img src="images/etogame/butik.jpg"></center>'
-	'All kind of dresses, all at 25,000 <b>₽</b>'
+	'You see all kinds of dresses, all at 25,000 <b>₽</b>'
 
 	if rand(1, 100) >= 80 and skin > 0 and lesbiQW = 0:
-		'In the boutique you see a stylish and slender woman ,with about forty years old.'
+		'In the boutique you see a stylish and slender woman, about forty years old.'
 
 		act 'Stare at the woman.':gt 'event', 'lesbi'
 	end
 
 	if QWdogreiqTimer = 0 and QWdogReiq = 1 and week = 7 and qwdogiventday ! daystart:
 		qwdogiventday = daystart
-		'Going into the boutique you begin to consider picking dresses on hangers.By casually taking one you try it on in passing it on your back ,you hang with mild grim face.One of the dresses unexpectedly attracts your attention , as you began to study it more closely ,you feel a strange feeling as if you were being watched'
+		'Going into the boutique you begin to look at some dresses on hangers, considering to buy one. You casually try one on in the changing room as suddenly one of the dresses attracts your attention. When you look at it more closely, you feel strange as if you are being watched'
 
 		act 'Disregard':gt 'butik', 'start'
 		act 'Look around':dynamic $butikreiqdi
@@ -35,9 +36,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 
 	if RimmaSex > 0:
 		if rimmaday ! daystart:
-			'<a href="exec:gt ''RimmaSexQW''">Rima</a> smiled at you. She bits her lip and starts shooting her eyes in your direction.'
+			'<a href="exec:gt ''RimmaSexQW''">Rima</a> smiles at you. She bites her lip and looks longingly in your direction.'
 		else
-			'Rima smiled at you and continued to do her business.'
+			'Rima smiles at you and continues to do her business.'
 		end
 	end
 

+ 44 - 43
locations/carF

@@ -1,4 +1,5 @@
 # carF
+
 $enddrive = {
 	if cardrive = 1:gt 'street'
 	if cardrive = 2:gt 'down'
@@ -37,17 +38,17 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	'<center><b><<$car>></b></center>'
 	'<center><img src="images/picar/car<<car>>.jpg"></center>'
 
-	act 'Move away from the machine':dynamic $enddrive
+	act 'Move away from the car':dynamic $enddrive
 
 	if kanistra > 0:
-		'In the trunk <<kanistra>> pc. five-liter jerry cans of gasoline.'
+		'In the trunk there is a <<kanistra>>. It contains 5 liter of gasoline.'
 
 		if benz <= 35:
-			act 'Pour canister into the tank':
+			act 'Pour the gasoline into the tank':
 				cla
 				benz += 5
 				kanistra -= 1
-				'You filled canister of gasoline in the tank.'
+				'You emptied the canister of gasoline in the tank.'
 
 				act 'Move away':gt 'carF', 'start'
 			end
@@ -67,14 +68,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'salon':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><b><<$car>></b></center>'
 	'<center><img src="images/picar/salon<<car>>.jpg"></center>'
-	'Gasoline - <<benz>> liters, fuel tank capacity of 40 liters.'
+	'Gasoline - <<benz>> liters, the fuel tank has a capacity of 40 liters.'
 
 	if teh <= 0:teh = 0 & wrek = 1
-	if teh <= 0 or wrek = 1:$teh = 'Car will not start, it needs repairs.'
-	if teh >= tehcar * 75 / 100 and wrek = 0:$teh = 'Machine in excellent condition.'
-	if teh < tehcar * 75 / 100 and teh >= tehcar * 50 / 100 and wrek = 0:$teh = 'When moving the machine you have any noises'
-	if teh < tehcar * 50 / 100 and teh >= tehcar * 25 / 100 and wrek = 0:$teh = 'Car crash and barely rides.'
-	if teh < tehcar * 25 / 100 and wrek = 0:$teh = 'As this bowl can still go, is a mystery even to the designers.'
+	if teh <= 0 or wrek = 1:$teh = 'The car won''t start, it needs to be repaired.'
+	if teh >= tehcar * 75 / 100 and wrek = 0:$teh = 'The car is in excellent condition.'
+	if teh < tehcar * 75 / 100 and teh >= tehcar * 50 / 100 and wrek = 0:$teh = 'While driving the car you can hear some noises'
+	if teh < tehcar * 50 / 100 and teh >= tehcar * 25 / 100 and wrek = 0:$teh = 'The car seems broken and barely drives.'
+	if teh < tehcar * 25 / 100 and wrek = 0:$teh = 'How this car still works is a mystery even to the designers.'
 
 	'<<$teh>>'
 
@@ -84,11 +85,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'salon':
 	if cardrive = 4:'Through the windshield you see the lake.'
 	if cardrive = 12:'Through the windshield you see a construction site.'
 	if cardrive = 5:'Through the windshield, you can see the park.'
-	if cardrive = 19:'Through the windshield you see Station.'
-	if cardrive = 23:'Through the windshield you see huts of the village Gadyukino.'
+	if cardrive = 19:'Through the windshield you see the Station.'
+	if cardrive = 23:'Through the windshield you see the huts of the village Gadyukino.'
 	if cardrive = 24:'Through the windshield, you can see the Old Town.'
 
-	if prava = 0:'You have no rights.'
+	if prava = 0:'You don''t have a driving license.'
 
 	act 'Out of the car':dynamic $enddrive
 
@@ -110,7 +111,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'salon':
 
 			if wrekrand >= 40:wrek = 1
 		elseif wrek = 1:
-			'Something clattered loudly and the engine stalled.'
+			'Something clatters loudly and the engine stalls.'
 
 			act 'Fuck':gt 'carF', 'salon'
 		end
@@ -119,24 +120,24 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'salon':
 			dpsrand = rand(0, 100)
 
 			if dpsrand <= alko:
-				'Policeman stops you, he looks at your condition and requests to breath into a tube. You breathe and instrument panel lights red lamochka.'
-				'Traffic police snorts and writes something in his cell, and then shows you. There is written sms with the number 50000'
-				'Or let''s make the report. Now operates divestment forever for driving not sober.'
+				'A policeman stops you, he looks at your condition and requests you to breath into a tube. You breathe and a red light lights up on the instrument panel.'
+				'The traffic policeman snorts and writes something down. He hand you a paper with the number 50000 on it'
+				'"Or I can write a report. But you will get a permanent record for driving drunk."'
 
 				if money >= 50000:
-					act 'Give a bribe (50,000 <b>₽</b>)':
+					act 'Bribe him (50,000 <b>₽</b>)':
 						cla
 						money = money - 50000
-						'You pay and the policeman warns you that you will not be riding in this state.'
+						'You pay and the policeman warns you that you can not keep driving in your drunken state.'
 
 						act 'In the salon':gt 'carF', 'salon'
 					end
 				end
 
-				act 'Come on, all under the law':
+				act 'Come on, this is within the law':
 					cla
 					prava = 0
-					'Disempower you, not for driving sober.'
+					'"I can take your license, for not driving sober."'
 
 					act 'In the salon':gt 'carF', 'salon'
 				end
@@ -149,7 +150,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'salon':
 			if avarand >= 50:
 				teh = teh/2
 				wrek = 1
-				'You with a drunk crashed into a tree, breaking the car into pieces.'
+				'Driving drunk you crash into a tree, wrecking your car.'
 
 				act 'In the salon':gt 'carF', 'salon'
 
