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Translation fixes

Albina event chains.
Monztah 9 years ago
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5 changed files with 127 additions and 53 deletions
  1. 1 1
      locations/AlbStarsEnd
  2. 44 13
      locations/albinaEv
  3. 4 2
      locations/albinaRide
  4. 74 34
      locations/albinahome
  5. 4 3
      locations/albinaporog

+ 1 - 1
locations/AlbStarsEnd

@@ -6,7 +6,7 @@ AlbCopDay = daystart
 grupTipe[23] = -10
 grupTipe[23] = -10
 Chernov = 10
 Chernov = 10
 gs 'stat'
 gs 'stat'
-'You walk down the street and see Albina Barlovskuyu. Near her, a van stops; people emerge from the vehicle running towards her. They restrain her face to the ground, hands behind her back before putting her in handcuffs. Albina is furious, but her face suddenly pales when she sees the warrant for her arrest and hears the accusations of running a brothel. After a thorough search she is put on her feet, shoved into a police car and whisked away. Near it stops the machine out people run out and put her face to the ground setting the stage for her hands behind her back and putting handcuffs. Albina outraged, but it shows the documents for her arrest for running a brothel. After a search of her rise to their feet and literally zashvyrivayut in police car, then take away.'
+'You walk down the street and see Albina Barlovskuyu. Near her, a van stops; people emerge from the vehicle running towards her. They restrain her face to the ground, hands behind her back before putting her in handcuffs. Albina is furious, but her face suddenly pales when she sees the warrant for her arrest and hears the accusations of running a brothel. After a thorough search she is put on her feet, shoved into a police car and whisked away.'
 
 
 act 'Leave':gt 'gorodok'
 act 'Leave':gt 'gorodok'
 
 

+ 44 - 13
locations/albinaEv

@@ -1,6 +1,6 @@
 # albinaEv
 # albinaEv
 $din_albina_get_over_car = {
 $din_albina_get_over_car = {
-	'Strong hands grabbed you and pulled out of the car.'
+	'A pair of strong hands grab you and pull you out of the car.'
 
 
 	act 'Further':
 	act 'Further':
 		cls
 		cls
@@ -14,10 +14,10 @@ $din_albina_get_over_car = {
 albinaCarday = day
 albinaCarday = day
 gs 'stat'
 gs 'stat'
 '<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/BMW.jpg"></center>'
 '<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/BMW.jpg"></center>'
-'You went out to the car and looked at Albina. She looked around you haughty look and started the car.'
+'You went out to the car and see Albina sitting in it, nervously looking every which direction. As you approach, she starts the engine.'
 
 
 if albinaCar = 0:
 if albinaCar = 0:
-	act 'Ask her if that car is hers':
+	act 'Ask her if the car is hers':
 		cls
 		cls
 		albinaCar = 1
 		albinaCar = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -25,24 +25,38 @@ if albinaCar = 0:
 		'<center><b><font color="maroon"><<$npcName[23]>> <<$npcSurName[23]>></font></b></center>'
 		'<center><b><font color="maroon"><<$npcName[23]>> <<$npcSurName[23]>></font></b></center>'
 		! WD: Remove Dupe Images ~ '<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/npc23.jpg"></center>'
 		! WD: Remove Dupe Images ~ '<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/npc23.jpg"></center>'
 		'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/npc/23.jpg"></center>'
 		'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/npc/23.jpg"></center>'
-		'You asked Albina "Is this your car?" Albina squirmed grimassy contemptuous "What? Of course not, this is the machine my father, I would never have bought it. Generally X5 is a machine for cattle suddenly grown rich and not for decent people." You shake your head, "You what? Rights have?" Albina laughed "Rights? Why should I, right? Do you know who my father is? He police chief of our town, though retired, but the connection remained. Never stopped me in his car." Albina second thought about something and said, "go for a drive."'
+		'You ask Albina "Is this your car?"'
+		'Albina squirms, grimacing and answers in a contemptious tone "What? Of course not, this is my fathers car, I would never have bought this thing. The X5 is a car for those newly rich and not for decent people."'
+		'You shake your head, "Do you even have a drivers license?"'
+		'Albina laughs, saying "License? Why would I need one, do you know who my father is? He used to be the police chief of our town, although he''s retired now. He still has all his connections, and I''ve never been stopped in his car."'
+		'Albina goes quiet for a few seconds, seemingly thinking about something, then suddenly says "Let''s go for a ride."'
 
