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  1. 28 28
      locations/bedrPar
  2. 4 4
      locations/bedrPar2
  3. 10 10
      locations/gtelefon
  4. 38 39
      locations/korrPar
  5. 23 23
      locations/kuhrPar
  6. 3 3
      locations/seeparentsex
  7. 98 98
      locations/selfplay
  8. 8 8
      locations/sitrPar
  9. 6 1
      locations/start
  10. 24 24
      locations/vanrPar

+ 28 - 28
locations/bedrPar

@@ -16,10 +16,11 @@ if sisboyday + 1 = daystart and hour = 18:gt'sisterQW','sisboyQW_expel'
 '<center><b><font color="maroon">Your bedroom</font></b></center>'
 ! WD: Correct Image path ~ "images/qwest/alter/<<$loc>>.jpg"
 '<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/bedrPar.jpg"></center>'
-'Small room in which hardly squeezed <a href="exec:gt ''clothing'', ''view_clothing_list'', ''wardrobe''">cabinet</a>, your <a href="exec:gt ''bed2''">bed</a>, <a href="exec:gt ''stol'' ,''stolPar''">desk</a> bed and sisters.'
-if komp = 1:'On the table is your <a href="exec:gorodokKomp = 1 & GT ''Komp'',''start''">laptop</a>.'
+'A small room in which you and your sister live. It contains a <a href="exec:gt ''clothing'', ''view_clothing_list'', ''wardrobe''">wardrobe</a> for your clothes, your <a href="exec:gt ''bed2''">bed</a>, a <a href="exec:gt ''stol'' ,''stolPar''">desk</a> and your sister''s bed.'
+if komp = 1:'Your <a href="exec:gorodokKomp = 1 & GT ''Komp'',''start''">laptop</a> is on the desk.'
 gorodokKomp = 0
 
+
 gad = 0
 
 if sisboyQW > 10:sisboyQW = 10
@@ -36,7 +37,7 @@ else
 	gs'family'
 
 	if rexCarCount >= 9 and sisterHere = 1 and hour < 3 and rexSmsDay ! daystart and smsForRex < 13:
-		act 'Take your sisters phone':gt 'reks','sms'
+		act 'Take your sister''s phone':gt 'reks','sms'
 	end
 
 ! WD: add Underwear change
@@ -52,30 +53,30 @@ else
 
 			manna -= 10
 			'<center><img src="images/etogame/study.jpg"></center>'
-			'You sat on the course work and prepared her for <<kursovik>> percent.'
+			'You sit down at the desk and do your coursework, you''ve finished <<kursovik>> percent of it.'
 
-			act 'Leave':gt $curloc
+			act 'Leave your desk':gt $curloc
 		end
 	end
 
 	if horny >= 50 and sisterHere = 0:
 		act 'Masturbate':gt 'selfplay'
 	end
-	if pornMagazine > 0:'Under the mattress you have hidden pornozhurnal.'
+	if pornMagazine > 0:'You have hidden your porn magazines under the mattress of your bed.'
 	if sisterHere = 0 and pornMagazine > 0:dynamic $d_read_porn
 
 	dynamic $d_read_book
 
-	if tovarL > 0:'You have kept <<tovarL>> One unit of small goods. The maximum you can keep in your room 30 One unit of product.'
+	if tovarL > 0:'You currently have <<tovarL>> grams of drugs. The maximum you can keep in your room is 30 grams.'
 
 	if card > 0:
-		act 'Take a deck of cards':gt 'card'
+		act 'Look at your deck of cards':gt 'card'
 	end
 
-	if dur > 0:'You have hidden <<dur>> doses pale lady'
+	if dur > 0:'You have hidden <<dur>> doses of Pale Lady.'
 
 	if dur > 0 and narkday ! daystart:
-		act 'Nyuhnut pale lady 5 min':
+		act 'Use some Pale Lady (0:05)':
 			cla
 			*clr
 			minut += 5
@@ -87,21 +88,21 @@ else
 			nark += 10
 			dur -= 1
 			'<center><img src="images/etogame/dur.jpg"></center>'
-			'You otsypali dose of powder and its nyuhnuli, then you feel just fine.'
+			'You snort some Pale Lady, feeling dizzy for just a moment. After that you feel fantastic, and incredibly horny.'
 
-			act 'Leave':gt $curloc
+			act 'Return':gt $curloc
 		end
 	end
 end
 
 if tanga = 0:
-	act 'Wear Underwear':
+	act 'Wear underwear':
 		cla
 		tanga = 1
 		gt $curloc
 	end
 elseif tanga = 1:
-	act 'Remove Underwear':
+	act 'Take off your underwear':
 		cla
 		tanga = 0
 		gt $curloc
@@ -111,35 +112,35 @@ end
 sports = 0
 
 if obruch > 0 and obruchday ! daystart:
-	$sitrobr = '<a href="exec: dynamic $sitrobrd ">twist wrap</a>'
+	$sitrobr = '<a href="exec: dynamic $sitrobrd ">Hula hoop</a>'
 	sports = 1
 else
 	$sitrobr = ''
 end
 
 if bookYog > 0 and bookYogday ! daystart:
-	$sitryog = '<a href="exec: dynamic $sitryogd ">Meditation</a>'
+	$sitryog = '<a href="exec: dynamic $sitryogd ">Meditate</a>'
 	sports = 1
 else
 	$sitryog = ''
 end
 
 if skak > 0 and skakday ! daystart:
-	$sitrskak = '<a href="exec: dynamic $sitrskakd ">jumping rope</a>'
+	$sitrskak = '<a href="exec: dynamic $sitrskakd ">Jumping rope</a>'
 	sports = 1
 else
 	$sitrskak = ''
 end
 
 if pressday ! daystart:
-	$sitrpress = '<a href="exec: dynamic $sitrpressd ">abdominal exercises</a>'
+	$sitrpress = '<a href="exec: dynamic $sitrpressd ">Abdominal exercises</a>'
 	sports = 1
 else
 	$sitrpress = ''
 end
 
 if pushday ! daystart:
-	$sitrpush = '<a href="exec: dynamic $sitrpushd ">push-ups</a>'
+	$sitrpush = '<a href="exec: dynamic $sitrpushd ">Push-ups</a>'
 	sports = 1
 else
 	$sitrpush = ''
@@ -152,9 +153,9 @@ if sports = 1:
 	'<center><<$sportsitr>></center>'
 end
 
-if gobelen>0:'Ready Tapestry <<gobelen>> Pieces'
-if poSkill>=50 and tkan>0:'Your cloth will suffice for <<tkan>> lessons'
-if poSkill>=50 and tkan<=0:'You do not have fabric'
+if gobelen>0:'You have <<gobelen>> completed tapestries.'
+if poSkill>=50 and tkan>0:'You have enough fabric for <<tkan>> lessons.'
+if poSkill>=50 and tkan<=0:'You do not have any fabric.'
 if poSkill>=200:
 	if newgobelen=0 and tkan>0:
 		act'Start a new tapestry':
@@ -163,13 +164,13 @@ if poSkill>=200:
 			newgobelen=1
 			minut+=15
 			gs'stat'
-			'You are within 15 minutes prepared tissue on which pattern will embroider and broadly marked out the outlines of a pattern.'
+			'You spend 15 minutes at the embroidery frame, preparing the fabric and outlining the pattern for the tapestry.'
 			act'Set aside':gt $curloc
 		end
 	end
 	if newgobelen>=1:
-		'Tapestry is ready for <<newgobelen/10>> percent'
-		act'Embroidering a tapestry for an hour':
+		'Your tapestry is <<newgobelen/10>> percent finished.'
+		act'Work on the tapestry for an hour':
 			cls
 			minut+=60
 			poSkill+=rand(0,1000)
@@ -177,17 +178,16 @@ if poSkill>=200:
 			gobramin=poSkill/200
 			newgobelen+=rand(gobramin,gobramax)
 			gs'stat'
-			if newgobelen<1000:'You are within an hour embroidered tapestry and now he is ready to <<newgobelen/10>> percent'
+			if newgobelen<1000:'You spent an hour working on your tapestry, which is now <<newgobelen/10>> percent finished.'
 				if newgobelen>=1000:
 				newgobelen=0
 				gobelen+=1
-				'You managed to fully embroidered tapestry.'
+				'Your work on the tapestry is done.'
 			end
 			act'Set aside':gt $curloc
 		end
 	end
 end
 
-
 --- bedrPar ---------------------------------
 

+ 4 - 4
locations/bedrPar2

@@ -15,13 +15,13 @@ lcolor = rgb(106, 90, 205)
 '<center><b><font color="maroon">Master bedroom</font></b></center>'
 ! WD: Correct Image path ~ "images/qwest/alter/<<$loc>>.jpg"
 '<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/bedrPar2.jpg"></center>'
-'The room in which the parents live. In the center stands a double bed and a large clowall.'
+'The room in which your parents live. Their large bed, wardrobe and other closets take up most of the space.'
 gs 'family'
 
 if hour > 6 and hour < 21 and prezikday ! daystart:
 	if prezikProver >= 3:
 		prezikday = daystart - 4
-		act 'Take condoms from your parents stash':
+		act 'Take condoms from your parents'' stash':
 			cls
 			cla
 			gs 'stat'
@@ -30,11 +30,11 @@ if hour > 6 and hour < 21 and prezikday ! daystart:
 			prezikday = daystart
 			prezikProver = 0
 			'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/condoms_steal.jpg"></center>'
-			'You quietly pulled out of the parent caches some condoms. Now you have <<prezik>> pcs.'
+			'After you make sure you''re not seen, you quickly search your parents'' room for their condom stash and take a few. Now you have <<prezik>> pcs.'
 			act 'Exit the room':gt 'korrPar'
 		end
 	else
-		'You have recently taken condoms parent caches. If they often carry, something that parents can-the suspect.'
+		'You have already taken some condoms out of your parents'' stash recently. You should wait a while, otherwise they might get suspicious.'
 	end
 end
 