@@ -166,7 +167,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'salon':
 						benz -= 1
 						teh -= rand(3, 6)
 						cardrive = 3
-						'You are more than an hour drive on the highway that would get here before the city.'
+						'You drive for more than an hour on the highway before you get to the city.'
 						dynamic $enddrive
 					end
 				end
@@ -178,14 +179,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'salon':
 						benz -= 1
 						teh -= rand(1, 3)
 						cardrive = 21
-						'You get 15 minutes to the destination.'
+						'15 minutes later, you arrive at your destination.'
 						dynamic $enddrive
 					end
 				end
 			end
 
 			if placeMansion > 0 and cardrive ! 18:
-				act 'Go to your site':
+				act 'Go to your mansion':
 					cla
 
 					if cardrive >= 20:
@@ -200,7 +201,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'salon':
 						cardrive = 18
 					end
 
-					'You drive to the town.'
+					'You drive to your mansion.'
 					dynamic $enddrive
 				end
 			end
@@ -212,7 +213,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'salon':
 					benz -= 1
 					teh -= rand(1, 3)
 					cardrive = 1
-					'You get 15 minutes to the destination.'
+					'15 minutes later, you arrive at your destination.'
 					dynamic $enddrive
 				end
 			end
@@ -224,7 +225,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'salon':
 					benz -= 1
 					teh -= rand(1, 3)
 					cardrive = 2
-					'You get 15 minutes to the destination.'
+					'15 minutes later, you arrive at your destination.'
 					dynamic $enddrive
 				end
 			end
@@ -236,7 +237,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'salon':
 					benz -= 1
 					teh -= rand(1, 3)
 					cardrive = 3
-					'You get 15 minutes to the destination.'
+					'15 minutes later, you arrive at your destination.'
 					dynamic $enddrive
 				end
 			end
@@ -249,7 +250,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'salon':
 					teh = teh - RAND(1,3)
 					cardrive = 19
 
-					'For you 15 minutes, get to your destination.'
+					'15 minutes later, you arrive at your destination.'
 
 					dynamic $enddrive
 				end
@@ -262,7 +263,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'salon':
 					benz -= 1
 					teh -= rand(1, 3)
 					cardrive = 4
-					'You get 15 minutes to the destination.'
+					'15 minutes later, you arrive at your destination.'
 					dynamic $enddrive
 				end
 			end
@@ -274,7 +275,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'salon':
 					benz -= 1
 					teh -= rand(1, 3)
 					cardrive = 5
-					'You get 15 minutes to the destination.'
+					'15 minutes later, you arrive at your destination.'
 					dynamic $enddrive
 				end
 			end
@@ -286,7 +287,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'salon':
 					benz -= 1
 					teh -= rand(1, 3)
 					cardrive = 6
-					'You get 15 minutes to the destination.'
+					'15 minutes later, you arrive at your destination.'
 					dynamic $enddrive
 				end
 			end
@@ -298,7 +299,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'salon':
 					benz -= 1
 					teh -= rand(1, 3)
 					cardrive = 7
-					'You get 15 minutes to the destination.'
+					'15 minutes later, you arrive at your destination.'
 					dynamic $enddrive
 				end
 			end
@@ -310,7 +311,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'salon':
 					benz -= 1
 					teh -= rand(1, 3)
 					cardrive = 8
-					'You get 15 minutes to the destination.'
+					'15 minutes later, you arrive at your destination.'
 					dynamic $enddrive
 				end
 			end
@@ -322,7 +323,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'salon':
 					benz -= 1
 					teh -= rand(1, 3)
 					cardrive = 9
-					'You get 15 minutes to the destination.'
+					'15 minutes later, you arrive at your destination.'
 					dynamic $enddrive
 				end
 			end
@@ -332,10 +333,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'salon':
 					cla
 					if cardrive < 20:
 						minut += 60
-						'You get an hour to your destination.'
+						'It takes an hour to get to your destination.'
 					else
 						minut += 15
-						'For you 15 minutes, get to your destination.'
+						'15 minutes later, you arrive at your destination.'
 					end
 					benz -= 1
 					teh -= rand(2, 5)
@@ -391,10 +392,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'salon':
 
 					if cardrive < 20:
 						minut += 75
-						'You eat more than an hour on the highway in Pavlovsk.'
+						'You spend more than an hour on the highway going to Gadyukino.'
 					else
 						minut += 15
-						'For you 15 minutes, get to your destination.'
+						'15 minutes later, you reach your destination.'
 					end
 
 					dynamic $enddrive
@@ -422,7 +423,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'salon':
 
 			act 'Go around the track (1:00)':
 				cla
-				'You go on the road.'
+				'You go around the track.'
 				numberRoad = input("In which city will stop (from 0 to 20)")
 
 				if numberRoad >= 0 and numberRoad <= 20:
@@ -434,14 +435,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'salon':
 				xgt 'carF', 'salon'
 			end
 
-			act 'To drive on the track (1:00)':
+			act 'Drive on the track (1:00)':
 				cla
 				minut += 60
 				benz -= 4
 				teh -= rand(2, 6)
 				manna += 20
 				wipo += 10
-				'You go to the track and having fun Likhachev, then turn back.'
+				'You go to the track and having fun driving around before you turn back.'
 
 				act 'Finish':xgt 'carF', 'salon'
 			end

+ 112 - 113
locations/young_shop

@@ -98,10 +98,10 @@ if ((hour = 15 and minut <= 5) or (hour = 14 and minut >= 30)) and young_shop_wo
 				cla
 				*clr
 				'<center><img src="images/pictures/young_shop_quest9.jpg"></center>'
-				'Throwing another look at the girl, I confidently reply:'
+				'Throwing another look at the girl, you confidently reply:'
 				'"Naturally! All my friends buy their clothes only in this shop. We have a transparent blouse that will look great on your daughter! And in a suitable size. And yes, all our products are designed to be worn without a bra" You quickly find the right size and hand it over to a tearful Kira. "There is a booth over there, where you can try it on!"'
 				'The Woman grabs her daughter by the arm and takes her to the booth. 7 minutes later, they return.'
-				'You are happy to announce, "As I thought, you look great in this blouse! By the way, this model has just arrived in our shop, it was created by a famous Italian designer"'
+				'You are happy to announce, "As I thought, you look great in this blouse! By the way, this model has just arrived in our shop, it was created by a famous Italian designer."'
 				'"Yes, all of Kiras girlfriends will be jealous! And how much is this beauty?"'
 				'"Exclusive offer - only 2, 400."'
 				'You notice that Kira is already resigned to her fate and decide to go further:'
@@ -110,8 +110,8 @@ if ((hour = 15 and minut <= 5) or (hour = 14 and minut >= 30)) and young_shop_wo
 					cla
 					*clr
 					'"You know, with a mini-skirt the outfit will be 100% more revealing. Look at this model, imagine how great it will look on your daughter!"'
-					'"What, do I have to show it all?" Kira sighs, not expecting a positive outcome for her.'
-					'The Woman takes the skirt in her hand, twirls it, inspects it for defects, and with a confident expression leads her daughter into the dressing room.'
+					'"What, do I have to really bare everything?" Kira sighs, not expecting a positive outcome for her.'
+					'The Woman takes the skirt in her hand, twirls it, inspects it for defects, and, with a confident expression, leads her daughter into the dressing room.'
 					'"Such skirts are worn without panties or am I mistaken?" the woman says looking back at you.'
 					'"It is highly desirable." you say, nodding.'
 					'"Alright."'
@@ -134,11 +134,11 @@ if ((hour = 15 and minut <= 5) or (hour = 14 and minut >= 30)) and young_shop_wo
 							'Kira slowly puts her hands under her skirt and pulls off her panties.'
 							'"Do you feel the breeze blowing up your bottom? Imagine how nice it would be walking like this on the street."'
 							'"What if someone sees me like this?"'
-							'"Oh, don''t be greedy." you say as you pat Kira on the shoulders. "Let them look and dream. All your friends will envy you and ask why when you''re with them, all the guys only look at you."'
+							'"Oh, don''t be greedy." you say, as you pat Kira on the shoulders. "Let them look and dream. All your friends will envy you and ask why, when you''re with them, all the guys only look at you."'
 							'You take Kira back from the locker room and give the panties to her mother.'
-							'"This is awkward, but can I leave them here, or throw them away? I want to wean my daughter from underwear, so that these purchases won''t be wasted. I will hide her panties and bras from her until she gets used to it."'
-							'You decide to leave the panties with her and shove them in her purse. The mom is paying at the cash register and takes her daughter dressed in a new blouse and mini-skirt.'
-							'Kira looks back at you and smiles saying goodbye. She then leaves, flashing naked booty in every breeze.'
+							'"This is awkward, but can I leave them here, or let you throw them away? I want to wean my daughter from underwear, so that these purchases won''t be wasted. I will hide her other panties and bras from her until she gets used to it."'
+							'You decide to leave the panties with her and shove them in her purse. The mom is paying at the cash register and takes her daughter, all dressed up in her new blouse and mini-skirt, outside.'
+							'Kira looks back at you and smiles saying goodbye. She then leaves, flashing naked her booty with every breeze.'
 