 
 		act 'Go with Albina':
 		act 'Go with Albina':
 			cls
 			cls
 			minut += 5
 			minut += 5
 			gs 'stat'
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/BMW.jpg"></center>'
 			'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/BMW.jpg"></center>'
-			'You sat down on the seat next to Albina and she touched the car. You went through the streets of the town, soon you moved out from the central streets and stopped at what that wilderness, where the trees darkened factory building. Albina looking at you smiled mysteriously "This is a surprise."'
+			'You sit down on the seat next to Albina and she starts driving around town.'
+			'Soon enough, you find yourself on the outskirts of town. Glancing in your direction with a mysterious smile, Albina says "I have a surprise for you.".'
+			'Before you get a chance to ask her what the surprise is, the car slows down and turns on to a small side road, almost hidden from view by the dense vegetation.'
+			'As the car pushes further into the forest, you see an old building made of brick, with large chimneys jutting out of its saw-tooth roof.'
 
 
 			act 'Look around':
 			act 'Look around':
 				cls
 				cls
 				minut += 5
 				minut += 5
 				gs 'stat'
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/castle.jpg"></center>'
 				'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/castle.jpg"></center>'
-				'You looked around and realized that you are in the territory of an abandoned factory. You looked at Albina, she grinned and poked manicured finger in the plate. Have you read the inscription on the plate "Property Ltd. The Snow Queen" Albina grinned "This castle of the Snow Queen. My Territory" The car stopped and two men approached BMW, the appearance of both was a little over 30 years, one tall, athletic, not the second big growth with tum, but very sturdy, with a red neck wrestling, powerful hands and broad shoulders. Albina opened the door, "Hi guys. How you doing?" Guys frown examined you and shorty boomed "Everything is fine."'
+				'Looking around you realize that you''re in front of an abandoned factory building.'
+				'As you turn to look at Albina, she grins and points a manicured finger to a sign a few meters in front of the car, that says "Property of The Snow Queen Ltd." Still grinning, Albina says "This is the castle of the Snow Queen, my territory."'
+				'The car stops and two men suddenly materialize out of the shadows, walking slowly towards you. They both seem to be over 30 years of age, one tall and athletic, the other slightly shorter and rounder but with broad shoulders and powerful hands.'
+				'Albina opens the door and turns to the two men: "Hi guys, how are you doing?"'
+				'With a frown, the two men look at you for a few seconds before answering with a booming voice "Everything is fine."'
 
 
 				if AlbinaLast > 0 or AlbinaBlokDance > 0:
 				if AlbinaLast > 0 or AlbinaBlokDance > 0:
-					'Albina does not stop the engine, got out and told the guy, "I''ve brought you a not very obedient girl who knows something about my dance business." High grinned "I see." Strong Shorty silently and lazily toward you.'
+					'Leaving the engine running, Albina gets out of the car.'
+					'"I''ve brought you an inobedient girl who knows too much about my dancing business."'
+					'Grinning, the tall one says "I see.", as the short one starts walking slowly towards you.'
+					'A chill runs up your spine as you realize you''ve been tricked. You need to get out of here right now!'
 
 
 					if dom > 0:
 					if dom > 0:
 						act 'Jump behind the wheel':
 						act 'Jump behind the wheel':
@@ -52,14 +66,20 @@ if albinaCar = 0:
 							'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/BMW.jpg"></center>'
 							'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/BMW.jpg"></center>'
 
 
 							if agil >= 100:
 							if agil >= 100:
-								'You deftly jumped behind the wheel of a car. Fortress was at the hood, as long guy rushed to the driver''s door, What would you get.'
+								'With a deft movement, you manage to get behind the wheel of the car.'
+								'Looking out the windows, you see the short one standing right in front of the car, touching the hood as if to stop you from driving forwards, while the tall one runs towards the driver side door.'
 
 
 								act 'Switch into reverse gear':
 								act 'Switch into reverse gear':
 									cls
 									cls
 									minut += 1
 									minut += 1
 									gs 'stat'
 									gs 'stat'
 									'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/BMW.jpg"></center>'
 									'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/BMW.jpg"></center>'
-									'You dramatically stopped and handed back almost concrete fence. Before your hood you see as the burly running to you. A driver''s door to the long runs.'
+									'Not knowing exactly what you''re doing, it takes you a second or two to realize the stick needs to be in the ''R'' position.'
+									'After finding the right gear, you slam down on the accelerator just as you notice the tall one is very close and has started running towards you'
+									'The engine revs, and the car shoots backwards as if slung from a ballista. In your panic to escape the clutches of Short and Tall however, you fail to notice the sturdy concrete wall creeping up on you from behind at an alarming speed.'
+									'You notice the wall just before slamming into it, and step on the brakes. While it does lower your speed quite a bit, the car is still going fast as it hits the wall.'
+									'You hear the sound of metal and glass cracking and popping as the rear of your car is crushed against the concrete wall. The force of the impact throws your head back, hitting the headrest with a soft ''Foomp''.'
+									'After regaining your senses, you look out the window and see Short and Tall running towards you.'
 								end
 								end
 