+ 10 - 10
locations/gtelefon

@@ -3,16 +3,16 @@ boyinday[numnpcboy] = daystart
 Gcall = 0
 minut += 3
 gs 'stat'
-'You take the phone, "Hello."'
+'You pick up the phone, "Hello?"'
 
 if boyvstre[numnpcboy] > 0:
-	'Male voice on the phone says "Hello <<$name>> is I <<$nameBoyfrend[numnpcboy]>>, let''s go to somewhere to walk."'
+	'A male voice on the phone says "Hi <<$name>>! It''s me, <<$nameBoyfrend[numnpcboy]>>. Let''s go for a walk somewhere."'
 else
-	'In the tube, a male voice says "Hello Can <<$name>>?"'
-	'You answer the caller that you are the <<$name>>. Stranger delighted "I <<$nameBoyfrend[numnpcboy]>>, we''re met at a disco. Remember? Let''s go for a walk."'
+	'Through the phone, a male voice says "Hello, I''m looking for <<$name>>?"'
+	'You answer the caller that you are <<$name>>. The stranger sounds delighted. "Hi! I''m <<$nameBoyfrend[numnpcboy]>>, we met at the disco. Remember? Let''s go for a walk."'
 end
 
-act 'I''m busy today':
+act 'Tell him you have no time today':
 	cls
 	minut += 3
 
@@ -24,13 +24,13 @@ act 'I''m busy today':
 
 	if otnBoyFrend[numnpcboy] > 20:
 		!!otnBoyFrend[numnpcboy] = 0
-		'<<$nameBoyfrend[numnpcboy]>> upset. "Well, then, as something next time."'
+		'<<$nameBoyfrend[numnpcboy]>> sounds upset. "I see. Well, maybe next time then."'
 	else
 		otnBoyFrend[numnpcboy] = 0
-		'<<$nameBoyfrend[numnpcboy]>> angry. "Well, if you went to the dick." And hung up.'
+		'<<$nameBoyfrend[numnpcboy]>> sounds angry. "Whatever, screw you!" he said, and hung up immediately after. You don''t think you''ll hear from him again.'
 	end
 
-	act 'Hangup':gt 'korrPar'
+	act 'Hang up':gt 'korrPar'
 end
 
 if GvstreBoy = 0:
@@ -41,9 +41,9 @@ if GvstreBoy = 0:
 		GvstreBoyAfter[numnpcboy] = 1
 		SkverBoy = numnpcboy
 		gs 'stat'
-		'You are invited to meet in the park.'
+		'You agree to meet him in the park.'
 
-		act 'Hangup':gt 'korrPar'
+		act 'Hang up':gt 'korrPar'
 	end
 end
 

+ 38 - 39
locations/korrPar

@@ -31,11 +31,11 @@ if blockBedrPar = 0:
 end
 
 act 'Go to my parents'' room':gt 'bedrPar2'
-act 'Going to the living room':gt 'sitrPar'
+act 'Go to the living room':gt 'sitrPar'
 act 'Go to the bathroom':gt 'vanrPar'
 act 'Go to the kitchen':gt 'kuhrPar'
 
-act '<font color = maroon>The entrance</font>':
+act '<font color = maroon>Leave the apartment and go to the stairwell</font>':
 	if $clothingworntype ! 'nude':
 		gt'pod_ezd','etaj_2'
 	else
@@ -45,7 +45,7 @@ act '<font color = maroon>The entrance</font>':
 end
 
 
-act '<font color = maroon><b>Go to the street</b></font>':
+act '<font color = maroon><b>Leave the apartment and go outside</b></font>':
 	if $clothingworntype ! 'nude':
 		gt'gorodok'
 	else
@@ -56,13 +56,13 @@ end
 
 '<center><b><font color="maroon">corridor</font></b></center>'
 '<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/korrPar.jpg"></center>'
-'On the wall near the front door hanging <a href="exec:gt ''mirror'', ''start''">mirror</a>.'
+'A <a href="exec:gt ''mirror'', ''start''">mirror</a> hangs on the wall, near the front door.'
 
-if palto > 0:'Hanging on the hook <<$palto>>'
+if palto > 0:'Your <<$palto>> is on a hook, next to the mirror.'
 
 gs 'family'
 
-if indorf = 1:'With your parents away visiting your grandparents, the appartment seems quiet and empty.'
+if indorf = 1:'With your parents being away to visit your grandparents, the apartment seems quiet and empty.'
 
 !to add a counter if you avoid Dimka
 if nodimkaK >= rand(7,10) and DimkaWarnedToday = 0:
@@ -78,11 +78,11 @@ if hour >= 16 and hour <= 20 and indorf = 0:
 		BrotherNoDay = day
 		manna = 0
 		gs 'stat'
-		'<center><b><font color="maroon">mom</font></b></center>'
+		'<center><b><font color="maroon">Mom</font></b></center>'
 		'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/mother.jpg"></center>'
-		'Mom backed hips hands "I then tossed a video with you ....... I never smacked you ....yes see in vain ... You realize that maybe this video is not only my? What about you now will speak.. What about you ... about all our family ... I guess you need to teach you a lesson. Volodya!"'
+		'Your mother stands in the hallway waiting for you, clearly angry. As soon as she sees you, she grabs your ear and pinches it hard, making you wince in pain. "I just saw this video of you sucking some guy''s dick! What the hell were you thinking!? Your stepfather and I worked so hard to raise you properly, and then you do this. Do you realize that maybe this video was sent to others too? What will the people in town think of us now? I oughta teach you a lesson. What do you have to say for yourself!? Speak up!"'
 
-		act 'Beg to do nothing':
+		act 'Beg her to do nothing':
 			cls
 			mothervideotalk = 2
 			minut += 5
@@ -90,9 +90,9 @@ if hour >= 16 and hour <= 20 and indorf = 0:
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><b><font color="maroon">mom</font></b></center>'
 			'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/mother.jpg"></center>'
-			'You burst into tears: "Mommy !forgive! This will never happen again! I made ​​a fool that ''s what I ''ll never..never_..." You weep and kneel. Mother looks at you and shakes his head out.'
+			'You burst into tears: "Mommy, please forgive me! It will will never happen again! I made a stupid mistake, I''m sorry... I didn''t mean to... please... I don''t... sorry..." You fall to your knees sobbing uncontrollably, hoping she will have mercy on you. Your mother looks at down at you, still angry but not quite sure what to do. She lets out an exasperated gasp, shakes her head and walks away.'
 
-			act 'Move away':gt $curloc
+			act 'Get back on your feet':gt $curloc
 		end
 
 		act 'Be silent':
@@ -103,24 +103,24 @@ if hour >= 16 and hour <= 20 and indorf = 0:
 			spank += 1
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/artom/spank.jpg"></center>'
-			'You stand staring at the floor. And what can I say?'
-			'Mother takes you by the hand and leads into the room: "Take off your pants and bend over!" You shake my head. " Volodya - keep it!" Stepfather grabs you and keeps .mother pulls your underwear takes the belt and starts to flog you. Gritting her teeth . Lifting his head as you see through the open door behind it to watch your brother and sister.'
+			'You stand in the hallway staring at the floor, too embarrased to say anything. What is there to say, anyway?'
+			'Your mother grabs you by the arm and pulls you into the living room: "Take off your pants and bend over!" You shake your head, not liking where this is going at all. Getting even angrier by your refusal, she shouts: "Vladimir, hold her down!" Your stepfather pulls you down and keeps you in place, while your mother pulls away your clothing. She then grabs a belt and starts to flog your bare ass with it, not holding back at all. You take your punishment as good as you can, but towards the end you''re in tears and your cries are heard throughout the apartment. When it''s finally over, you raise your head just in time to catch the startled faces of your brother and sister in the doorway.'
 
-			act 'Move away':gt $curloc
+			act 'Stand up and straighten your clothes':gt $curloc
 		end
 
 		if momslut >= 2:
-			act 'Threaten':
+			act 'Threaten her':
 				cls
 				mothervideotalk = 1
 				minut += 5
 				gs 'stat'
-				'<center><b><font color="maroon">A_Mother</font></b></center>'
+				'<center><b><font color="maroon">Mom</font></b></center>'
 				'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/mother.jpg"></center>'
-				'"Come on -come_on - call the father! I''ll tell you what his daughter! And who went!"'
-				'Mother is looking at you and spit on the floor leaves.'
+				'You slap away her hand with a defiant look in your eyes. "Oh, really? You''re no angel yourself either, Mom... does Dad know what YOU have been up to lately? Why don''t we go ask him, while we''re on this subject?"'
+				'Your mother looks at you furiously, but is at a loss for words. After a few seconds of awkward silence she storms off, slamming the door shut behind her.'
 