 							act 'Finish the job':dynamic $endwork
 						else
@@ -149,12 +149,12 @@ if ((hour = 15 and minut <= 5) or (hour = 14 and minut >= 30)) and young_shop_wo
 								*clr
 								$ImageNeededPlacholder
 								! WD: IMAGE NEEDED ~ '<center><img src="images/pictures/characters/photo_dressed_[$vika]_13.png"></center>'
-								'"Well," you bend over and thrust your hands under her skirt. The girl could not even imagine that you would do that.'
-								'You lift her mini skirt and slowly pull off Kira''s panties. Her bare pussy is right before your eyes at a distance of 10 centimeters. You notice that the girl is very excited because of this situation and her panties are a little wet. Delicate aroma hits your nose and you smile.'
-								'Kira''s panties are off, you show her the wet spot, and then hide the panties behind your back and get out of the booth.'
+								'"Well..." you quickly bend over and thrust your hands under her skirt. The girl could not even imagine that you would do that.'
+								'You lift her mini skirt and slowly pull off Kira''s panties. Her bare pussy is right before your eyes at a distance of 10 centimeters. You notice that the situation seems to make the girl very excited and her panties are a little wet. A delicate aroma hits your nose and you smile.'
+								'Kira''s panties are off, you show her the wet spot, and then hide the panties behind your back as the two of you get out of the booth.'
 								'"We managed to agree." smiling you pretend that you managed to persuade Kira to take off her panties on her own.'
-								'"Oh, how wonderful, wonderful." the woman examines her daughter and decides to buy the blouse and mini-skirt.'
-								'Before leaving Kira thanks you, and you wink at her, to which she reacts with a very pleasant smile.'
+								'"Oh, how wonderful, wonderful." the woman examines her daughter and quickly decides to buy the blouse and mini-skirt.'
+								'Before leaving Kira thanks you, and you wink at her. You receive a very pleasant smile in return.'
 
 								act 'Finish the job':dynamic $endwork
 							end
@@ -166,13 +166,13 @@ if ((hour = 15 and minut <= 5) or (hour = 14 and minut >= 30)) and young_shop_wo
 			act 'No, it is too early':
 				cla
 				*clr
-				'You shrug, "Sorry, but it is too early to wear such clothes. Especially since she does not want it."'
-				'"How so? I''ve seen on TV that everyone has these these outfits!" the woman looks at you with disbelief. She obviously could not imagine that you would be arguing against the clothing worn by yourself and which you should sell.'
-				'"The mother clearly wants her daughter to look like a whore" you think, looking into the eyes of the lady and smile.'
-				act 'Convince the woman':
+				'You shrug, "Sorry, but it is too early for her to wear such clothes. Especially since she does not want it."'
+				'"How so? I''ve seen on TV that everyone has these these outfits!" the woman looks at you with disbelief. She obviously could not imagine that you would be arguing against the clothing worn by yourself especially since you should be selling them.'
+				'"The mother clearly wants her daughter to look like a whore." You smile as you look the lady in the eyes.'
+				act 'Dissuade the woman':
 					cla
-					delact 'Convince the woman'
-					'This can not be! You resolve to do everything in your power to convince the strange mother.'
+					delact 'Dissuade the woman'
+					'She shouldn''t to that! You decide to do everything in your power to dissuade the strange mother.'
 
 					if intel >= 60:
 						$ImageNeededPlacholder
@@ -185,7 +185,7 @@ if ((hour = 15 and minut <= 5) or (hour = 14 and minut >= 30)) and young_shop_wo
 					else
 						$ImageNeededPlacholder
 						! WD: IMAGE NEEDED ~ '<center><img src="images/pictures/characters/photo_dressed_[$vika]_13.png"></center>'
-						'"What are you saying? I see these outfits all the time on TV? Why am I talking to you all?" The glamorous lady does not understand the meaning of my words. "Alright Kira, we go to another store."'
+						'"What are you saying? I see these outfits all the time on TV! Why am I talking to you at all?" The glamorous lady does not understand what you are trying to say. "Alright Kira, we go to another store."'
 						'Before leaving, the girl thanks you for trying to save her and runs away after her mother.'
 
 						act 'Finish the job':dynamic $endwork
@@ -197,23 +197,23 @@ if ((hour = 15 and minut <= 5) or (hour = 14 and minut >= 30)) and young_shop_wo
 			*clr
 			'<b><center><font size="4"><font color="black">Case for paper</font></center></b>'
 			'You just finished hanging up cute blouses from the new collection, as an old lady comes up to you. She looks 70 years old and begins a long, dull monologue about herself, her work, the contemporary fashion and tradition.'
-			'The grandmother starts complaining about modern society and its flaws: Deception, corruption, drugs, sex and everything. Then she remembers the good old times when the grass was greener and women at age 18 married as virgins:'
-			'"And now that .. In my granddaughter''s classroom are no virgins left. And she is a 7th grade student, they have 15 girls in the classroom! How can this be? .. And one girl, Lena already had three abortions. What has this world come to?" the grandmother complains for 20 minutes and you can not manage to calm her down and show her the door of the store.'
+			'The grandmother starts complaining about modern society and its flaws: Deception, corruption, drugs, sex and everything in general. Then she remembers the good old times when the grass was greener and women married as virgins at the age of 18:'
+			'"And now it has come to this .. In my granddaughter''s classroom there are no virgins left. She is a 7th grade student and they have 15 girls in the classroom! How can this be? .. And one girl, Lena, already had three abortions. What has this world come to?" the grandmother complains for 20 minutes and you can not manage to calm her down and show her the door of the store.'
 			'"Here''s my granddaughter. Did you also go to the same school? Is that why you dress this way? Are you not ashamed?"'
 