 
 								act 'Put the pedal to the metal':
 								act 'Put the pedal to the metal':
@@ -67,10 +87,16 @@ if albinaCar = 0:
 									minut += 1
 									minut += 1
 									gs 'stat'
 									gs 'stat'
 									'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/BMW.jpg"></center>'
 									'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/BMW.jpg"></center>'
-									'You abruptly thrust gear and pull the clutch abruptly moved forward. Fortress with a bang flopped down on the hood and fell off the machine. Ahead you see the bushes, the gateway to which you moved Albina are to the right of you. From left to you is factory building brick wall.'
+									'Taking a wild guess, you quickly jank the stick to the ''D'' position, grit your teeth and slam down the accelerator.'
+									'Short does not have time to react, and as the car jumps forward he is slung on top of the hood, slamming his head into the windshield leaving a crack in the glass, and then rolls of to the left.'
+									'Your knuckles whiten as you tighten your grip on the steering wheel and look out the windshield, trying to find a way out of here.'
+									'Straight ahead you see bushes and small trees, the forest slowly reclaiming the land it once lost to whatever kind of factory this once was.'
+									'To the right you recognize the gateway Albina drove through when she took you here.'
+									'To the left you see a brick wall, part of the abandoned factory building.'
 								end
 								end
 							elseif agil < 100:
 							elseif agil < 100:
-								'You jumped behind the wheel of a car, but tangled legs between the seat and the gear lever. The driver''s door stuck his hands long man.'
+								'You try your best to wriggle your way over to the drivers seat, but only manage to get stuck with one of your legs between the gear shift and the seat.'
+								'Suddenly, the driver side door is violently thrust open.'
 
 
 								dynamic $din_albina_get_over_car
 								dynamic $din_albina_get_over_car
 							end
 							end
@@ -82,7 +108,9 @@ if albinaCar = 0:
 						minut += 5
 						minut += 5
 						gs 'stat'
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/castle.jpg"></center>'
 						'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/castle.jpg"></center>'
-						'You jumped out of the car and see how you run burly side hood and trunk from the car obbegat long. The road back to cut you, but you notice the open door of the shop.'
+						'Thinking you can easily outrun them, you quickly jump out of the car.'
+						'As you get out, Short starts moving towards you from the hood, and Tall moves behind you to block your path.'
+						'Looking around desperately for a second way out, you suddenly notice a small building close by with an open door.'
 					end
 					end
 
 
 					act 'Sit in the car':
 					act 'Sit in the car':
@@ -90,13 +118,16 @@ if albinaCar = 0:
 						minut += 5
 						minut += 5
 						gs 'stat'
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/BMW.jpg"></center>'
 						'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/BMW.jpg"></center>'
+						'Panicking and not knowing what to do, you freeze.'
+						'As you sit in your seat watching Short and Tall slowly make their way towards you, grim thoughts pop up in your head.'
+						'Is this the end? Will they kill me? Will I ever see my family again?'
 						dynamic $din_albina_get_over_car
 						dynamic $din_albina_get_over_car
 					end
 					end
 
 
 					exit
 					exit
 				end
 				end
 
 
-				if DanceWhore > 0:'Albina does not stop the engine, got out and said, "Relax guys. <<$name>> of my Zvezdushek. Newcomer. But a lot of promise."'
+				if DanceWhore > 0:'Leaving the engine running, Albina gets out of the car. "Relax guys. <<$name>> is one of my stars. She''s a newcomer, but shows a lot of promise."'
 			end
 			end
 		end
 		end
 	end
 	end

+ 4 - 2
locations/albinaRide

@@ -3,13 +3,15 @@ albrideday = daystart
 gs 'stat'
 gs 'stat'
 '<center><b><font color="maroon"><<$npcName[23]>> <<$npcSurName[23]>></font></b></center>'
 '<center><b><font color="maroon"><<$npcName[23]>> <<$npcSurName[23]>></font></b></center>'
 '<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/npc/23.jpg"></center>'
 '<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/npc/23.jpg"></center>'
-'Albina genuinely smiling at you "Come to my World, sit, chat."'
+'Albina smiles at you and says, "Let''s go to my place and talk."'
 