-				act 'Move away':gt $curloc
+				act 'Continue':gt $curloc
 			end
 		end
 
@@ -134,7 +134,7 @@ if hour >= 16 and hour <= 20 and indorf = 0:
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><b><font color="maroon">Mom</font></b></center>'
 		'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/mother.jpg"></center>'
-		'Mom backed hips hands "What''s this about a video of you? How could you be this careless? You DO realize this is going to reflect badly on the entire family..."'
+		'When you enter the hallway, you find your mother waiting there for you. "What''s all this I hear about a video of you sucking some guy''s dick? How could you be so careless, <<$name>>? You do realize this makes our whole family look bad..."'
 
 		act 'Apologize':
 			cls
@@ -142,13 +142,12 @@ if hour >= 16 and hour <= 20 and indorf = 0:
 			minut += 5
 			mother -= 40
 			gs 'stat'
-			'<center><b><font color="maroon">mom</font></b></center>'
+			'<center><b><font color="maroon">Mom</font></b></center>'
 			'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/mother.jpg"></center>'
-			!!placeholder I guess, I''m sure I can come up with something better
-			'"I don''t know what to say, mom... I''m sorry"'
-			'Mother shakes her head, glaring at you, and walks away'
+			'"I don''t know what to say, mom... I''m really sorry."'
+			'Your mother is clearly very upset with you. After a short discussion, she walks away.'
 
-			act 'Move away':gt $curloc
+			act 'Continue':gt $curloc
 		end
 
 		exit
@@ -157,7 +156,7 @@ if hour >= 16 and hour <= 20 and indorf = 0:
 	if schoolprogul > 2 and SchoolAtestat = 0:
 		cls
 		gs 'stat'
-		'<center><b><font color="maroon">mom</font></b></center>'
+		'<center><b><font color="maroon">Mom</font></b></center>'
 		'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/mother.jpg"></center>'
 
 		if belgangQW=10000:
@@ -166,7 +165,7 @@ if hour >= 16 and hour <= 20 and indorf = 0:
 			GspravkaT = 2
 			motherKnowSpravka = 1
 			'"Oh, my darling <<$name>>, where have you been? We have been so worried."'
-			'You go into the kitchen with your mom and spend sometime explaining what happened to you, many of the details are too difficult to talk about and you cry and hug.'
+			'You go into the kitchen with your mom and spend some time explaining what happened to you. Many of the details are difficult to talk about, and you cry and hug as you tell your story.'
 			'Your mom tells you she will sort out everything with the school and makes you a bowl of chicken soup.'
 			if energy >= 30:
 				'You are too full to eat it.'
@@ -178,7 +177,7 @@ if hour >= 16 and hour <= 20 and indorf = 0:
 				end
 				fat += 3
 				energy += 10
-				'You have some of it, but can''t finish it.'
+				'You have some of the chicken soup, but can''t finish it.'
 			elseif energy < 20:
 				if water < 20:
 					water += 20
@@ -198,7 +197,7 @@ if hour >= 16 and hour <= 20 and indorf = 0:
 			ParHomeBlock = 1
 			schoolprogul = 0
 			if $clothingworntype = 'sforma':gs 'clothing', 'strip'
-			'In the corridor you vsrechaet mother, her eyes thundered. "Doprygat? Thee out of high school. All live the way you want, I am no longer a mother!" Mother gathered your things in a bag, put the bag in your hands and thrown by the scruff of the apartment.'
+			'As you enter the hallway, you find your mother there waiting for you. You have never seen her this furious. "<<$name>>? I just got off the phone with the school, they told me you didn''t show up yet again and expelled you. I''ve had it with you! I''ve warned you so many times! Go ahead, live your irresponsible life the way you want. You''re no longer welcome here." She already packed up all your things from your room before you got home, and roughly shoves the bag into your hands. After that, she pushes you out the door and slams it shut in your face.'
 
 			act 'Leave':gt 'gorodok'
 
@@ -207,16 +206,16 @@ if hour >= 16 and hour <= 20 and indorf = 0:
 			schoolPredupr = 2
 			schoolprogul = 0
 			Suspeh -= 40
-			'In the corridor you vsrechaet mother, her eyes thundered. "That was the school. Again You absenteeism. You already want to exclude from school, I was literally on his knees begging the directors can not exclude you and give you one last chance to reform. More because of you I will not be humiliated and remember. Next time you Departure from school! And if you fly out of school, I will personally kick him out of the house if you do not understand a normal relationship, then get out, no one does not keep you here! "Mother angrily left the room.'
+			'As you enter the hallway, you find your mother there waiting for you. She seems very angry with you. "School called, they said you didn''t show up for class again. They wanted to expel you! I had to go over there and beg the principal to give you one last chance. I''ve never felt so humiliated! This is the last straw for me, <<$name>>, you will not embarrass me any further. If you miss one more day of school, they will kick you out. And if you get kicked out of school, I will personally kick you out of the house. If you cannot be responsible and behave like a normal person, then get out, no one is forcing you to stay." Having said her piece, your mother turns around and leaves.'
 		elseif schoolPredupr = 0:
 			schoolPredupr = 1
 			mother = 0
 			schoolprogul = 0
 			Suspeh -= 20
-			'In the corridor you vsrechaet mother, her eyes thundered. "That was the school. You solid absenteeism. For the first time you have forgiven, but the next you just kicked. What are you doing, balbeska?" Mother angrily left the room.'
+			'As you enter the hallway, you find your mother there waiting for you. "<<$nickname>>? The school called, they said you weren't at school today. You know they're very unforgiving when it comes to absenteeism, they said they would expel you if it happens again. What are you doing with your life? Get it together!" Your mother angrily leaves the room, leaving you to your thoughts.'
 		end
 
-		act 'Move away':gt $curloc
+		act 'Continue':gt $curloc
 
 		exit
 	end
@@ -241,7 +240,7 @@ end
 
 :markboyfrendcall2
 
-if Gcall > 0:'In the hallway rings <a href="exec:gt ''gtelefon''">phone</a>.'
+if Gcall > 0:'You hear the <a href="exec:gt ''gtelefon''">phone</a> ringing in the hallway.'
 if motherWorry = 1 and indorf = 0:
 	gt'mother'
 elseif motherWorry = 1 and indorf > 0:
@@ -254,14 +253,14 @@ if notathomesleep > 7 and hour >= 16 and  hour < 21 and mother_go = 0:
 	if mother < 40:
 		'<center><b><font color = maroon>Mom</font></b></center>'
 		'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/mother.jpg"></center>'
-		'In the corridor you come across a mother: - Watch, who was. Permanently?'
-		act '<B>Move away</B>':gt 'korrPar'
+		'You run into your mother in the hallway. "Well well, look who decided to come home for once.'
+		act '<B>Continue</B>':gt 'korrPar'
 	end
 	if mother >= 40:
 		'<center><b><font color = maroon>Mom</font></b></center>'
 		'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/mother.jpg"></center>'
-		'In the corridor you come across a mother: - What a surprise! My docha arrived, I missed.'
-		act '<B>Move away</B>':gt 'korrPar'
+		'You run into your mother in the hallway. She looks happy to see you. "What a surprise! Welcome home honey, I missed you.'
+		act '<B>Continue</B>':gt 'korrPar'
 	end
 end
 
@@ -270,9 +269,9 @@ end
 gs'pod_whore'
 pod_client = RAND(0,100)
 if pod_whore_countQW <= 15:
-	if pod_client <= 5 and hour >= 10 and hour <= 23 and gorslut >=6 and podwhoreQW >=3: 'Who-It is ringing your door: <a href="exec: dynamic $pod_client_talk">open</a>'	
+	if pod_client <= 5 and hour >= 10 and hour <= 23 and gorslut >=6 and podwhoreQW >=3: 'Someone is at the door: <a href="exec: dynamic $pod_client_talk">Answer</a>'	
 elseif pod_whore_countQW > 15:
-	if pod_client <= 20 and hour >= 10 and hour <= 23 and gorslut >=6 and podwhoreQW >=3: 'Who-It is ringing your door: <a href="exec: dynamic $pod_client_talk">open</a>'
+	if pod_client <= 20 and hour >= 10 and hour <= 23 and gorslut >=6 and podwhoreQW >=3: 'Someone is at the door: <a href="exec: dynamic $pod_client_talk">Answer</a>'
 end	
 !'<<$pod_client>>'
 !==========================================!