-			act 'Shame on you!':
+			act 'Shame on you, grandmother!':
 				cla
 				'"And why should I be ashamed of that? I did nothing wrong or depraved! They are just beautiful clothes. It''s todays fashion, we don''t live in Stalin''s time anymore."'
 				'"Yeah, during Comrade Stalin''s time this would not have happened!" She begins a new lecture about old times, honesty, integrity and correctness.'
-				'The old lady keeps ranting for a long time, but finally gets bored and she begins to waddle out the door, cursing at the shop and the modern youth.'
+				'The old lady keeps ranting for a long time, but finally gets bored and begins to waddle out the door, cursing at the shop and the modern youth.'
 
 				act 'Finish the job':dynamic $endwork
 			end
 
 			act 'It is part of your job':
 				cla
-				'"Of course it is a shame, but I can not be different. I need to work and earn money, so I can eat. I also need to take care of my sister" you explain for a long time, talking about your need to work and promise the grandmother never to go out like this.'
-				'Finally the grandmother, satisfied with your answer, praises you and gives you the sign of the cross, wishing you happiness and kindness.'
+				'"Of course it is a shame, but I can not do different. I need to work and earn money, so I can eat. I also need to take care of my sister" you explain for a long time, talking about your need to work and promise the grandmother never to go out like this.'
+				'Finally the grandmother, satisfied with your answer, says a little prayer and gives you the sign of the cross, wishing you happiness and kindness.'
 				'You sigh with relief as the old lady goes to the exit.'
 
 				act 'Finish the job':dynamic $endwork
@@ -226,27 +226,27 @@ if ((hour = 15 and minut <= 5) or (hour = 14 and minut >= 30)) and young_shop_wo
 			'Passing the changing room, you hear strange noises from there. Perhaps someone is just changing, but there seems to be something wrong.'
 			'Curious, you make sure that no one notices, look inside and see a rather strange picture:'
 			'Whether a couple couldn''t make it home, whether they have nowhere else to go, whether they are just perverts. It is difficult to say, and now it doesn''t matter.'
-			'You watch as the cute girl very skillfully sucks a man''s penis and don''t know how to react. Watching them, you can not continue - what will they think of you if they see an employee spying on customers in the changing booth?'
+			'You watch as the cute girl very skillfully sucks a man''s penis and don''t know how to react. You can''t continue watching them. What will they think if they see an employee spying on customers in the changing booth?'
 
 			if horny >= 80:
-				'You are too excited to ignore what is happening or care about gettin caught.'
+				'But you are too excited to ignore what is happening or care about gettin caught.'
 
 				act 'Eavesdrop':
 					cla
 					*clr
-					'You decide to stand next to the cabin and listen to the joy of the young couple. You listen as she licks and sucks his cock loudly. Then she makes a strange sound as if something changed.'
-					'"Did they stop with the blowjob?" You look down again to the booth and see what''s wrong. The guy is holding the girl''s hair and pulls her mouth firmly onto his penis. You have never seen a girl getting fucked in the throat with souch force.'
-					'"She could suffocate." but instead of helping the girl he runs a hand over her hardened nipples and down to her skirt.'
+					'You decide to stand next to the cabin and listen to the joy of the young couple. You listen as she licks and sucks his cock loudly. Suddenly she makes a strange sound indicating that something has changed.'
+					'"Did they stop?" You look down again into the booth and see what''s wrong. The guy is holding the girl''s hair and pulls her mouth firmly onto his penis. You have never seen a girl getting fucked in the throat with such force.'
+					'"She could suffocate." the thought suddenly crosses your mind. But instead of easing up or helping the girl her boyfriend runs a hand over her hardened nipples and down to her skirt.'
 					'Then you hear the guy starting to moan, and the girl coughing plaintively tells him:'
-					'"Come on, come on, Cum on my face, yes .." You once again look in the booth.'
+					'"Come on, come on, cum on my face, yes .." You once again look into the booth.'
 
 					act 'Look into the booth':
 						cla
 						*clr
 						horny += 10
 						'<center><img src="images/pictures/young_shop_quest3.jpg"></center>'
-						'All the girl''s face is covered with thick sperm.'
-						'The Guy again puts his cock into her mouth to let her clean off his semen. Then he quietly begins to put on pants, watching as the girl uses her hands to collect sperm from her face and hides it in her mouth.'
+						'The girl''s whole face is covered with a thick layer of sperm.'
+						'The Guy again puts his cock into her mouth to let her clean off his semen. Then he quietly begins to put on pants, watching the girl as she uses her hands to collect sperm from her face putting it into her mouth.'
 						'You decide to get away from the booth, so you won''t get caught. A minute later, the pair shows up and you can see that she didn''t wipe her face very thoroughly as traces of sperm are still visible to the naked eye.'
 						'As such, the two of them go out of the store into the street.'
 
@@ -258,8 +258,8 @@ if ((hour = 15 and minut <= 5) or (hour = 14 and minut >= 30)) and young_shop_wo
 					cla
 					*clr
 					'This is clearly not your business, and snooping around and eavesdropping is indecent. Of course, you could get rid of them, but you do not want to deprive these young people of good memories and spoil their fun.'
-					'You go away from the booth and start folding scattered blouses and hang them in places. After a few minutes, a couple comes out of the booth and you see traces of semen on the girl''s face. All your efforts to stop yourself from smiling fail, and I''m just her hand.'
-					'Meanwhile she and her boyfriend go out of the store into the street.'
+					'You go away from the booth and start folding scattered blouses. After a few minutes, the couple comes out of the booth and you see traces of semen on the girl''s face. All your efforts to stop yourself from smiling fail.'
+					'Soon she and her boyfriend go out of the store into the street.'
 
 					act 'Finish the job':dynamic $endwork
 				end
@@ -269,7 +269,7 @@ if ((hour = 15 and minut <= 5) or (hour = 14 and minut >= 30)) and young_shop_wo
 					*clr
 					'"Ahem, uh .." You cough. "Are you all right, can I help?"'
 					'"Yeah, you can come in and help" you hear the muffled voice of the guy. "Ouch, that hurts."'
-					'The Girl takes his member out of his mouth and hits the guy in the balls, loudly saying:'
+					'The Girl takes his member out of her mouth and hits the guy in the balls, loudly saying:'
 					'"We are just finishing and will leave soon."'
 					'A minute later the pair comes out of the booth and the girl gives me a shy smile and blushes a little, taking her boyfriend out of the store.'
 
@@ -281,17 +281,17 @@ if ((hour = 15 and minut <= 5) or (hour = 14 and minut >= 30)) and young_shop_wo
 			*clr
 			'<b><center><font size="4"><font color="black">Case for paper</font></center></b>'
 			'You go to the changing booths and find that someone left shirt. You remember that it belongs to a girl who just 5 minutes ago bought a blouse and went out of the store. Apparently, she decided she can no longer use the t-shirt and just left it in the booth.'
-			'You decide to wait until the end of the shift, as the shopper may return. An hour passes and your shift ends, but nobody comes for the shirt. You carefully look at it: ordinary shirt, almost new, no holes, no dirt, nothing. Can you keep it yourself?'
+			'You decide to wait until the end of the shift, as the shopper may return. An hour passes and your shift ends, but nobody comes for the shirt. You carefully look at it: it is an ordinary shirt, almost new, no holes, no dirt, nothing. Can you keep it yourself?'
 
-			act 'Pick it up':
+			act 'Keep it':
 				cla
-				'Before leaving, you take the shirt with you. The girl doesn''t seem to need it, and you are not so rich to throw away almost new things.'
+				'Before leaving, you take the shirt with you. The girl doesn''t seem to need it, and you are not rich enough to throw away almost new things.'
 
 				! WD: Uninitialised ~ 'wear_chest_have_'
 				if wear_chest_have_[6] = 0:
 					'no action'
 				else
-					'<b>- Although, you also already have the same one. With such a pile of things as you have, it''s easy and lured .. Okay, it is the same you have. You do not need it - You leave the T-shirt in the store.</b>'
+					'<b>- Although... you also already have the same one. Even with the amount of clothes you have you are still tempted .. Still, you already the exact same one. You don''t need it - You leave the T-shirt in the store.</b>'
 				end
 
 				act 'Finish the job':dynamic $endwork
@@ -303,18 +303,18 @@ if ((hour = 15 and minut <= 5) or (hour = 14 and minut >= 30)) and young_shop_wo
 			*clr
 			'<b><center><font size="4"><font color="black">Case for paper</font></center></b>'
 			'You go to the changing booths and collect clothes that another buyer left after fitting. Accidentally you drop a mini-skirt and as you pick it up, you notice a very inconspicuous thing on the plinth. You immediatly recognize it:'
-			'"Yes, it''s a hidden camera" the thought pierces you like an arrow. You can not think why you would find something like that in the store!'
-			'What to do now? You should probably tell the manager, he will understand, or .. What if he knows? No, this can not be.'
+			'"Yes, it''s a hidden camera" the thought pierces you like an arrow. You can not think of a reason why you would find something like this in the store!'
+			'What should you do now? You should probably tell the manager, he will understand, or .. What if he already knows? No, that''s ridiculous.'
 