 
 act 'Go with Albina':
 act 'Go with Albina':
 	cls
 	cls
 	minut += 5
 	minut += 5
 	gs 'stat'
 	gs 'stat'
-	'You sat in the back seat of a jeep, sat next to you Albina, sat behind the wheel of a hefty guy in a black jacket and took you through the town. Soon you stopped at the gate luxurious mansion and came out of the jeep.'
+	'You sit in the back seat of a jeep, and next to you sits Albina. Behind the wheel sits a large man in a black leather jacket.'
+	'The man behind the wheel starts engine and quickly drives through town.'
+	'Soon enough the car stops at the gate to a luxurious mansion, and Albina tells you to follow her.'
 
 
 	act 'Go with Albina into the room':gt 'albinahome'
 	act 'Go with Albina into the room':gt 'albinahome'
 end
 end

+ 74 - 34
locations/albinahome

@@ -9,7 +9,7 @@ gs 'stat'
 
 
 if hour < 20:
 if hour < 20:
 	if npcSex[23] = 0:
 	if npcSex[23] = 0:
-		'Albina you smiling affably "<<$name>>, I have a bottle of fine wine, let''s drink."'
+		'Albina smiles at you affably and says, "<<$name>> I have a bottle of fine wine here, let''s drink."'
 
 
 		act 'Drink':
 		act 'Drink':
 			cls
 			cls
@@ -17,39 +17,58 @@ if hour < 20:
 			alko += 2
 			alko += 2
 			gs 'stat'
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/albina/drunk.jpg"></center>'
 			'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/albina/drunk.jpg"></center>'
-			'You sat down at a table and Albina brought a bottle of wine. She deftly opened a bottle and poured the wine by the glass. You drank together with Albina. She smiled and said "Once again, that warned me. I was still brought a criminal case, but to prove that it will be very difficult for them. Father of course ranting and raving. His political career was covered with a copper basin anyway, though I otmazhus, though not otmazhus."'
+			'You sat down at the table while Albina grabs a bottle of wine. She deftly opens the bottle and pours wine in two glasses.'
+			'You drink together with Albina. She smiles and says "Once again, you warned me. They still have a case on me, but they''ll have to work very hard to get enough evidence.'
+			'My father is of course not very happy. His political career was doomed to fail anyway, regardless of what I did or didn''t do."'
 