+ 23 - 23
locations/kuhrPar

@@ -1,6 +1,6 @@
 # kuhrPar
 CLOSE ALL
-act 'Leave the room':gt 'korrPar'
+act 'Return to the hallway':gt 'korrPar'
 
 $metkaM = $ARGS[0]
 $locM = $CURLOC
@@ -14,7 +14,7 @@ bcolor = rgb(255, 255, 255)
 lcolor = rgb(106, 90, 205)
 '<center><b><font color="maroon">Kitchen</font></b></center>'
 '<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/kuhrPar.jpg"></center>'
-'In the kitchen, the stove is next to the sink. There is a large refrigerator in the corner and a kitchen table with chairs is against the wall.'
+'The kitchen is not very impressive, but it has everything your family needs. Since everyone has the habit of eating at different times, Mom usually pre-cooks the meals and stores them in the fridge. Of course, you could also just have a snack if you''re not that hungry.'
 gs 'family'
 
 act 'Eat (0:30)':
@@ -29,15 +29,15 @@ act 'Eat (0:30)':
 
 	if energy >= 30:
 		fat += 5
-		'You can no longer eat.'
+		'You try to eat, but are too full to enjoy the meal and can''t finish it.'
 	elseif energy >= 20 and energy < 30:
 		fat += 3
 		energy += 10
-		'You pushed through the power of a meal.'
+		'You''re not all that hungry, but have a meal anyway. Half-way through, you''re starting to regret it but feel bad throwing it out so you finish it anyway.'
 	elseif energy < 20:
 		energy += 20
 		!!fat += 1
-		'You gladly ate cooked food.'
+		'The food tastes good, you quietly thank your mother for always keeping the fridge stocked with these tasty meals.'
 	end
 
 	if water >= 20:
@@ -46,7 +46,7 @@ act 'Eat (0:30)':
 		water += 20
 		cumlip = 0
 		fbreath = 0
-		'You gladly drank a mug of tea.'
+		'You have a cup of tea, quenching your thirst.'
 	end
 
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -66,15 +66,15 @@ act 'Have a snack (0:15)':
 
 	if energy >= 30:
 		fat += 3
-		'You can no longer eat.'
+		'You try to enjoy the snack, but are too full to even finish it.'
 	elseif energy >= 20 and energy < 30:
 		fat += 1
 		energy += 5
-		'You pushed through the power of a meal.'
+		'You have a snack even though you''re not all that hungry, and half-way through start to regret it.'
 	elseif energy < 20:
 		energy += 10
 		!!fat += 1
-		'You gladly ate cooked food.'
+		'Even though it''s not good for you, the snack tastes great.'
 	end
 
 	if water >= 20:
@@ -83,7 +83,7 @@ act 'Have a snack (0:15)':
 		water += 20
 		cumlip = 0
 		fbreath = 0
-		'You gladly drank a mug of tea.'
+		'You have a cup of tea, quenching your thirst.'
 	end
 
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -100,7 +100,7 @@ act 'Drink':
 		water += 20
 		cumlip = 0
 		fbreath = 0
-		'You gladly drank a mug of tea.'
+		'You have a cup of tea, quenching your thirst.'
 	end
 
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -109,7 +109,7 @@ act 'Drink':
 end
 
 if pranik > 0:
-	'Cookies will suffice for <<pranik>> time.'
+	'You have <<pranik>> cookies.'
 
 	act 'Drink tea with cookies (0:05)':
 		cla
@@ -126,7 +126,7 @@ if pranik > 0:
 		frost = 0
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img src="images/pics/food.jpg"></center>'
-		'You drank tea with cookies, sweet and very bad for the figure, but so nice.'
+		'You drank tea and enjoyed the cookies. You know they''re too sweet and can''t be good for your figure, but they taste so good!'
 
 		act 'Get up from the table':gt $curloc
 	end
@@ -143,13 +143,13 @@ if edaD > 0:
 		edaD -= 1
 		'<center><img src="images/pics/food.jpg"></center>'
 		if energy >= 30:
-			'You can no longer eat.'
+			'You prepare a diet meal and try to eat it, but you're really not hungry at all. You can't finish the meal.'
 		elseif energy >= 20 and energy < 30:
 			energy += 10
-			'You pushed through the power of a meal.'
+			'You try to enjoy the diet meal, but half-way in you realize you weren''t all that hungry yet. You manage to finish the meal, but feel like it was kind of wasted.'
 		elseif energy < 20:
 			energy += 20
-			'You gladly ate cooked food.'
+			'The diet meal is tasty, and you enjoy eating it.'
 		end
 
 		if water >= 20:
@@ -158,7 +158,7 @@ if edaD > 0:
 			water += 20
 			cumlip = 0
 			fbreath = 0
-			'You gladly drank a cup of tea.'
+			'You have a cup of tea, quenching your thirst.'
 		end
 
 		act 'Get up from the table':gt $curloc
@@ -176,14 +176,14 @@ if fatdel > 0:
 
 		if fat < 0:fat = 0
 
-		'You drank fat burning capsule. These capsules are gradually and results will be seen at once.'
+		'You throw the capsule of fat burners in a glass, add some water and drink it. You''re amazed at how fast the capsule works, feeling your body slim down almost immediately.'
 
 		act 'Get up from the table':gt $curloc
 	end
 end
 
 if lekarstvo > 0:
-	'you <<lekarstvo>> tablets.'
+	'You have <<lekarstvo>> tablet(s).'
 
 	if sick > 0 and lekarday ! daystart:
 		act 'Take a pill (0:05)':
@@ -195,15 +195,15 @@ if lekarstvo > 0:
 			sick -= sick * 20 / 100
 			lekrand = rand(1, 9)
 			'<center><img src="images/inBed/lekr<<picrand>>.jpg"></center>'
-			'You swallowed the pill'
+			'You swallow the pill, and shortly after you feel a bit better.'
 
-			act 'move away':gt $curloc
+			act 'Move away':gt $curloc
 		end
 	end
 end
 
 if vitamin > 0:
-	'you <<vitamin>> vitaminok.'
+	'You have <<vitamin>> vitamin pills.'
 
 	if vitaminday ! daystart:
 		act 'Take vitamins (0:05)':
@@ -225,7 +225,7 @@ if vitamin > 0:
 
 			if skinvan = 20:skinvan = 0 & skin += 1
 
-			'You took some vitamins'
+			'You take some vitamins to stay healthy.'
 
 			act 'Move away':gt $curloc
 		end

+ 3 - 3
locations/seeparentsex

@@ -2,18 +2,18 @@
 parentsexday = daystart
 gs 'stat'
 '<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/ev2/see.jpg"></center>'
-'Looking at the door to his parents in the bedroom as you saw your mother ''s stepfather fucks cancer.'
+'Hearing a sound, you quietly move to the door to your parents'' room. You see your mother on her hands and knees, getting fucked by your stepfather.'
 
 act 'Leave':gt 'korrPar'
 
 if horny >= 50:
-	act 'Peep':
+	act 'Stay and watch':
 		cls
 		horny += 10
 		minut += 15
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/ev2/see.jpg"></center>'
-		'You pry as your nurse podmahivaet asshole stepfather.'
+		'Making sure they don''t notice you, you stay for a while and watch. You can''t help but get a bit more aroused, seeing how much your mother is enjoying the rough pounding she''s receiving from your stepfather.'
 
 		act 'Leave':gt 'korrPar'
 	 end

+ 98 - 98
locations/selfplay

@@ -4,16 +4,16 @@ $d_self_ass_fingering = {
 }
 
 $d_self_fingering = {
-	act 'Poke a finger in the vagina':
+	act 'Put a finger inside your vagina':
 		cls
 		minut += 2
 		selfplaytime += 2
 		'<center><img src="images/qwest/selfplay/finger.jpg"></center>'
 
 		if vagina = 0 and mesec <= 0:
-			'You caress fingers on his lips soft and wet pussy and began to gradually introduce his finger in the pussy, but you stumble upon a resilient barrier their hymen.'
+			'You let your fingers dart over your soft and wet pussy lips, before gradually attempting to slide your finger into your pussy. You can''t get your finger all the way in, stumbling on a barrier which you figure must be your hymen.'
 
-			act 'Pierce the hymen':
+			act 'Break your hymen':
 				cls
 				horny -= 25
 				vagina += 1
@@ -22,27 +22,27 @@ $d_self_fingering = {
 				manna -= 100
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img src="images/qwest/selfplay/finger.jpg"></center>'
-				'You stuck my finger in the pussy and forcefully pressed the hymen, it is a little bent inside your body and suddenly broke your finger and went inside completely. Inside was a little pussy hurt, you got yourself out of his finger and saw that he was in the blood.'
+				'You press harder, forcing your finger against your hymen. It gives in, and suddenly your finger slides all the way in. Your pussy hurts a little now, and your finger has some blood on it when you pull it out.'
 
 				act 'Rest':gt $curloc
 			end
 		elseif vagina > 0:
-			'You have entered my finger into the vagina and then another.'
+			'You slide one finger into your vagina, and then another.'
 
 			if vagina < 5:
 				horny += rand(2, 5)
-				'Slippery walls of your pussy very tightly clasped fingers.'
+				'You feel your pussy clasping around your fingers very tightly.'
 			elseif vagina >= 5 and vagina < 10:
 				horny += rand(5, 10)
-				'You feel your pussy slippery wall around your fingers.'
+				'You feel your slippery pussy walls around your fingers. It feels nice and tight.'
 			elseif vagina >= 10:
 				horny += rand(2, 5)
-				'Your pussy is quite spacious for a couple of fingers sliding your fingers and you feel your pussy slippery wall.'
+				'Having your fingers in your pussy feels nice, but it doesn''t feel very tight. You feel like you can take more.'
 			elseif vagina < 5:
 				vaginaTemp += 1
 			end
 
-			act 'Fuck her fingers':
+			act 'Fuck your fingers':
 				cls
 				minut += 5
 				selfplaytime += 5
@@ -51,10 +51,10 @@ $d_self_fingering = {
 				if vagina > 10:horny += rand(2, 5)
 
 				'<center><img src="images/qwest/selfplay/finger.jpg"></center>'
-				'You started to fuck her pussy fingers typing them in his bosom, and moving them.'
+				'You start moving your fingers in and out, softly pinching your nipples as you play with yourself.'
 
