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Merge pull request #14 from Monztah/V1.1.3-Patches

Translation fixes
Thekingofsweden 9 years ago
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+ 1 - 1
locations/AlbStarsEnd

@@ -6,7 +6,7 @@ AlbCopDay = daystart
 grupTipe[23] = -10
 Chernov = 10
 gs 'stat'
-'You walk down the street and see Albina Barlovskuyu. Near her, a van stops; people emerge from the vehicle running towards her. They restrain her face to the ground, hands behind her back before putting her in handcuffs. Albina is furious, but her face suddenly pales when she sees the warrant for her arrest and hears the accusations of running a brothel. After a thorough search she is put on her feet, shoved into a police car and whisked away. Near it stops the machine out people run out and put her face to the ground setting the stage for her hands behind her back and putting handcuffs. Albina outraged, but it shows the documents for her arrest for running a brothel. After a search of her rise to their feet and literally zashvyrivayut in police car, then take away.'
+'You walk down the street and see Albina Barlovskuyu. Near her, a van stops; people emerge from the vehicle running towards her. They restrain her face to the ground, hands behind her back before putting her in handcuffs. Albina is furious, but her face suddenly pales when she sees the warrant for her arrest and hears the accusations of running a brothel. After a thorough search she is put on her feet, shoved into a police car and whisked away.'
 
 act 'Leave':gt 'gorodok'
 

+ 44 - 13
locations/albinaEv

@@ -1,6 +1,6 @@
 # albinaEv
 $din_albina_get_over_car = {
-	'Strong hands grabbed you and pulled out of the car.'
+	'A pair of strong hands grab you and pull you out of the car.'
 
 	act 'Further':
 		cls
@@ -14,10 +14,10 @@ $din_albina_get_over_car = {
 albinaCarday = day
 gs 'stat'
 '<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/BMW.jpg"></center>'
-'You went out to the car and looked at Albina. She looked around you haughty look and started the car.'
+'You went out to the car and see Albina sitting in it, nervously looking every which direction. As you approach, she starts the engine.'
 
 if albinaCar = 0:
-	act 'Ask her if that car is hers':
+	act 'Ask her if the car is hers':
 		cls
 		albinaCar = 1
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -25,24 +25,38 @@ if albinaCar = 0:
 		'<center><b><font color="maroon"><<$npcName[23]>> <<$npcSurName[23]>></font></b></center>'
 		! WD: Remove Dupe Images ~ '<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/npc23.jpg"></center>'
 		'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/npc/23.jpg"></center>'
-		'You asked Albina "Is this your car?" Albina squirmed grimassy contemptuous "What? Of course not, this is the machine my father, I would never have bought it. Generally X5 is a machine for cattle suddenly grown rich and not for decent people." You shake your head, "You what? Rights have?" Albina laughed "Rights? Why should I, right? Do you know who my father is? He police chief of our town, though retired, but the connection remained. Never stopped me in his car." Albina second thought about something and said, "go for a drive."'
+		'You ask Albina "Is this your car?"'
+		'Albina squirms, grimacing and answers in a contemptious tone "What? Of course not, this is my fathers car, I would never have bought this thing. The X5 is a car for those newly rich and not for decent people."'
+		'You shake your head, "Do you even have a drivers license?"'
+		'Albina laughs, saying "License? Why would I need one, do you know who my father is? He used to be the police chief of our town, although he''s retired now. He still has all his connections, and I''ve never been stopped in his car."'
+		'Albina goes quiet for a few seconds, seemingly thinking about something, then suddenly says "Let''s go for a ride."'
 
 		act 'Go with Albina':
 			cls
 			minut += 5
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/BMW.jpg"></center>'
-			'You sat down on the seat next to Albina and she touched the car. You went through the streets of the town, soon you moved out from the central streets and stopped at what that wilderness, where the trees darkened factory building. Albina looking at you smiled mysteriously "This is a surprise."'
+			'You sit down on the seat next to Albina and she starts driving around town.'
+			'Soon enough, you find yourself on the outskirts of town. Glancing in your direction with a mysterious smile, Albina says "I have a surprise for you.".'
+			'Before you get a chance to ask her what the surprise is, the car slows down and turns on to a small side road, almost hidden from view by the dense vegetation.'
+			'As the car pushes further into the forest, you see an old building made of brick, with large chimneys jutting out of its saw-tooth roof.'
 
 			act 'Look around':
 				cls
 				minut += 5
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/castle.jpg"></center>'
-				'You looked around and realized that you are in the territory of an abandoned factory. You looked at Albina, she grinned and poked manicured finger in the plate. Have you read the inscription on the plate "Property Ltd. The Snow Queen" Albina grinned "This castle of the Snow Queen. My Territory" The car stopped and two men approached BMW, the appearance of both was a little over 30 years, one tall, athletic, not the second big growth with tum, but very sturdy, with a red neck wrestling, powerful hands and broad shoulders. Albina opened the door, "Hi guys. How you doing?" Guys frown examined you and shorty boomed "Everything is fine."'
+				'Looking around you realize that you''re in front of an abandoned factory building.'
+				'As you turn to look at Albina, she grins and points a manicured finger to a sign a few meters in front of the car, that says "Property of The Snow Queen Ltd." Still grinning, Albina says "This is the castle of the Snow Queen, my territory."'
+				'The car stops and two men suddenly materialize out of the shadows, walking slowly towards you. They both seem to be over 30 years of age, one tall and athletic, the other slightly shorter and rounder but with broad shoulders and powerful hands.'
+				'Albina opens the door and turns to the two men: "Hi guys, how are you doing?"'
+				'With a frown, the two men look at you for a few seconds before answering with a booming voice "Everything is fine."'
 