 
-			act 'Ask her about the reaction of her father when he got scent of her specific business':
+			act 'Ask her how her father reacted when he learned of her business':
 				cls
 				cls
 				minut += 15
 				minut += 15
 				alko += 2
 				alko += 2
 				gs 'stat'
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/albina/drunk.jpg"></center>'
 				'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/albina/drunk.jpg"></center>'
-				'You asked Albina "And how did he react to it, that you have a specific business?" Albina laughed again and poured the wine by the glass. "But he knew from the beginning." You surprise staring at Albina "What do you know?" Albina laughed "I have a very strange little family, so easy you will not understand. Let''s have a drink." You drank more wine along with Albina and she continued "Actually, my dad has the bastard. If there is a hell, then it is already there prepared a special pot, for all that he did in his life."'
-
-				act 'Ask her how her father responded':
+				'You ask Albina "And how did he react when he found out about your business?"'
+				'Albina laughs and pours more wine in both glasses. "He knew from the beginning."'
+				'Surprised, you look at Albina and ask "How do you know?"'
+				'Laughing, Albina answers "I have a very strange little family, so it''s perhaps not easy for you to understand. Let''s have another drink."'
+				'You sit quietly for a while, sipping on your wine and thinking about what Albina has just told you.'
+				'Suddenly, Albina says: "Actually, my dad is a bastard. If there is a hell, my dad has a special place reserved for him there to atone for what he''s done."'
+
+				act 'Ask her what she''s talking about':
 					cls
 					cls
 					minut += 15
 					minut += 15
 					alko += 2
 					alko += 2
 					gs 'stat'
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/albina/drunk.jpg"></center>'
 					'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/albina/drunk.jpg"></center>'
-					'You shake your head in amazement "You still speak of his father?" Albina suddenly sobered and evil hissed "How can I apply to it? Okay, you want to get into a tangle of snake, please. My dad fucked me from an early age, I do not even remember when it all began. I lived my whole life his litter. My mother, when she learned, My bastard father went to Durkee. Yes, he even had the influence it. The truth is now the scum losing ground one after the other. All his life he was a senior cop, but now retired, and as it turned out, This kid can just money complain. All his business went bankrupt, whatever the context, it do not connect. Political career is his last chance to jump into the passing train." She poured wine into glasses, and it was noticeable how her hands were shaking. "You see this rich house? Guard at the entrance, All this luxury? It''s all a chimera. My father is not something that on the verge of bankruptcy, He is already far beyond. None of my business, we would have gone begging."'
-
-					act 'Ask her how she knows there is no business going on':
+					'You shake your head in amazement, "What are you talking about?"'
+					'Albina suddenly sobers up and her face turns dark and grim. With a hiss she answers:'
+					'"Fine, you want to get into the belly of the beast, be my guest.'
+					'My dad has raped and abused me from an early age, I don''t even remember when it all began. I''ve spent my entire life being his plaything.'
+					'When my mother found out, my bastard father went to Durkee. Yes, he even had some connections there.'
+					'The truth is now the scum is losing ground constantly. All his life he was a senior cop, but now that he is retired he doesn''t have any money left. All his businesses went bankrupt.'
+					'His political career is his last chance to get back to where he once was." She stops talking for a few seconds to pour more wine in the glasses, and as she does you can clearly see her hands shaking violently. "You see this rich house? Guard at the entrance, expensive furniture, all this luxury? It''s all a charade. My father isn''t even on the verge of bankruptcy, he is already far beyond. Without my business bringing in money, we would be begging for scraps and sleeping under bridges."'
+
+					act 'Ask her how she knows her father is bankrupt':
 						cls
 						cls
 						minut += 15
 						minut += 15
 						alko += 2
 						alko += 2
 						gs 'stat'
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/albina/drunk.jpg"></center>'
 						'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/albina/drunk.jpg"></center>'
-						'You asked Albina "And how are you now no business going?" Albina shrugged "But I have no idea. Dad poured all the assets in the election campaign. We still have money left serious people. And now it''s over. There is not my business, nor his political career. There is only the debts and bad creditors." She grabbed the bottle and poured more wine, you drink more wine with Albina.'
+						'You asked Albina "How do you know your fathers businesses are bankrupt?"'
+						'Albina shrugged "I''m just guessing. Dad poured all our assets into his election campaign. We still have some money left, but not much. And now it''s over. My business is gone, and so is his political career. There is only a mountain of debts and bad creditors."'
+						'She grabs the bottle and pours more wine.'
 
 
-						act 'Tell Albina that you didn''t got the whole picture':
+						act 'Tell Albina that you didn''t get the whole picture':
 							cls
 							cls
 							minut += 15
 							minut += 15
 							alko += 2
 							alko += 2
 							gs 'stat'
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/albina/drunk.jpg"></center>'
 							'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/albina/drunk.jpg"></center>'
-							'You murmured "I have it all in my head does not fit" Albina smirked "What is there to be laid. Daddy pedophile fucked me from childhood. His influence that would be enough to cover their tracks." She paused and added, "The most worthless, he made me a monster. I just have not had a chance to grow up normal. I understand all this head, but nothing I can not do already. I like to fuck, and with whom pohrenu. I''m down and out, and pervert quite capable of being a normal mother and wife." We always cold and ironic Albina had tears in her eyes and she began to pour wine into glasses.'
+							'You murmur "I''m not quite sure I understand everything."'
+							'Albina smirks and says, "What is there to understand. Dad is a pedophile and fucked me ever since I was a child. His connections were enough to cover his tracks."'
+							'She paused and added, "The worst part is, he made me a monster. I just have not had a chance to grow up like a normal person.'
+							'I understand all this, but there''s nothing I can do about it. I like to fuck, and I don''t care with whom. I''m down and out, a pervert not quite capable of being a normal mother and wife."'
+							'The always cold and ironic Albina has tears in her eyes as she pours more wine into your glasses.'
 