-				if vagina <= 10:'Your pussy gently grabs your fingers and you feel pleasant warmth spreads in the abdomen.'
-				if vagina > 10:'Snatch quite spacious and you have to work pretty hard, that would at least feel something from their fingers.'
+				if vagina <= 10:'Your pussy walls are stretched nicely from the finger fucking, and you feel a pleasant warmth spread in your lower body.'
+				if vagina > 10:'Your pussy is quite loose, and you have to work hard to get much enjoyment out of it.'
 
 				gs 'stat'
 
@@ -64,33 +64,33 @@ $d_self_fingering = {
 					orgasm += 1
 					horny = 0
 					manna = mannamax
-					'Suddenly, as if you hit in the abdomen and shock began pleasant spasms, you squirm biting her lip, that would not scream with pleasure.'
+					'Suddenly, you hit just the right spot and your whole body starts to shiver in orgasm. The intensity of the orgasm nearly makes you scream, but you bite down on your lip and do your best to stifle down the moans so no one hears you.'
 				end
 
 				if horny > 0:dynamic $d_self_fingering2
 
-				act 'Break':gt $curloc
+				act 'Stop':gt $curloc
 			end
 		elseif mesec > 0:
 			manna -= 5
-			'Vagina slightly covered with dried blood from your period. You tried to shove a finger, but you will immediately become not nice.'
+			'Your vagina has some dried up blood from your period on it. You attempt to shove your finger in, but then are kind of grossed out by the idea and reconsider.'
 		end
 
 		gs 'stat'
 
-		act 'Break':gt $curloc
+		act 'Stop':gt $curloc
 	end
 }
 
 $d_self_fingering2 = {
-	act 'Thrust his hand into the vagina':
+	act 'Thrust all fingers into your vagina':
 		cls
 		minut += 2
 		selfplaytime += 2
 		'<center><img src="images/qwest/selfplay/hand.jpg"></center>'
 
 		if vagina > 0:
-			'You have entered yourself whole hand into the vagina.'
+			'You shove all your fingers inside your pussy.'
 
 			if vagina < 10:
 				if vgape = 2:vgape = 3
@@ -100,21 +100,21 @@ $d_self_fingering2 = {
 				vgapetime = totminut
 				horny -= 10
 				manna -= 10
-				'You shoved all the fingers in the pussy and you will immediately become very painful.'
+				'You shove all your fingers inside your tight pussy, and feel it stretch out way more more than it should. It''s rather painful.'
 			elseif vagina >= 10 and vagina < 15:
 				horny += rand(1, 3)
-				'You all stuck his fingers in your pussy and feel like your vagina is very tight wraps fingers seem just a little bit and you have something broken.'
+				'You shove all your fingers inside your tight pussy, feeling your pussy grip them tightly. It doesn''t hurt, but doesn''t feel very good either.'
 			elseif vagina >= 15 and vagina < 20:
 				horny += rand(3, 6)
-				'You all stuck his fingers in your pussy and feel how your vagina tight wraps his fingers hot and wet walls.'
+				'You shove all your fingers inside your tight pussy, feeling your pussy grip them tightly.'
 			elseif vagina >= 20:
 				horny += rand(6, 12)
-				'You all stuck his fingers in your pussy and feel how your vagina grabs his fingers hot and wet walls. You cover a pleasant feeling of fullness.'
+				'You stick all of your fingers in your pussy, and feel how your vagina envelops them nicely. You get a pleasant feeling of fullness.'
 			elseif vagina < 15:
 				vaginaTemp += 1
 			end
 
-			act 'Fuck her palm':
+			act 'Fuck yourself with your fingers':
 				cls
 				minut += 5
 				selfplaytime += 5
@@ -130,10 +130,10 @@ $d_self_fingering2 = {
 				end
 
 				'<center><img src="images/qwest/selfplay/hand.jpg"></center>'
-				'You started to fuck her pussy fingers typing them in his bosom, and moving them.'
+				'You start to slowly move your hand, thrusting your fingers into your pussy again and again.'
 
-				if vagina <= 15:horny -= 10 & manna -= 10 & 'Does it hurt when you''re trying to fuck her pussy with his palm.'
-				if vagina > 10:horny += rand(10, 20) & 'Snatch quite spacious and you have to work pretty hard, that would at least feel something from their fingers.'
+				if vagina <= 15:horny -= 10 & manna -= 10 & 'You''re stretching your pussy to the point where it becomes rather painful, and don''t get any enjoyment out of it.'
+				if vagina > 10:horny += rand(10, 20) & 'Your pussy walls are stretched nicely from the finger fucking, and you feel a pleasant warmth spread in your lower body.'
 
 				gs 'stat'
 
@@ -143,18 +143,18 @@ $d_self_fingering2 = {
 					orgasm += 1
 					horny = 0
 					manna = mannamax
-					'Suddenly, as if you hit in the abdomen and shock began pleasant spasms, you squirm biting her lip, that would not scream with pleasure.'
+					'Suddenly, you hit just the right spot and your whole body starts to shiver in orgasm. The intensity of the orgasm nearly makes you scream, but you bite down on your lip and do your best to stifle down the moans so no one hears you.'
 				end
 
 				dynamic $d_self_fingering2
 
-				act 'Break':gt $curloc
+				act 'Stop':gt $curloc
 			end
 		end
 
 		gs 'stat'
 
-		act 'Break':gt $curloc
+		act 'Stop':gt $curloc
 	end
 }
 
@@ -165,9 +165,9 @@ $d_van_vtor = {
 		horny -= 50
 		manna -= 10
 		gs 'stat'
-		'In the bathroom chattering "<<$name>>! Are you, drowned or something? Get out of the bath!"'
+		'You hear shouting from outside the bathroom: "<<$name>>! Are you drowning in there or something? What''s taking so long? Get out of there!"'
 
-		act 'Get out of the bath':
+		act 'Get out of the bath and dry yourself off':
 			analplay = 0
 			selfplaytime = 0
 			mastrOnce = 0
@@ -231,7 +231,7 @@ if $loc = 'bedrPar':
 
 			if proverkasisterhere = 2:
 				SisterKnowMastr += 1
-				'<font color="red"><b>Anja saw that you masturbate.</b></font>'
+				'<font color="red"><b>Anja saw you masturbate.</b></font>'
 			end
 
 			if proverkasisterhere = 1:
@@ -244,13 +244,13 @@ end
 
 ! WD: Fix Dildo choice Code
 !{
-if dildo = 1:'Do you have a small long dildo 10 cm.'
-if middildo = 1:'Do you have a long dildo 15 cm.'
-if largedildo = 1:'Do you have a long dildo 20 cm.'
-if bigdildo = 1:'Do you have a long dildo 25 cm.'
-if extradildo = 1:'Do you have a long dildo 30 cm.'
-if superdildo = 1:'Do you have a long dildo 35 cm.'
-if maddildo = 1:'Do you have a long dildo 40 cm.'
+if dildo = 1:'You have a small dildo, which is 10 cm long.'
+if middildo = 1:'You have a dildo, which is 15 cm long.'
+if largedildo = 1:'You have a dildo, which is 20 cm long.'
+if bigdildo = 1:'You have a large dildo, which is 25 cm long.'
+if extradildo = 1:'You have a large dildo, which is 30 cm long.'
+if superdildo = 1:'You have a huge dildo, which is 35 cm long.'
+if maddildo = 1:'You have a humongous dildo, which is 40 cm long.'
 }!
 if dildo + middildo + largedildo + bigdildo + extradildo + superdildo + maddildo ! 0:
 	if dildohand ! 0: *pl & *pl 'You are using a <<dildohand>>cm long dildo.'
@@ -259,64 +259,64 @@ if dildo + middildo + largedildo + bigdildo + extradildo + superdildo + maddildo
 
 	if dildo = 1:
 		if dildohand = 10:
-			*pl '<a href="exec:dildohand = 0 & gt $curloc">Stop</a> using a 10cm long dildo.'
+			*pl '<a href="exec:dildohand = 0 & gt $curloc">Stop</a> using the 10cm long dildo.'
 		else
-			*pl '<a href="exec:dildohand = 10 & gt $curloc">Start</a> using a 10cm long dildo.'
+			*pl '<a href="exec:dildohand = 10 & gt $curloc">Start</a> using the 10cm long dildo.'
 		end
 	end
 
 	if middildo = 1:
 		if dildohand = 15:
-			*pl '<a href="exec:dildohand = 0 & gt $curloc">Stop</a> using a 15cm long dildo.'
+			*pl '<a href="exec:dildohand = 0 & gt $curloc">Stop</a> using the 15cm long dildo.'
 		else
-			*pl '<a href="exec:dildohand = 15 & gt $curloc">Start</a> using a 15cm long dildo.'
+			*pl '<a href="exec:dildohand = 15 & gt $curloc">Start</a> using the 15cm long dildo.'
 		end
 	end
 
 	if largedildo = 1:
 		if dildohand = 20:
-			*pl '<a href="exec:dildohand = 0 & gt $curloc">Stop</a> using a 20cm long dildo.'
+			*pl '<a href="exec:dildohand = 0 & gt $curloc">Stop</a> using the 20cm long dildo.'
 		else
-			*pl '<a href="exec:dildohand = 20 & gt $curloc">Start</a> using a 20cm long dildo.'
+			*pl '<a href="exec:dildohand = 20 & gt $curloc">Start</a> using the 20cm long dildo.'
 		end
 	end
 
 	if bigdildo = 1:
 		if dildohand = 25:
-			*pl '<a href="exec:dildohand = 0 & gt $curloc">Stop</a> using a 25cm long dildo.'
+			*pl '<a href="exec:dildohand = 0 & gt $curloc">Stop</a> using the 25cm long dildo.'
 		else
-			*pl '<a href="exec:dildohand = 25 & gt $curloc">Start</a> using a 25cm long dildo.'
+			*pl '<a href="exec:dildohand = 25 & gt $curloc">Start</a> using the 25cm long dildo.'
 		end
 	end
 