-			act 'Tell about the camcorder':
+			act 'Tell the manager about the camcorder':
 				cla
 				'You''re storming into the manager''s office without knocking and start chattering about what happened.'
 				'"Hey, hey, <<$name>>, calm down! What happened??"'
-				'"There, there, in the booth." with trembling hands you point in the direction of the changing booths. "Faster!"'
-				'The Manager reluctantly rises from his chair and goes with you. Going into the booth, he squats and pulls on the camera glued to the plinth.'
-				'"It is necessary to call.." you begin to prompt the manager, but he interrupts you in mid-sentence:'
-				'"Wait, we should think" the manager stands and twirls the camera in his hands. "If we call the cops, here is what will happen.. the shop gets closed, the place gets searched, and we can be fined or something worse. As host learns so completely freaked pouvolnyaet indiscriminately."'
-				'"Let''s just do this: You calm down and go home, and I will inspect everything here. This way we won''t get any problems! It''s good you were vigilant and found it, but there is no need to tell anyone, okay?"'
+				'"There! There! In the booth!" with trembling hands you point in the direction of the changing booths. "Faster!"'
+				'The Manager reluctantly rises from his chair and goes with you. Going into the booth, he squats down and pulls on the camera glued to the plinth.'
+				'"It is necessary to call.." you begin to prompt the manager, but he interrupts you mid-sentence:'
+				'"Wait, we should think about this" the manager stands and twirls the camera in his hands. "If we call the cops, here is what will happen.. the shop gets closed, the place gets searched, and we can be fined or something worse. Let''s not do anything rash."'
+				'"Let''s just do this: You calm down and go home, and I will inspect everything here. This way we won''t get any problems! It is good that you were vigilant and found it, but there is no need to tell anyone, okay?"'
 				'"Yes, of course - your shift is coming to an end anyway and you decide to just go home and forget about everything."'
 
 				act 'Finish the job':dynamic $endwork
@@ -323,7 +323,7 @@ if ((hour = 15 and minut <= 5) or (hour = 14 and minut >= 30)) and young_shop_wo
 			act 'Keep silent':
 				cla
 				'You take a few deep breaths and force yourself to calm down, bringing your thoughts in order.'
-				'You did not install the camera, you are not responsible. You can always say that you didn''t know about it. You did not get dressesd in the booth. Generally, girls who did will not know there is a camera, but someone sees them and is entertained. You do not mind.'
+				'You did not install the camera, you are not responsible. You can always say that you didn''t know about it. You did not get dressesd in the booth. Generally, girls who did will not know there was a camera. Someone has probably seen them and was entertained. But you do not mind.'
 				'You decide not to touch the camera and just keep working.'
 
 				act 'Finish the job':dynamic $endwork
@@ -344,10 +344,10 @@ if ((hour = 15 and minut <= 5) or (hour = 14 and minut >= 30)) and young_shop_wo
 
 				act 'Tell on the pedophile':
 					cla
-					'"I am happy to try on a few options for you. Wait here, and I''ll run to the store and immediately find all the blouses and skirts to fit and will try them on!" Trying not to show your nervousness, you leave the man who hide behind the door to the premises.'
-					'Describing everything to the manager, you''re going to the warehouse, quickly find several options of clothes and change into them in the booth. The pedophile lustfully watches as you stand in front of him in a skirt, when several policemen show up in the store.'
+					'"I am happy to try on a few options for you. Wait here, and I''ll run to the store and immediately find all the blouses and skirts to fit and will try them on!" Trying not to show your nervousness, you leave the man behind to wait for you.'
+					'After describing everything to the manager, you''re going to the warehouse, quickly find several options of clothes and change into them in the booth. The pedophile lustfully watches as you stand in front of him in a skirt, when several policemen show up in the store.'
 					'The policemen don''t even think about listening to the men''s argument, pinning him down and leading him to a patrol car.'
-					'"Don''t say anything. We are going to send your daughter to workers care, they will understand psychologists your fault or not" with these words derive cops guy from the store.'
+					'"Don''t say anything. We are going to send your daughter to workers care, where she will get help from psychologists." with these words the cops lead the guy from the store.'
 
 					act 'Finish the job':dynamic $endwork
 				end
@@ -357,29 +357,29 @@ if ((hour = 15 and minut <= 5) or (hour = 14 and minut >= 30)) and young_shop_wo
 				if intel >= 40:
 					cla
 					*clr
-					'Actually, it''s none of your business if his daughter is not satisfied with something, she herself may apply to the authorities, and you can not destroy the whole family, by sticking your nose where it doesn''t belong!'
+					'Actually, it''s none of your business if his daughter is not happy with something. She herself may apply to the authorities, and you can not destroy the whole family, by sticking your nose where it doesn''t belong!'
 				elseif intel < 40:
 					cla
 					*clr
 					horny += 30
 					gs 'stat'
-					'Suspecting nothing, you say that now all children develop precociously.'
+					'Suspecting nothing, you tell him that nowadays all children develop precociously.'
 					'You go to the warehouse and collect all the clothes that fit you, and go back to the changing rooms ..'
-					'The man constantly jokes and makes very nice compliments about your figure. Every time you''re hiding behind a curtain booth, he tries to peep how you dress up and continues to laugh it off when you notice it.'
-					'During the show, he kept spinning you on the spot, trying to see what is hidden under the skirt and looks at your chest hidden under the blouse.'
+					'The man constantly jokes and makes very nice compliments about your figure. Every time you''re hiding behind the curtain, he tries to peep how you dress up and continues to laugh it off when you notice it.'
+					'During the show, he tells you to spin on the spot, trying to see what is hidden under the skirt as well as looking at breasts which are barely covere by the blouse.'
 					'His actions seem a little suspicious to you, but you write it off on his jaunty mood and sociability.'
-					'Once you finally tried on all the skirts and blouses, he chooses and asks you to change once more.'
+					'Once you finally tried on all the skirts and blouses, he chooses to buy one and asks you to change once more.'
 					'"What a beauty, my daughter will look simply amazing. Listen .. do you want to make some money?"'
 					'"In what sense?" you ask surprised.'
-					'"You know, you''re so beautiful and sexy, I''m very excited looking at you! I will pay 5000 if you just show off this clothes, with this skirt. Naturally, no panties and bra. You don''t have to do anything else."'
+					'"You know, you''re so beautiful and sexy, I''m very excited looking at you! I will pay you 5000 rubles if you just show off this blouse and this skirt without panties and bra. You don''t have to do anything else."'
 				end
 
 				act 'Refuse':
 					cla
 					*clr
 					'<center><img src="images/pictures/young_shop_quest4.jpg"></center>'
-					'"What are you, crazy? I''m not going to do that!" A blatant bid. You''re not going to do that. "You do not have to persuade me, it just won''t do that! Go offer your daughter to do that."'
-					'"Make sure you will do so" The buyer goes out of the booth and waits until you change back, and give him the clothes. He calmly pays and leaves the store. You look after him, disgusted.'
+					'"What are you, crazy?! I''m not going to do that!" You refuse his blatant bid. You''re not going to do that. "Don''t even try to persuade me, I just won''t do it! Go offer your daughter to do that."'
+					'"Fine. Just let me buy the clothes then." The buyer goes out of the booth and waits until you change back, and give him the clothes. He calmly pays and leaves the store. You look after him, disgusted.'
 