 
 							act 'Drink':
 							act 'Drink':
 								cls
 								cls
@@ -57,7 +76,13 @@ if hour < 20:
 								alko += 2
 								alko += 2
 								gs 'stat'
 								gs 'stat'
 								'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/albina/drunk.jpg"></center>'
 								'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/albina/drunk.jpg"></center>'
-								'You drank wine with Albina and she took herself spoke again. "Sorry, that a bloody here. Just zadolbalo all. This provincial town anyone would get. Around one bigots. In the mouth and take all, fucked, immediately in nothing put. But men rarely goats, and strive to climb under her skirt, and then all of permission or excuse. You feel like a piece of meat. And most do not know how really nothing, although of course the ego of all th-th. I''ve said nothing about kissing, almost no one knows how to kiss." She smiled at her head tilted towards your face.'
+								'Once again you sit quietly for a while, sipping your wine.'
+								'After a while Albina speaks again. "Sorry about getting all bleedy. I'm just tired of it all.'
+								'Anyone would be in this backwater town. Everyone is a bigot here. They all want to shove their dicks down your throat and face-fuck you.'
+								'But the men rarely want to use their tongues, they just want to get in your pants without permission or excuse. You feel like a piece of meat.'
+								'And most don''t know anything about giving pleasure, although they all have an ego the size of a planet.'
+								'And kissing! Almost no one knows how to kiss properly."'
+								'She smiles as she tilts her head towards your face.'
 
 
 								act 'Kiss':
 								act 'Kiss':
 									cls
 									cls
@@ -65,7 +90,8 @@ if hour < 20:
 									horny += 20
 									horny += 20
 									gs 'stat'
 									gs 'stat'
 									'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/albina/kiss.jpg"></center>'
 									'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/albina/kiss.jpg"></center>'
-									'Albina get you hot and tender kiss on the lips, you feel like the excitement of her kiss you covered.'
+									'Unsure if it''s the alcohol or just the fact that she''s so beautiful, you lean towards Albina and pucker your lips.'
+									'She gives you a hot and tender kiss on the lips, and you feel your excitement growing as your skin becomes flush with heat.'
 
 
 									act 'Kiss':
 									act 'Kiss':
 										cls
 										cls
@@ -73,7 +99,9 @@ if hour < 20:
 										horny += 20
 										horny += 20
 										gs 'stat'
 										gs 'stat'
 										'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/albina/kiss2.jpg"></center>'
 										'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/albina/kiss2.jpg"></center>'
-										'Albina her hand and you felt something as her fingers penetrated you between your legs and sliding her panties to the side began to caress your pussy.'
+										'As you continue kissing Albina, you feel her hand slowly working its way up your inner thigh.'
+										'Reaching your crotch, she moves it gently over the front of your panties before slowly sliding your panties to the side.'
+										'As her fingers begin exploring your pussy, you moan into her mouth and move your hips to give her easier access.'
 
 
 										act 'Kiss':
 										act 'Kiss':
 											cls
 											cls
@@ -81,7 +109,10 @@ if hour < 20:
 											horny += 20
 											horny += 20
 											gs 'stat'
 											gs 'stat'
 											'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/albina/kiss3.jpg"></center>'
 											'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/albina/kiss3.jpg"></center>'
-											'Albino cleverly section you without stopping to caress your expiring juices from the pussy and continuing desire to kiss you on the lips.'
+											'Without breaking your kiss, Albina slowly inserts a finger in your wet vagina, and a rush of pleasure runs through your body.'
+											'As her finger caresses the inside of your pussy, it creates a wet, sloppy sound.'
+											'Albina''s free hand slowly works its way down your body, stopping only to lightly pinch your nipples through your clothing.'
+											'When her hand makes its way down to your legs, she gently pushes them further apart.'
 
 
 											act 'Further':
 											act 'Further':
 												cls
 												cls
@@ -94,7 +125,12 @@ if hour < 20:
 												orgasm += 1
 												orgasm += 1
 												gs 'stat'
 												gs 'stat'
 												'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/albina/lesb.jpg"></center>'
 												'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/albina/lesb.jpg"></center>'
-												'Albina bent between your feet and you will feel the touch of her tongue and lips to your pussy, Albino cleverly you start to lick and every movement of her wet tongue hit your swollen clit. Soon, a nice fire swept your entire body and you hit stuns orgasm. In the eyes of all faded and when you came to yourself, they saw sitting next to a pretty smiling Albina.'
+												'Kneeling down in front of you, Albina begins trailing kisses up your inner thigh.'
+												'As she gets closer and closer to your pussy, you move one hand up to your breasts and begin kneading and pulling on your nipples.'
+												'Soon you feel the warm touch of her lips on your labia, and shudder with pleasure as her tongue finds its way to your clitoris.'
+												'Moaning, you feel a fire begin to burn in your abdomen and you buck your hips to get Albina''s face buried in your pussy.'
+												'Then an intense pleasure overtakes you, and you momentarily lose control of your body. Moaning loudly, you grab hold of Albina''s hair as an intense orgasm washes over you.'
+												'During your orgasm, you black out for a few seconds and when you regain your senses you find yourself sitting next Albina, who''s smiling prettily.'
 