 	if extradildo = 1:
 		if dildohand = 30:
-			*pl '<a href="exec:dildohand = 0 & gt $curloc">Stop</a> using a 30cm long dildo.'
+			*pl '<a href="exec:dildohand = 0 & gt $curloc">Stop</a> using the 30cm long dildo.'
 		else
-			*pl '<a href="exec:dildohand = 30 & gt $curloc">Start</a> using a 30cm long dildo.'
+			*pl '<a href="exec:dildohand = 30 & gt $curloc">Start</a> using the 30cm long dildo.'
 		end
 	end
 
 	if superdildo = 1:
 		if dildohand = 35:
-			*pl '<a href="exec:dildohand = 0 & gt $curloc">Stop</a> using a 35cm long dildo.'
+			*pl '<a href="exec:dildohand = 0 & gt $curloc">Stop</a> using the 35cm long dildo.'
 		else
-			*pl '<a href="exec:dildohand = 35 & gt $curloc">Start</a> using a 35cm long dildo.'
+			*pl '<a href="exec:dildohand = 35 & gt $curloc">Start</a> using the 35cm long dildo.'
 		end
 	end
 
 	if maddildo = 1:
 		if dildohand = 40:
-			*pl '<a href="exec:dildohand = 0 & gt $curloc">Stop</a> using a 40cm long dildo.'
+			*pl '<a href="exec:dildohand = 0 & gt $curloc">Stop</a> using the 40cm long dildo.'
 		else
-			*pl '<a href="exec:dildohand = 40 & gt $curloc">Start</a> using a 40cm long dildo.'
+			*pl '<a href="exec:dildohand = 40 & gt $curloc">Start</a> using the 40cm long dildo.'
 		end
 	end
 end
 
 
 if horny > 0:
-	act 'caress the clitoris':
+	act 'Caress your clitoris':
 		cls
 		minut += 5
 		selfplaytime += 5
@@ -331,29 +331,29 @@ if horny > 0:
 
 		if manna >= mannamax / 2:
 			horny += rand(5, 10)
-			'You put your hand down between her legs and groped in the folds of her soft and wet pussy touch a small bump which is very pleasant, you started to caress her fingers this hump and enjoy the feeling of pleasant warmth covering between your legs.'
+			'You put your hand down between your legs and gently rub your fingers over your groin. Running your fingers between your pussy lips, you scout out your clitoris and lightly run your finger over it repeatedly. The feeling you get out of this is great, and you feel a pleasant warmth spreading in your lower area.'
 		else
 			horny += rand(0, 1)
-			'You caress the clitoris fingers, you feel good and nice, but your bad mood affects, you just can not get away from his thoughts, and you can not get excited.'
+			'You caress your clit with your fingers. It feels nice, but you''re in such a bad mood that you''re too distracted to really enjoy it.'
 		end
 
 		if horny >= 100:
 			orgasm += 1
 			horny = 0
 			manna = mannamax
-			'Suddenly, as if you hit in the abdomen and shock began pleasant spasms, you squirm biting her lip, that would not scream with pleasure.'
+			'Suddenly, you rub your clit just right and your whole body starts to shiver in orgasm. The intensity of the orgasm nearly makes you scream, but you bite down on your lip and do your best to stifle down the moans so no one hears you.'
 		end
 
 		gs 'stat'
 
-		act 'Break':gt $curloc
+		act 'Stop':gt $curloc
 
 		if horny > 0:dynamic $d_self_fingering
 	end
 end
 
 if horny > 0 and agape < 3:
-	act 'Poke a finger in the ass':
+	act 'Put a finger in your ass':
 		cls
 		minut += 5
 		selfplaytime += 5
@@ -363,13 +363,13 @@ if horny > 0 and agape < 3:
 		'<center><img src="images/qwest/selfplay/1.jpg"></center>'
 
 		if anus >= 3:
-			'You stuck a finger in his ass and he freely slipped into your anus.'
+			'You press a finger against your asshole and push it in. It slides in quite easily.'
 		elseif anus >= 1 and anus < 3:
 			anus += 1
-			'You stuck a finger in his ass and felt as tight ass grabbed your finger.'
+			'You press a finger against your tight asshole and push it in. Your anus is squeezing your finger tightly.'
 		elseif anus = 0:
 			anus = 1
-			'You stuck a finger in her virgin ass and felt as tight ass grabbed your finger.'
+			'You press a finger against your virgin asshole and gently push it in. Your anus is squeezing your finger tightly.'
 		end
 
 		if $loc = 'vanrPar' and selfplaytime >= 60:dynamic $d_van_vtor
@@ -379,14 +379,14 @@ if horny > 0 and agape < 3:
 
 		act 'rest':gt $curloc
 
-		act 'Stick two fingers':
+		act 'Add a second finger':
 			cls
 			minut += 5
 			selfplaytime += 5
 			'<center><img src="images/qwest/selfplay/2.jpg"></center>'
 
 			if anus >= 5:
-				'You calmly stuck two fingers in your ass.'
+				'You relax and squeeze a second finger in, alongside the first. It slides in fairly easily.'
 
 				if agape > 0:
 					if agape = 2:agape = 3
@@ -397,11 +397,11 @@ if horny > 0 and agape < 3:
 
 					if anus > 1:anus -= 1
 
-					'Do you have a sore ass and shoved two fingers you even more damage it.'
+					'Pushing a second finger into your already sore asshole was a bad idea. It hurts a lot and you feel like you damaged it further.'
 				end
 			elseif anus >= 3 and anus < 5:
 				analplay += 1
-				'You stuck two fingers in his ass and your anus tightly clasped their.'
+				'You slide a second finger into your asshole. You can feel your anus squeezing your fingers tightly.'
 
 				if agape > 0:
 					if agape = 2:agape = 3
@@ -409,7 +409,7 @@ if horny > 0 and agape < 3:
 					agapetime = totminut
 					horny -= 50
 					anus += 1
-					'Do you have a sore ass and shoved two fingers you even more damage it.'
+					'Pushing a second finger into your already sore asshole was a bad idea. It hurts a lot and you feel like you damaged it further.'
 				end
 			elseif anus >= 1 and anus < 3:
 				anus += 1
@@ -420,7 +420,7 @@ if horny > 0 and agape < 3:
 
 				horny -= 50
 				agapetime = totminut
-				'You stuck two fingers in his ass and felt a sharp pain in your anus.'
+				'When you slide in the second finger, you feel a sharp pain in your anus. You may have tried too much, too fast.'
 			end
 
 			gs 'stat'
@@ -432,14 +432,14 @@ if horny > 0 and agape < 3:
 			dynamic $d_sis_prov
 
 			if horny > 0 and agape < 3:
-				act 'Thrust three fingers':
+				act 'Thrust three fingers in':
 					cls
 					minut += 5
 					selfplaytime += 5
 					'<center><img src="images/qwest/selfplay/3.jpg"></center>'
 
 					if anus >= 10:
-						'You quietly shoved three fingers in your ass.'
+						'Your asshole is fairly loose, and you manage to slide three fingers in without much effort.'
 
 						if agape > 0:
 							if agape = 2:agape = 3
@@ -450,11 +450,11 @@ if horny > 0 and agape < 3:
 
 							if anus > 1:anus += 1
 
-							'Do you have a sore ass and shoved three fingers you even more damage it.'
+							'Pushing three fingers into your already sore asshole was a bad idea. It hurts a lot and you feel like you damaged it further.'
 						end
 					elseif anus >= 5 and anus < 10:
 						analplay += 1
-						'You stuck three fingers in his ass and your ass grabbed them tightly.'
+						'You slide three fingers into your asshole. You can feel your anus squeezing your fingers tightly.'
 
 						if agape > 0:
 							if agape = 2:agape = 3
@@ -463,7 +463,7 @@ if horny > 0 and agape < 3:
 							agapetime = totminut
 							horny -= 50
 							anus += 1
-							'Do you have a sore ass and shoved three fingers you even more damage it.'
+							'Pushing three fingers into your already sore asshole was a bad idea. It hurts a lot and you feel like you damaged it further.'
 						end
 					elseif anus < 5:
 						anus += 1
@@ -474,7 +474,7 @@ if horny > 0 and agape < 3:
 
 						horny -= 50
 						agapetime = totminut
-						'You stuck three fingers in his ass and felt a sharp pain in your anus.'
+						'When you slide in three fingers, you feel a sharp pain in your anus. You may have tried too much, too fast.'
 					end
 
 					act 'rest':gt $curloc
@@ -485,14 +485,14 @@ if horny > 0 and agape < 3:
 					gs 'stat'
 
 					if horny > 0 and agape < 3:
-						act 'Stick four fingers':
+						act 'Push four fingers into your asshole':
 							cls
 							minut += 5
 							selfplaytime += 5
 							'<center><img src="images/qwest/selfplay/4.jpg"></center>'
 
 							if anus >= 15:
-								'You quietly stuck his hand in your ass.'
+								'Your asshole is very loose, and you manage to push four fingers into it.'
 
 								if agape > 0:
 									if agape = 2:agape = 3
@@ -503,11 +503,11 @@ if horny > 0 and agape < 3:
 
 									if anus > 1:anus -= 1
 
-									'Do you have a sore ass and thrust four fingers you even more damage it.'
+									'Pushing four fingers into your already sore asshole was a bad idea. It hurts a lot and you feel like you damaged it further.'
 								end
 							elseif anus >= 10 and anus < 15:
 								analplay += 1
-								'You have thrust his hand into his ass and your anus tightly clasped their.'
+								'You manage to push four fingers into your asshole. You can feel your anus squeezing your fingers tightly.'
 