 					act 'Finish the job':dynamic $endwork
 				end
@@ -398,12 +398,11 @@ if ((hour = 15 and minut <= 5) or (hour = 14 and minut >= 30)) and young_shop_wo
 					gs 'stat'
 					'"Okay, but I won''t do anything more!" 5, 000 <b>₽</b> - a great motivator and it would be foolish to ignore such a sum.'
 					if horny >= 100:'Yes, and your body just craves to have someone look at it.'
-					'You unfasten and put away your bra baring your breasts to a stranger. Then you put your hands under the skirt and slowly remove your panties.'
-					'You put on a little blouse to cover your bare chest and thrust your hand under the skirt to slowly remove your panties.'
 					'You unfasten and put away your bra baring your breasts to a stranger.'
+					'You put on a little blouse to cover your bare chest and thrust your hand under the skirt to slowly remove your panties.'
 					'Licking your lips, you take the edges of the mini skirt and little by little, begin to lift the edges up. Meanwhile the man unzips his fly and his already hardened member pops out of his pants.'
 					'You are flushed with excitement, standing in the locker room without panties and bra, lifting your skirt so that your pussy is perfectly visible, and look at how the man is jerking his cock. You do not have time to recover as the man begins to wheeze, and you realize that he is about to finish.'
-					'Suddenly he takes a step forward and lays his hand on your shoulder. He is very strong puts you on your knees. You want to argue against such behavior, citing your agreement, but you realize that there is no time to do it. The Men gives a muffled moan and you understand that his cock is about to explode.'
+					'Suddenly he takes a step forward and lays his hand on your shoulder. You are surprised by his strength as he pushes you down on your knees. You try to argue against this behavior, citing your agreement, but you realize that there is no time to do it. The Men gives a muffled moan and you understand that his cock is about to explode.'
 
 					act 'Close your eyes':
 						cla
@@ -411,36 +410,36 @@ if ((hour = 15 and minut <= 5) or (hour = 14 and minut >= 30)) and young_shop_wo
 						horny += 10
 						facial += 1
 						spafinloc = 11
-gs 'cum_manage'
+						gs 'cum_manage'
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img src="images/pictures/young_shop_quest8.jpg"></center>'
-						'You have nowhere to go. You barely have time to close his eyes before a powerful jet of sperm hits you in the face. Then another. You smell a strong masculine fragrance. Cum completely covers your face and hair and begins to flow on the clothes, leaving a thick spots.'
+						'You have nowhere to go. You barely have time to close your eyes before a powerful jet of sperm hits you in the face. Then another. You smell a strong masculine fragrance. Cum completely covers your face and hair and begins to flow down on the clothes, leaving thick spots.'
 
 						if vaf > 10:
 							swallow += 1
 							spafinloc = 12
-gs 'cum_manage'
+							gs 'cum_manage'
 							gs 'stat'
-							'There is so much on you, your start to collect sperm in your hands, and lick it of your fingers with great pleasure.'
+							'There is just so much on you! You start to collect sperm in your hands, and lick it of your fingers with great pleasure.'
 							'The smell and taste is driving you crazy, your legs give way and you feel your underbelly beginning to shudder. You''re coming.'
 							'Recovering, you see the man standing over you smiling:'
-							'"Thank you, beautiful! Let''s take your clothes off, I will buy these clothes" You begin to tell him, that you need to bring new things, or at least clean the dirty ones, but the buyer interrupts you. "No, they do not need to be cleaned, these tracks will remind me of the wonderful moments with you."'
-							'You undress and change back to your clothes, then quickly run to the locker room. Your shift is not over yet, and before leaving your must put yourself in order.'
+							'"Thank you, beautiful! Let''s take these clothes off, I want to buy them" You begin to tell him, that you need to bring out new ones, or at least clean the dirty ones, but the buyer interrupts you. "No, they do not need to be cleaned, these tracks will remind me of the wonderful moments with you."'
+							'You undress and change back to your clothes, then quickly run to the locker room. Your shift is not over yet, and before leaving you should clean yourself up.'
 
 							act 'Finish the job':dynamic $endwork
 						else
-							'When the sperm stops hitting you in the face, you open your eyes and see before you a big appetizing dick, all covered with sperm. It emanates a strong masculine fragrance.'
+							'When the sperm stops hitting you in the face, you open your eyes and see a big appetizing dick before you. It is covered in sperm, emanating a strong masculine fragrance.'
 
 							if vaf > 0:
 								swallow += 1
 								spafinloc = 12
-gs 'cum_manage'
-								'I do not hold back and take a cock in her mouth. It turns out that he has not completely drained and I feel like the last time he flinches and my mouth filled with sperm. I am very neat and clean out the member took out his mouth.'
+								gs 'cum_manage'
+								'You can''t hold back and take the cock in your mouth. It turns out that he was not completely drained and you feel his last flinches as your mouth gets filled with sperm. You clean off his member before he takes it out of your mouth.'
 							end
 
-							'I raise my eyes to the buyer and smile at him.'
-							'"Thank you, beautiful! Let''s take your clothes off, I will buy these clothes" You begin to tell him, that you need to bring new things, or at least clean the dirty ones, but the buyer interrupts you. "No, they do not need to be cleaned, these tracks will remind me of the wonderful moments with you."'
-							'You undress and change back to your clothes, then quickly run to the locker room. Your shift is not over yet, and before leaving your must put yourself in order.'
+							'You look up to the buyer and smile at him.'
+							'"Thank you, beautiful! Let''s take these clothes off, I want to buy them" You begin to tell him, that you need to bring out new ones, or at least clean the dirty ones, but the buyer interrupts you. "No, they do not need to be cleaned, these tracks will remind me of the wonderful moments with you."'
+							'You undress and change back to your clothes, then quickly run to the locker room. Your shift is not over yet, and before leaving you should clean yourself up'
 
 							act 'Finish the job':dynamic $endwork
 						end
@@ -453,8 +452,8 @@ gs 'cum_manage'
 			*clr
 			cla
 			'<b><center><font size="4"><font color="black">Case for paper</font></center></b>'
-			'<<$name>>, see here - Nastya approaches you. "I''ve got a nice blouse, new, but with a slight defect. The manager is going to put it at a good discount <b>-70%</b>, maybe you want to take it yourself?"'
-			'In store we have it for <b>2400</b> <b>₽</b> sold, you can buy <b>720</b>. Look at this:'
+			'<<$name>>, look here - Nastya approaches you. "I''ve got a nice blouse, new, but with a slight defect. The manager is going to put it at a good discount <b>-70%</b>, maybe you want to take it yourself?"'
+			'The store is selling it for <b>2400</b> <b>₽</b> , but you can buy it for <b>720</b>.'
 
 			act 'Finish the job':dynamic $endwork
 		elseif random = 27:
@@ -462,7 +461,7 @@ gs 'cum_manage'
 			cla
 			'<b><center><font size="4"><font color="black">Case for paper</font></center></b>'
 			'<center><img src="images/pictures/young_shop_quest5.jpg"></center>'
-			'2 guys with very glamorous appearance come into the shop to look at the transparent blouses. You often notice them in this neighborhood and they probably live somewhere near. They constantly go together and hold hands. You go to the guys and helpfully asks:'
+			'Two guys with very glamorous appearance come into the shop to look at the transparent blouses. You often notice them in this neighborhood and they probably live somewhere near. They constantly go together and hold hands. You go to the guys and helpfully ask:'
 
 			act 'Can I help you?':
 				cla
@@ -492,8 +491,8 @@ gs 'cum_manage'
 			'"Whores?" you ask Nastya.'
 			'"Oh, by the way, you see the one in the red skirt?" Nastya nods toward the ugliest of them. "She studied in a parallel class."'
 			'"She''s what, 18 years?? That''s horrific, what brings someone to such a depraved lifestyle" you declare accusingly.'
-			'"Depravity has nothing to do with it" says Nastya. "Some girls have had more guys than her, but they do not look like it! You just have to look after themselves, not plump and dope Shiryaev in the doorways."'
-			'The sluts, not even an looking at the clothes, choose the first available things and carry them to the cashier. Nastya''s friend throws a pile of dirty crumpled <b>₽</b> on the counter and pulling a face says:'
+			'"Depravity has nothing to do with it" says Nastya. "Some girls have had more guys than her, but they do not look like it! You have to look past their appearance."'
+			'The sluts, not even really looking at the clothes, choose the first few available things and carry them to the cashier. Nastya''s friend throws a pile of dirty crumpled <b>₽</b> on the counter and pulling a face says:'
 			'"Same procedure?" Without waiting for an answer, the girls take their belongings and leave the store.'
 			'"Here you go, you get half" Nastya gives you a pile of <b>₽</b>. "They are a little short changed. They don''t have to pay in full .."'
 