 
 												act 'Say goodbye and go home':gt 'gorodok'
 												act 'Say goodbye and go home':gt 'gorodok'
 											end
 											end
@@ -112,7 +148,7 @@ if hour < 20:
 			cls
 			cls
 			gs 'stat'
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/albina/train.jpg"></center>'
 			'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/albina/train.jpg"></center>'
-			'Albina trains in his room doing stretching.'
+			'Albina is training in her room, doing some stretching exercises.'
 
 
 			act 'Chat':
 			act 'Chat':
 				cls
 				cls
@@ -120,7 +156,8 @@ if hour < 20:
 				minut += 15
 				minut += 15
 				gs 'stat'
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/npc/23.jpg"></center>'
 				'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/npc/23.jpg"></center>'
-				'Albina you smiled and said, "Now I can not afford to rent a room for training, Here I train at home, that would not be out of shape. By the way, I could teach you and stripdensu and poledensu."'
+				'Albina smiles at you and says, "I can''t afford to pay the gym, so I have to exercise at home if I want to stay in shape.'
+				'By the way, I could teach you to about stripping and poledancing if you want."'
 
 
 				act 'Further':gt $curloc
 				act 'Further':gt $curloc
 			end
 			end
@@ -129,7 +166,8 @@ if hour < 20:
 				cls
 				cls
 				gs 'stat'
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/albina/train.jpg"></center>'
 				'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/albina/train.jpg"></center>'
-				'Albina trains in his room doing stretching. She smiles at you and asks "Well? Potreniruemsya?"'
+				'Albina is training in her room, doing some stretching exercises.'
+				'She smiles at you and asks "Well? Want me to teach you?"'
 
 
 				act 'Learn striptease (2:00)':
 				act 'Learn striptease (2:00)':
 					cla
 					cla
@@ -146,12 +184,13 @@ if hour < 20:
 
 
 					if dance >= 100:
 					if dance >= 100:
 						stripdance += rand(2, 10)
 						stripdance += rand(2, 10)
-						'You taught Albina razdevatsya passionately dancing to the music.'
+						'Albina taught you how to passionately dance to the music while stripping.'
 
 
-						if stripdance >= 100:'But you could not learn anything new, all that you already know how great and you know.'
+						if stripdance >= 100:'But you could not learn anything new, you already know everything she could teach you.'
 					else
 					else
 						dance += rand(5, 15)
 						dance += rand(5, 15)
-						'Striptease for you too complex, you can not perform the dance moves combining them with strip. Albina recommends that you first learn to ordinary club dances.'
+						'Striptease is too complex for you, you''re not able to dance and strip at the same time.'
+						'Albina recommends that you start with learning to dance.'
 					end
 					end
 
 
 					act 'Rest':gt $curloc
 					act 'Rest':gt $curloc
@@ -172,20 +211,20 @@ if hour < 20:
 
 
 					if dance >= 100 and stripdance >= 100 and stren >= 80:
 					if dance >= 100 and stripdance >= 100 and stren >= 80:
 						poledance += rand(2, 5)
 						poledance += rand(2, 5)
-						'You taught Albina various acrobatics on the pole.'
+						'Albina taught you various acrobatic moves on the pole.'
 
 
-						if poledance >= 100:'But you could not learn anything new, all that you already know how great and you know.'
+						if poledance >= 100:'But you could not learn anything new, you already know everything she could teach you.'
 					else
 					else
-						'Already in the first exercise. It looks like this kind of dance you until the teeth'
+						'After barely making it through the first exercise, you realize you''re not quite ready for poledancing yet.'
 
 
-						if stren < 80:'Albina explain to you that dances on a pole, than the ability to dance, require more physical strength.'
+						if stren < 80:'Albina explains to you that other than the ability to dance and strip, you need to be very strong to be successful in poledancing.'
 					end
 					end
 
 
 					act 'Rest':gt $curloc
 					act 'Rest':gt $curloc
 				end
 				end
 
 
 				if stren < 80:
 				if stren < 80:
-					'Albina grins "You''re still pretty weak for dancing on a pole, we can practice developing your strength."'
+					'Albina grins "You''re still too weak for poledancing, we can practice developing your strength instead."'
 