 								if agape > 0:
 									if agape = 2:agape = 3
@@ -516,7 +516,7 @@ if horny > 0 and agape < 3:
 									agapetime = totminut
 									horny -= 50
 									anus += 1
-									'Do you have a sore ass and thrust his hand you even more damage it.'
+									'Pushing four fingers into your already sore asshole was a bad idea. It hurts a lot and you feel like you damaged it further.'
 								end
 							elseif anus < 10:
 								anus += 1
@@ -527,7 +527,7 @@ if horny > 0 and agape < 3:
 
 								horny -= 50
 								agapetime = totminut
-								'You have thrust his hand into his ass and felt a sharp pain in your anus.'
+								'When you slide in four fingers, you feel a sharp pain in your anus. You may have tried too much, too fast.'
 							end
 
 							act 'rest':gt $curloc
@@ -538,7 +538,7 @@ if horny > 0 and agape < 3:
 							gs 'stat'
 
 							if horny > 0 and agape < 3:
-								act 'Stick your whole hand':
+								act 'Put your whole hand in':
 									cls
 									SelfFisting += 1
 									minut += 5
@@ -546,7 +546,7 @@ if horny > 0 and agape < 3:
 									'<center><img src="images/qwest/selfplay/5.jpg"></center>'
 
 									if anus >= 20:
-										'You quietly put his hand in your ass.'
+										'Slowly but surely, you manage to get your entire hand into your ass.'
 
 										if agape > 0:
 											if agape = 2:agape = 3
@@ -557,11 +557,11 @@ if horny > 0 and agape < 3:
 
 											if anus > 1:anus -= 1
 
-											'Do you have a sore ass and thrust his hand you even more damage it.'
+											'Pushing your whole hand into your already sore asshole was a bad idea. It hurts a lot and you feel like you damaged it further.'
 										end
 									elseif anus >= 15 and anus < 20:
 										analplay += 1
-										'You reached into his ass and your anus tightly clasped their.'
+										'It takes a lot of effort, but over the course of several minutes you manage to work your whole hand into your ass. You feel your anus squeeze your wrist tightly.'
 
 										if agape > 0:
 											if agape = 2:agape = 3
@@ -570,7 +570,7 @@ if horny > 0 and agape < 3:
 											agapetime = totminut
 											horny -= 50
 											anus += 1
-											'Do you have a sore ass and thrust his hand you even more damage it.'
+											'Pushing your whole hand into your already sore asshole was a bad idea. It hurts a lot and you feel like you damaged it further.'
 										end
 									elseif anus < 15:
 										anus += 1
@@ -581,7 +581,7 @@ if horny > 0 and agape < 3:
 
 										horny -= 50
 										agapetime = totminut
-										'You reached into his ass and felt a sharp pain in your anus.'
+										'When you push your hand into your asshole, you feel a sharp pain in your anus. You may have tried too much, too fast.'
 									end
 
 									act 'rest':gt $curloc
@@ -607,7 +607,7 @@ if horny > 10:
 			! WD: Fix Dildo choice Code ~ refer above
 			! 'In your hands <<dildohand>>five inch dildo'
 			if vgape <= 0:
-				act 'Dildo in pussy':
+				act 'Use the dildo on your pussy':
 					cls
 					minut += 15
 					selfplaytime += 15
@@ -628,7 +628,7 @@ if horny > 10:
 			end
 
 			if agape <= 0:
-				act 'Dildo in the ass':
+				act 'Use the dildo on your ass':
 					cls
 					minut += 15
 					selfplaytime += 15
@@ -650,34 +650,34 @@ if horny > 10:
 		! WD: Fix Dildo choice Code  ~ refer above
 		!{
 		elseif dildohand = 0:
-			'You do not have a dildo in hand'
+			'You do not have a dildo in your hand.'
 
 			if dildo = 1:
-				act 'take 10cm long dildo':dildohand = 10 & gt $curloc
+				act 'Take the 10cm long dildo':dildohand = 10 & gt $curloc
 			end
 
 			if middildo = 1:
-				act 'take 15cm long dildo':dildohand = 15 & gt $curloc
+				act 'Take the 15cm long dildo':dildohand = 15 & gt $curloc
 			end
 
 			if largedildo = 1:
-				act 'take 20cm long dildo':dildohand = 20 & gt $curloc
+				act 'Take the 20cm long dildo':dildohand = 20 & gt $curloc
 			end
 
 			if bigdildo = 1:
-				act 'take 25cm long dildo':dildohand = 25 & gt $curloc
+				act 'Take the 25cm long dildo':dildohand = 25 & gt $curloc
 			end
 
 			if extradildo = 1:
-				act 'take 30cm long dildo':dildohand = 30 & gt $curloc
+				act 'Take the 30cm long dildo':dildohand = 30 & gt $curloc
 			end
 
 			if superdildo = 1:
-				act 'take 35cm long dildo':dildohand = 35 & gt $curloc
+				act 'Take the 35cm long dildo':dildohand = 35 & gt $curloc
 			end
 
 			if maddildo = 1:
-				act 'take 40cm long dildo':dildohand = 40 & gt $curloc
+				act 'Take the 40cm long dildo':dildohand = 40 & gt $curloc
 			end
 		}!
 		end
@@ -686,7 +686,7 @@ end
 
 if horny > 0:dynamic $d_self_fingering
 
-act 'Abandon this venture':
+act 'Stop masturbating':
 	analplay = 0
 	selfplaytime = 0
 	mastrOnce = 0
@@ -701,7 +701,7 @@ if $loc = 'vanrPar' and selfplaytime >= 60:dynamic $d_van_vtor
 
 if $loc = 'Gadsarai':
 	piratHorny += 1
-	'Dog named Pirate with curiosity looks at , what you do.'
+	'The dog named Pirate is curiously looking at what you''re doing.'
 end
 
 --- selfplay ---------------------------------

+ 8 - 8
locations/sitrPar

@@ -15,13 +15,13 @@ lcolor = rgb(106, 90, 205)
 '<center><b><font color="maroon">Hall</font></b></center>'
 ! WD: Correct Image path ~ "images/qwest/alter/<<$loc>>.jpg"
 '<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/sitrPar.jpg"></center>'
-'In the window is a <a href="exec:gt ''tvPar''">TV</a>. Front of the TV is a sofa on which sleeps at night your brother. The wall is a wall with utensils and books.'
+'The living room has a <a href="exec:gt ''tvPar''">TV</a>, which is near the window. In front of the TV is a sofa, on which your brother sleeps at night. A large tapestry covers one wall, while the other wall has several shelves on it, stocked with books and other things.'
 gs 'family'
 
 if month = 12 and day >= 30:
-	'TV stands near a Christmas tree decorated with toys and garlands.'
+	'A Christmas tree stands next to the TV, decorated with tinsel garlands and other ornaments.'
 elseif month = 12 and day = 31 and hour >= 20:
-	act 'Celebrate the New Year with family.':
+	act 'Celebrate the New Year with your family.':
 		cls
 		mother = 100
 		father = 100
@@ -41,21 +41,21 @@ elseif month = 12 and day = 31 and hour >= 20:
 		cumlip = 0
 		fbreath = 0
 		gs 'stat'
-		'You sat at the festive table laid in front of the TV and began to celebrate the New Year with family and blue light going on TV. At the table struck up a dialogue and common problems were forgotten, all having fun and talking to each other. at midnight, before the chimes you heard congratulations President, which as always promised, they all will be well, if you ''ll be better off working. Then drank champagne clinking glasses and congratulating each other happy new year. Mom gave you an envelope with a greeting card and five thousand rubles. For a while you continue watching TV ate and drank champagne, but soon was evident ,that family members are exhausted and began to disperse to sleep.'
+		'You sit at the festive table laid in front of the TV and celebrate the New Year with your family, the TV providing some background noise. At the table people strike up a conversation and common problems are forgotten for a while, everyone is having fun talking to each other. At midnight, everyone wishes one another a happy New Year and enjoys the champagne and fireworks outside. Your mom gives you an envelope with a greeting card and five thousand rubles. For a while you continue to watch TV, enjoying the champagne and company of your family, but after a while everyone is kind of tired and one by one they go to bed.'
 
 		act 'Leave':gt $curloc
 	end
 elseif month = 1 and day = 1:
-	act 'Eat up salads with festive table':
+	act 'Eat some leftovers at the festive table.':
 		cla
 		*clr
 		frost = 0
 		minut += 15
 		if energy >= 50:
 			fat = fat + 5
-			'You can no longer have.'
+			'You''re full and cannot eat any more.'
 		else
-			'You had finished salads left on the table after the holiday.'
+			'You eat the remaining snacks that are still on the table from the holidays.'
 			health += 10
 			manna += 20
 			energy += 20
@@ -72,7 +72,7 @@ elseif month = 1 and day = 1:
 
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img src="images/pics/food.jpg"></center>'
-		'You had finished salads remaining on the table after the holiday.'
+		'You have finished the leftovers remaining on the table from the holidays.'
 
 	act 'Get up from the table':gt $locM, $metkaM
 

+ 6 - 1
locations/start

@@ -20,7 +20,7 @@ bcolor = rgb(255, 255, 255)
 lcolor = rgb(106, 90, 205)
 $fname = 'Tahoma'
 fsize = 12
-$version = '0.3.1 The, like, bimbo version.'
+$version = '0.3.2 The X and O''s version.'
 