@@ -502,22 +501,22 @@ gs 'cum_manage'
 			*clr
 			cla
 			'<b><center><font size="4"><font color="black">Case for paper</font></center></b>'
-			'In the beginning of the shift the manager asks you to come to him after work, but doesn''t tell you the reason why.'
-			'You approach the door to his office and you are about to knock. Then you notice that the door was slightly ajar and look inside.'
+			'At the beginning of the shift the manager asks you to come to him after work, but doesn''t tell you the reason why.'
+			'You approach the door to his office and you are about to knock as you notice that the door is slightly ajar. You look inside.'
 
 			act 'Look inside':
 				cla
 				'<center><img src="images/pictures/young_shop_quest10.jpg"></center>'
-				'Your eyes witness an obscene picture. Andrew M. is facing the monitor, his pants pulled down, his member in his hands. The manager looks at the monitor and strokes his penis, which has a condom on. Almost immediately he throws back his head and starts to cum.'
+				'Your eyes witness an obscene picture. Andrei Mikhailovich is facing the monitor, his pants pulled down, his member in his hands. The manager looks at the monitor and strokes his penis, which has a condom on. Almost immediately he throws back his head and starts to cum.'
 				'Filling a condom with sperm, he removes it wipes his member and throws the condom in the waste basket. Then he starts to pull up his pants and walks toward the door.'
 				'You''re trying not to make a sound, run back from the door and hide behind the boxes near the service exit. Andrei Mikhailovich, noticing nothing, passes you and goes into the toilet. You''re out of your hiding place and go to his office. Out of curiosity, you look at the monitor and some selected German porn. Then you look into the basket and see the lying in a condom full of sperm.'
 
 				act 'Wait for the manager':
 					cla
 					'With a smile, you step away from the manager''s table, thinking about what he''d do if he saw me at the monitor, with a condom in your hand.'
-					'A minute later, Andrew M. returns:'
-					'"Ah, <<$name>>, nice of you to come! Wait, I''ll give you a piece of paper, you need to sign it" the manager comes to his desk for a long time and finally goes through the papers handing you a sheet.'
-					'Your are not really focused on the piece op paper so do not read it, sign it and return the document to the manager. After saying goodbye, you''re going back to the shop floor.'
+					'A minute later, Andrew returns:'
+					'"Ah, <<$name>>, nice of you to come! Wait, I have something to sign for you." the manager goes to his desk and goes through the papers handing you a sheet.'
+					'Your are not really focused on the piece of paper so you don''t read it, sign it and return the document to the manager. After saying goodbye, you''re going back to the shop floor.'
 
 					act 'Finish the job':dynamic $endwork
 				end
@@ -531,10 +530,10 @@ gs 'cum_manage'
 					act 'In your mouth!':
 						cla
 						'You have no other options .. You barely have time to shove the condom in your mouth, as you see Andrei''s eyes:'
-						'"Ah, <<$name>>, nice of you to come! Wait, I''ll give you a piece of paper, you need to sign it" the manager comes to his desk for a long time and finally goes through the papers handing you a sheet.'
+						'"Ah, <<$name>>, nice of you to come! Wait, I have something to sign for you." the manager comes over to his desk and looks through his paper for a long time finally handing you a sheet.'
 						'You absolutely do not read it, sign it, then utter:'
 						'"G''bye" You leave the office and run straight to the locker room, take the condom out of your mouth, and throw it in the trash.'
-						'It is good, that Andrew M. tied the condom before throwing it away, otherwise you would have had a mouth full of sperm!'
+						'At least Andrei tied the condom up before throwing it away, otherwise you would have had a mouth full of sperm!'
 
 						act 'Finish the job':dynamic $endwork
 					end
@@ -546,7 +545,7 @@ gs 'cum_manage'
 			'<b><center><font size="4">Case for paper</font></center></b>'
 
 			if katia = 1:
-				'Kate comes in again today. She is a very shy girl and it is difficult to understand what''s on her mind. You told her several times to ask questions, when she comes in, looks through the clothes and buys nothing, but she always remains silent. You simply want to help.'
+				'Today Katia comes in again. She is a very shy girl and it is difficult to understand what''s on her mind. You told her several times to ask questions, when she comes in, looks through the clothes and buys nothing, but she always remains silent. You simply want to help.'
 				'It is a pity that the staff is forbidden to invite friends to shop and chat with them, because of this you have to stay away from Katie''s on. Although, if you could talk to her, you doubt that you would have a constructive dialogue. Usually all the questions she answers with:"I do not know, " "simple, " or "Well .." and silence.'
 				'You think that Kate is constantly looking at you, and when you look back, she smiles, blushes and turns away.'
 
@@ -576,24 +575,24 @@ gs 'cum_manage'
 			'<b><center><font size="4"><font color="black">Heavy day</font></center></b>'
 			'There are a lot of buyers today. You are exhausted. You are working hard, there is barely any time to make conversation. And it has only been two hours.'
 			'At the end of your shift the manager comes and asks you to stay for another hour.'
-			'"Listen, <<$name>>, we have a problem: as you can see - we are short on staff. Hang on for an hour, and I''ll give you a premium, you will not regret it!"'
+			'"Listen, <<$name>>, we have a problem: as you can see we are short on staff. Hang on for another hour, and I''ll give you a premium, you will not regret it!"'
 
-			act 'Good':
+			act 'Stay for another hour':
 				cla
 				minut+= 70
 				young_shop_bonus += 3
 				gs 'stat'
-				'It seems that you have no choice:You can not throw him to the wolves!'
-				'After working for an hour, you are very tired, but the thought of a premium warms the soul.'
+				'It seems that you have no choice. You can''t let down your co-workers.'
+				'After working for another hour, you are very tired, but the thought of a premium warms the soul.'
 
 
 				act 'Finish the job':dynamic $endwork
 			end
 
-			act 'I can not':
+			act 'I can''t':
 				cla
 				if young_shop_bonus > 0:young_shop_bonus -= 1
-				'"If it was any other day, but today I can not.." you begin to make excuses, but the manager just shrugs:'
+				'"If it was any other day, fine, but today I can''t.." you begin to make excuses, but the manager just shrugs:'
 				'"Okay, go home, we''ll manage without you. Just don''t count on a bonus for today!"'
 
 				act 'Finish the job':dynamic $endwork
@@ -619,7 +618,7 @@ gs 'stat'
 
 if $ARGS[0] = '0':
 	cla
-	'In the shop there is a black man looking at long underwear. He is asking for you to try it on, referring to the fact that you have the same figure as his girlfriend.'
+	'There is a black man in the shop looking at long underwear. He is asking for you to try it on, telling you that you have the same figure as his girlfriend.'
 
 	act 'Refuse':dynamic $endwork
 
@@ -630,13 +629,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '0':
 		act 'Leave':dynamic $endwork
 	end
 