 
 					act 'Develop strength (2:00)':
 					act 'Develop strength (2:00)':
 						cls
 						cls
@@ -194,7 +233,7 @@ if hour < 20:
 						stren += rand (2, 5)
 						stren += rand (2, 5)
 						gs 'stat'
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/albina/stren.jpg"></center>'
 						'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/albina/stren.jpg"></center>'
-						'You are led by Albina developed their strength by performing various exercises.'
+						'Albina shows you how to develop your strength using various exercises.'
 
 
 						act 'Rest':gt $curloc
 						act 'Rest':gt $curloc
 					end
 					end
@@ -206,7 +245,7 @@ if hour < 20:
 					if hapri <= 0:
 					if hapri <= 0:
 						hapri = 1
 						hapri = 1
 						gs 'stat'
 						gs 'stat'
-						'Albina grins looking at your tousled hair and took a comb combs you.'
+						'Looking at your tousled hair, Albina smiles, picks up a comb and proceeds to do your hair.'
 					end
 					end
 
 
 					if albdinday ! daystart:
 					if albdinday ! daystart:
@@ -214,9 +253,9 @@ if hour < 20:
 						gs 'albdin'
 						gs 'albdin'
 					end
 					end
 				elseif sweat > 0:
 				elseif sweat > 0:
-					'Albina grins "Go take a shower <<$nickname>>, you are all sweaty now."'
+					'Albina grins and says, "Go take a shower <<$nickname>>, you are all sweaty now."'
 
 
-					act 'Get into the shower (0:15)':
+					act 'Get in the shower (0:15)':
 						cls
 						cls
 						dynamic $showerdin
 						dynamic $showerdin
 						minut += 15
 						minut += 15
@@ -228,7 +267,8 @@ if hour < 20:
 
 
 						gs 'stat'
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img src="images/pics/dush.jpg"></center>'
 						'<center><img src="images/pics/dush.jpg"></center>'
-						'You got into the shower and began to lather your body washcloth. After washed off the soap and washed her hair with shampoo. Rinse off the shampoo you become completely clean.'
+						'You get in the shower and begin to lather your body with a washcloth, and then shampoo your hair.'
+						'After washing off the soap and rinsing off the shampoo you feel completely clean.'
 
 
 						act 'Get out of the shower':gt $curloc
 						act 'Get out of the shower':gt $curloc
 					end
 					end
@@ -239,7 +279,7 @@ if hour < 20:
 end
 end
 
 
 if hour >= 20:
 if hour >= 20:
-	'Albina says, he wants to go to the disco.'
+	'Albina says that she wants to go to the disco.'
 
 
 	if money >= 25:act 'Go to the disco':money -= 25 & minut += 15 & gt 'gdkin'
 	if money >= 25:act 'Go to the disco':money -= 25 & minut += 15 & gt 'gdkin'
 end
 end

+ 4 - 3
locations/albinaporog

@@ -2,12 +2,13 @@
 gs 'stat'
 gs 'stat'
 
 
 if hour >= 17 and week < 6 and kanikuli = 0 and hour < 20 or hour >= 9 and week >= 6 and kanikuli = 0 and hour < 20 or hour >= 9 and kanikuli > 0 and hour < 20:
 if hour >= 17 and week < 6 and kanikuli = 0 and hour < 20 or hour >= 9 and week >= 6 and kanikuli = 0 and hour < 20 or hour >= 9 and kanikuli > 0 and hour < 20:
-	'You rang the bell on the gate intercom and you opened guard, you said, that go to Albina. He called on the phone and after a brief conversation let you. "Albina now at. Come."'
+	'You push a button on the gates intercom and a guard walks up on the other side of the gate.'
+	'You say that you''re here to visit Albina. He calls someone on his phone, and after a brief conversation opens the gate for you. "Albina is here now, come with me."'
 
 
 	act 'Go into Albina''s room':gt 'albinahome'
 	act 'Go into Albina''s room':gt 'albinahome'
 else
 else
-	if hour >= 9:'You rang the bell on the gate intercom and you opened guard, you said, that go to Albina. He shook his head "Albina is currently not at home."'
-	if hour < 9:'You rang the bell on the gate intercom and you opened guard, "Come no earlier than nine."'
+	if hour >= 9:'You push a button on the gates intercom and a guard walks up on the other side of the gate. You say that you''re here to visit Albina. He shakes his head and says, "Albina is currently not at home."'
+	if hour < 9:'You push a button on the gates intercom and a guard walks up on the other side of the gate, saying "Come no earlier than nine."'
 
 
 	act 'Say goodbye and go home':gt 'gorodok'
 	act 'Say goodbye and go home':gt 'gorodok'
 end
 end