 *nl
 *nl
@@ -46,6 +46,11 @@ $version = '0.3.1 The, like, bimbo version.'
 *nl
 'Recent Version Tracking:'
 *nl
+"0.3.2"
+'- Bug fixes and code clean up'
+'- New cum management system'
+'- Volleyball trainer should now work'
+*nl
 "0.3.1"
 '- Bug fixes and code clean up'
 '- Text edits by Yllarius'

+ 24 - 24
locations/vanrPar

@@ -6,11 +6,11 @@ $brother_voyeurism = {
 		if ivrand = 1:
 			cla
 			brother_ev1 = day
-			'Through the noise of water, you pay attention to the barely audible creak of the door to the bathroom and notice a small slit in the doorway of his younger brother Kolka.'
+			'Despite the clattering noise of water, you hear the bathroom door creaking open slightly. Through a small opening in the doorway, you notice your brother Kolka watching you.'
 			if sub < 30:
-				act'Chased him':gt'brother','brother_go_away'
+				act'Tell him to get lost':gt'brother','brother_go_away'
 			end
-			act'Let them look':gt'brother','brother_voyeur_ev1'
+			act'Let him look':gt'brother','brother_voyeur_ev1'
 			exit
 		end
 	end
@@ -21,7 +21,7 @@ elseif vanr_lock = 1:
 	act'<font size = 1>Open the latch on the door</font>':vanr_lock = 0 & gt'vanrPar'
 end
 
-act 'Leave the room':gt 'korrPar'
+act 'Return to the hallway':gt 'korrPar'
 
 $metkaM = $ARGS[0]
 $locM = $CURLOC
@@ -36,16 +36,16 @@ lcolor = rgb(106, 90, 205)
 '<center><b><font color="maroon">Bathroom</font></b></center>'
 ! WD: Correct Image path ~ "images/qwest/alter/<<$loc>>.jpg"
 '<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/vanrPar.jpg"></center>'
-'Bathroom cramped and very unpretentious.'
+'The bathroom is very small and unimpressive.'
 'Above the sink hangs a <a href="exec:GT ''mirror'',''start''">mirror</a>.'
-if vanr_hanger = 1: 'Next to the sink neatly folded your <a href="exec:dynamic $vanr_hanger_dress & tanga = tanga_hanger & GT ''vanrPar'' ">clothes</a>'
+if vanr_hanger = 1: 'Next to the sink, you find your neatly folded <a href="exec:dynamic $vanr_hanger_dress & tanga = tanga_hanger & GT ''vanrPar'' ">clothes</a>'
 
-if stanok > 0:'Your razor will suffice for <b><<stanok>></b> time.'
+if stanok > 0:'Your razor will last for <b><<stanok>></b> more shavings.'
 !WD: heal chafe
 if mosolmaz>0:'On a shelf is a tube of ointment for chafing, which will be enough for <b><<mosolmaz>><b> applications.'
 
 if dirtbelo > 0 and BuyHous = 0:
-	'In the bathroom you have found, Mom washed your laundry.'
+	'In the bathroom you find the laundry Mom washed for you.'
 	clrbelo += dirtbelo
 	dirtbelo = 0
 end
@@ -88,7 +88,7 @@ if cumfrot > 0:
 		minut += 10
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img src="images/etogame/frotsp.jpg"></center>'
-		'You remove traces of cum from your clothes.'
+		'You remove the traces of cum from your clothes.'
 
 		act 'Finish':gt $curloc
 	end
@@ -103,9 +103,9 @@ if leghair > 0 and stanok > 0:
 		horny += 5
 		stanok -= 1
 		'<center><img src="images/pics/shave.jpg"></center>'
-		'You lathered his feet and took a razor. Deft movements you shaved hair on the legs and washed shaving foam.'
+		'You lather your legs up with some soapy water and shave your legs. After a few swift movements, your legs are smooth as silk. The feeling of your smooth legs turns you on a little.'
 
-		act 'postpone machine':gt $curloc
+		act 'Return to showering':gt $curloc
 	end
 end
 
@@ -118,9 +118,9 @@ if lobok > 0 and stanok > 0:
 		horny += 5
 		stanok -= 1
 		'<center><img src="images/pics/shave3.jpg"></center>'
-		'You lathered crotch and took a razor deft movements began to shave pubic hairs and shave pussy vokurug. Finally shaving was finished and you flushed with foam pussy.'
+		'You lather your crotch with some soapy water and carefully shave your pubic hair. After shaving you can''t help but run your fingers over your pussy, enjoying the smooth feeling and getting slightly more aroused by the touch.'
 
-		act 'postpone machine':gt $curloc
+		act 'Return to showering':gt $curloc
 	end
 end
 
@@ -135,12 +135,12 @@ if analplug = 1 and analplugin = 1:
 
 		'<center><img src="images/body/analplug.jpg"></center>'
 
-		'You bent over and took out the butt plug.' & !!0.2.6: Removed unneccessary var check
+		'You squat and tug gently at the butt plug, gasping as you push it out of you. You can''t help but feel a bit empty, now that it''s out.' & !!0.2.6: Removed unneccessary var check
 
 		act 'Finish':gt $curloc
 	end
 elseif analplug = 1 and analplugin = 0 and klismaday1= 1 and plugday ! daystart:
-	act 'Insert a butt plug (0:05)':
+	act 'Insert your butt plug (0:05)':
 		cla
 		*clr
 		plugday = daystart
@@ -153,8 +153,8 @@ elseif analplug = 1 and analplugin = 0 and klismaday1= 1 and plugday ! daystart:
 
 		'<center><img src="images/body/analplug.jpg"></center>'
 
-		if butpluguse > 0:'You bent over and inserted the butt plug.'
-		if butpluguse = 0:butpluguse = 1 & '"If I don''t use it then why did I buy it!" you thought. You decided to take a closer look while thinking, "It is necessary to start developing my ass so I could have great adventures someday, you could even say a huge and thick adventures with crimson heads, uh, now I got carried away." You scratched your head. Then you directed it in your ass, it was a bit painful at first, but as soon as the widest part was plunged into the murky depths of your anus it became easier to push it all the way.'
+		if butpluguse > 0:'You squat and gently rub the butt plug against your anus, after lubricating it with a bit of saliva. After a short while, you''ve relaxed enough to be able to push it in. Once it''s in you give it a few gentle tugs, wondering if anyone will catch you wearing it today.'
+		if butpluguse = 0:butpluguse = 1 & '"If I''m not going to use it, then why did I buy it?" you ask yourself. You look at the butt plug for a while, thinking "It is necessary to start developing my ass, so I could have great adventures someday... you could even say huge and thick adventures with crimson heads, uh, now I got carried away..." You''re slightly embarrassed at the thought for a second, but are then overcome by your horny fantasies. Determined to get the plug all the way in, you slowly press it against your asshole after lubricating it with a bit of saliva. It hurts a bit at first, but once the thickest part is in the rest follows rather easily. Patting yourself on your ass once it''s in, you wonder if anyone will notice you''re wearing it today and then immediately feel naughty for even having thought that.'
 
 		act 'Finish':gt $curloc
 	end
@@ -168,7 +168,7 @@ if klisma = 1 and klismaday ! daystart:
 		klismaday = daystart
 		klismaday1 = 1
 		'<center><img src="images/picV/klisma.jpg"></center>'
-		'You put yourself an enema and clean intestines, now your ass is ready for anal sex.'
+		'You give yourself an enema, feeling clean down there. Your ass is now ready for anal sex without any awkward surprises.'
 
 		act 'Finish':gt $curloc
 	end
@@ -184,7 +184,7 @@ if vibrator = 1 and vibratorIN = 1:
 		if vagina < 30:vagina += 1
 
 		'<center><img src="images/etogame/vibrator.jpg"></center>'
-		'You bend over the sink and take the vibrator out of your pussy.'
+		'You spread your legs and take the vibrator out of your pussy, letting out a slight moan as you do so. You feel somewhat empty now.'
 
 		act 'Finish':gt $curloc
 	end
@@ -198,7 +198,7 @@ elseif vibrator = 1 and vibratorIN = 0 and vagina ! 0:
 		if vagina < 30:vagina += 2
 
 		'<center><img src="images/etogame/vibrator.jpg"></center>'
-		'You bend over the sink and inserted the vibrator in your pussy.'
+		'You spread your legs and slowly insert the vibrator in your pussy, wondering if anyone will notice you wearing it today.'
 
 		act 'Finish':gt $curloc
 	end
@@ -212,7 +212,7 @@ if mosolmaz > 0 and mosol > 0:
 		mosol -= 5
 		'You take a tube of cream and rub it onto your itchy vulva.'
 
-		act 'Leave':gt $curloc
+		act 'Finish':gt $curloc
 	end
 end
 
@@ -224,13 +224,13 @@ if pregtest > 0:
 
 		if preg = 1:
 			knowpreg = 1
-			'The test showed the two strips. you are pregnant.'
-			'you think, that the father <<$father>>.'
+			'The test showed two strips. You are pregnant.'
+			'You think the father is <<$father>>.'
 		else
 			'The test showed one band.'
 		end
 
-		act 'Further':gt $curloc
+		act 'Finish':gt $curloc
 	end
 end