-	act 'To change when it':
+	act 'Change right here':
 		cla
 		*clr
 		guy += 1
 		picrand = 19
 		'<center><img src="images/img/centr/mag0.jpg"></center>'
-		'You begin to change right in front of him, twisting his back in front of him and otherwise demonstrating all your charms, soon you have achieved your desired outcome. After you once again opened your legs demonstrating your pussy he kneels in front of you and presses his lips to your crotch'
+		'You begin to change right in front of him, showing off your body and otherwise demonstrating all your charms. Soon you seem to get what you want. After you once again spread your legs showing off your panties he kneels in front of you and presses his lips to your crotch'
 
 		act 'Entertain':gt 'sex', 'kuni'
 	end
@@ -648,7 +647,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '1':
 
 	act 'Refuse':dynamic $endwork
 
-	act 'Change into the booth':
+	act 'Change in the booth':
 		cla
 		*clr
 		picrand = 29
@@ -664,7 +663,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '2':
 	cla
 	*clr
 	'<center><img src="images/img/centr/mag2.jpg"></center>'
-	'In the store there is a young couple. They walk around the store for a long time and constantly look over to you, arguing. They come up to you and the girl, looking strongly embarrassed, tries to explain what they want from you. From what she tells you you understand that she is still a virgin and is not yet ready to have sex, but also does not want to lose the guy, so he finds girls he wants to sleep with, and she oversees the process. She offers you 2000rub to have sex with her boyfriend right there with her.'
+	'A young couple is in the store. They walk around the store for a long time and constantly look over to you, seemingly arguing. They come up to you and the girl, looking very embarrassed, tries to explain what they want from you. From what she tells you she is still a virgin and is not yet ready to have sex. But she also does not want to lose the guy, so he finds girls he wants to sleep with, and she oversees the process. She offers you 2000 rubles to have sex with her boyfriend with here in the room.'
 
 	act 'Refuse':dynamic $endwork
 
@@ -680,14 +679,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '3':
 	cla
 	*clr
 	'<center><img src="images/img/centr/mag3.jpg"></center>'
-	'In the store there are some company guys walking down the hall arguing about something, and after that come up to you and announce to you that they had an argument, you''re a little taken aback when you find out the essence of the dispute. It turns out that they had an argument whether you can tell that the cock you are sucking is black or white while being blindolded. The winner will fuck you.'
+	'There are some guys walking down the hall, two of them white, the other two black. They seem to argue about something and soon come up to you to tell you about the reason. You are a little taken aback when you find out they were discussing whether you can tell the difference between sucking a black and a white cock while being blindfolded. The winners of the argument will fuck you, if you agree to help them find it out.'
 
 	act 'Send them away':dynamic $endwork
 
-	act 'Ask what you get':
+	act 'Ask what else you''ll get':
 		cla
 		picrand = 15
-		'You ask what you will get for this and the guys laugh and say that you will get an unforgettable feeling.'
+		'You ask what else you will get for this and the guys laugh and say that you will get an unforgettable feeling.'
 
 		act 'Send them':dynamic $endwork
 
@@ -698,7 +697,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '3':
 			dynamic $CatName, 'Worker', '$boy1'
 			guy += 2
 			'<center><img src="images/img/centr/mag4.jpg"></center>'
-			'You take the guys to the back room where they unzip their pants and pull out their members. You are blindfolded and you start trying to find out the difference through the taste, but you can not guess which is which. The two white guys win, the others leave the back room.'
+			'You take the guys to the back room where they unzip their pants and pull out their members. You are blindfolded and you start trying to find out the difference through the taste of their cocks, but you can not guess which is which. Since you can''t find it out the two white guys win the bet and the others leave the back room.'
 
 			act 'Prize winners':xgt 'sexdvoe', 'var'
 		end
@@ -709,7 +708,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '4':
 	cla
 	*clr
 	'<center><img src="images/img/centr/mag5.jpg"></center>'
-	'For half of the day two Guys in the store are always flirting with you and distracting you from your work. They pinch your ass, and after several unsuccessful attempts to send them away, you are quite desperate to get rid of them.'
+	'For half of the day two guys in the store are always flirting with you and distracting you from your work. They pinch your ass, and after several unsuccessful attempts to send them away, you are quite desperate to get rid of them.'
 
 	act 'Call the manager':
 		cla
@@ -729,25 +728,25 @@ end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = '5':
 	cla
-	'Two Girls stopped by the store, and for about an hour you show them the goods while they are constantly touching you you as if by accident. When they bought all they wanted, one of them comes up to you and asks if she can kiss you on the lips. You''re a little dumbfounded by such a forward question:'
+	'Two Girls stopped by the store, and for about an hour you show them the goods while they are constantly touching you you as if by accident. When they bought all they wanted, one of them comes up to you and asks if she can kiss you on the lips. You''re a little dumbfounded by her forwardness:'
 	'"Of course, everything you wish"'
-	'"Well, then take off your panties, I want to kiss your lips"'
+	'"Well, then take off your panties. Like I said: I want to kiss your lips"'
 
 	act 'Send them away':dynamic $endwork
 
-	act 'Remove briefs':
+	act 'Do as you were told':
 		cla
 		*clr
 		girl += 2
 		lesbian += 1
 		'<center><img src="images/img/centr/mag6.jpg"></center>'
-		'You pull off your panties lie down on the counter and spread your legs. She crouches down to your pussy lips and starts licking your clit then fucking your vagina with her long tongue. It feels good and after a couple of minutes you flinch from orgasm.'
+		'You pull off your panties, lie down on the counter and spread your legs. She crouches down to your pussy lips and starts licking your clit then fucking your vagina with her long tongue. It feels good and after a couple of minutes you flinch from orgasm.'
 
 		act 'Thank her':
 			cla
 			*clr
 			'<center><img src="images/img/centr/mag7.jpg"></center>'
-			'You pull the girl down on the floor and dig into her crotch lips caressing her pussy with your tongue. Soon she grabs your head and strongly pushes you to her pussy as she comes violently, her juices spreading over your lips and chin.'
+			'You pull the girl down on the floor and dig into her crotch lips, caressing her pussy with your tongue. Soon she grabs your head and strongly pushes you to her pussy as she comes violently, her juices spreading over your lips and chin.'
 
 			act 'Further':
 				cla
@@ -755,13 +754,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '5':
 				'<center><img src="images/img/centr/mag8.jpg"></center>'
 				'All this time the second girl stood on the sidelines masturbating while watching you. When you are finished she sits in a chair and spreads her legs wide calling to you:'
 				'"Hey girls, you completely forget about me"'
-				'The two of you go over to the girl and kneeling down begin to lick her pussy, your tongues constantly in contact. It was like what a strange kiss'
+				'The two of you go over to the girl, kneel down and begin to lick her pussy, your tongues constantly in contact. It feels like a strange kiss'
 
 				act 'Further':
 					cla
 					*clr
 					'<center><img src="images/img/centr/mag9.jpg"></center>'
-					'One of the girls walks away, leaving you alone to meet her friend. You diligently lick her clitoris without forgetting to stuff your tongue into her vagina. Soon she squeezes her legs together and your head is trapped between her thighs, unable to breathe, her juices flooding into your mouth. When she finally opens her legs your whole face is covered in her secretions. As they are running down her legs, you once again use your tongue carefully licking her thighs, leaving them without a drop of juice.'
+					'One of the girls walks away, leaving you alone with her friend. You diligently lick her clitoris without forgetting to stuff your tongue into her vagina. Soon she squeezes her legs together and your head is trapped between her thighs, leaving you unable to breathe, her juices flooding into your mouth. When she finally opens her legs your whole face is covered in her secretions. As they are running down her legs, you once again use your tongue to carefully lick every last drop of juice from her thighs.'
 
 					act 'Leave':dynamic $endwork
 				end