 				if AlbinaLast > 0 or AlbinaBlokDance > 0:
-					'Albina does not stop the engine, got out and told the guy, "I''ve brought you a not very obedient girl who knows something about my dance business." High grinned "I see." Strong Shorty silently and lazily toward you.'
+					'Leaving the engine running, Albina gets out of the car.'
+					'"I''ve brought you an inobedient girl who knows too much about my dancing business."'
+					'Grinning, the tall one says "I see.", as the short one starts walking slowly towards you.'
+					'A chill runs up your spine as you realize you''ve been tricked. You need to get out of here right now!'
 
 					if dom > 0:
 						act 'Jump behind the wheel':
@@ -52,14 +66,20 @@ if albinaCar = 0:
 							'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/BMW.jpg"></center>'
 
 							if agil >= 100:
-								'You deftly jumped behind the wheel of a car. Fortress was at the hood, as long guy rushed to the driver''s door, What would you get.'
+								'With a deft movement, you manage to get behind the wheel of the car.'
+								'Looking out the windows, you see the short one standing right in front of the car, touching the hood as if to stop you from driving forwards, while the tall one runs towards the driver side door.'
 
 								act 'Switch into reverse gear':
 									cls
 									minut += 1
 									gs 'stat'
 									'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/BMW.jpg"></center>'
-									'You dramatically stopped and handed back almost concrete fence. Before your hood you see as the burly running to you. A driver''s door to the long runs.'
+									'Not knowing exactly what you''re doing, it takes you a second or two to realize the stick needs to be in the ''R'' position.'
+									'After finding the right gear, you slam down on the accelerator just as you notice the tall one is very close and has started running towards you'
+									'The engine revs, and the car shoots backwards as if slung from a ballista. In your panic to escape the clutches of Short and Tall however, you fail to notice the sturdy concrete wall creeping up on you from behind at an alarming speed.'
+									'You notice the wall just before slamming into it, and step on the brakes. While it does lower your speed quite a bit, the car is still going fast as it hits the wall.'
+									'You hear the sound of metal and glass cracking and popping as the rear of your car is crushed against the concrete wall. The force of the impact throws your head back, hitting the headrest with a soft ''Foomp''.'
+									'After regaining your senses, you look out the window and see Short and Tall running towards you.'
 								end
 
 								act 'Put the pedal to the metal':
@@ -67,10 +87,16 @@ if albinaCar = 0:
 									minut += 1
 									gs 'stat'
 									'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/BMW.jpg"></center>'
-									'You abruptly thrust gear and pull the clutch abruptly moved forward. Fortress with a bang flopped down on the hood and fell off the machine. Ahead you see the bushes, the gateway to which you moved Albina are to the right of you. From left to you is factory building brick wall.'
+									'Taking a wild guess, you quickly jank the stick to the ''D'' position, grit your teeth and slam down the accelerator.'
+									'Short does not have time to react, and as the car jumps forward he is slung on top of the hood, slamming his head into the windshield leaving a crack in the glass, and then rolls of to the left.'
+									'Your knuckles whiten as you tighten your grip on the steering wheel and look out the windshield, trying to find a way out of here.'
+									'Straight ahead you see bushes and small trees, the forest slowly reclaiming the land it once lost to whatever kind of factory this once was.'
+									'To the right you recognize the gateway Albina drove through when she took you here.'
+									'To the left you see a brick wall, part of the abandoned factory building.'
 								end
 							elseif agil < 100:
-								'You jumped behind the wheel of a car, but tangled legs between the seat and the gear lever. The driver''s door stuck his hands long man.'
+								'You try your best to wriggle your way over to the drivers seat, but only manage to get stuck with one of your legs between the gear shift and the seat.'
+								'Suddenly, the driver side door is violently thrust open.'
 
 								dynamic $din_albina_get_over_car
 							end
@@ -82,7 +108,9 @@ if albinaCar = 0:
 						minut += 5
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/castle.jpg"></center>'
-						'You jumped out of the car and see how you run burly side hood and trunk from the car obbegat long. The road back to cut you, but you notice the open door of the shop.'
+						'Thinking you can easily outrun them, you quickly jump out of the car.'
+						'As you get out, Short starts moving towards you from the hood, and Tall moves behind you to block your path.'
+						'Looking around desperately for a second way out, you suddenly notice a small building close by with an open door.'
 					end
 
 					act 'Sit in the car':
@@ -90,13 +118,16 @@ if albinaCar = 0:
 						minut += 5
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/BMW.jpg"></center>'
+						'Panicking and not knowing what to do, you freeze.'
+						'As you sit in your seat watching Short and Tall slowly make their way towards you, grim thoughts pop up in your head.'
+						'Is this the end? Will they kill me? Will I ever see my family again?'
 						dynamic $din_albina_get_over_car
 					end
 
 					exit
 				end
 
-				if DanceWhore > 0:'Albina does not stop the engine, got out and said, "Relax guys. <<$name>> of my Zvezdushek. Newcomer. But a lot of promise."'
+				if DanceWhore > 0:'Leaving the engine running, Albina gets out of the car. "Relax guys. <<$name>> is one of my stars. She''s a newcomer, but shows a lot of promise."'
 			end
 		end
 	end

+ 4 - 2
locations/albinaRide

@@ -3,13 +3,15 @@ albrideday = daystart
 gs 'stat'
 '<center><b><font color="maroon"><<$npcName[23]>> <<$npcSurName[23]>></font></b></center>'
 '<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/npc/23.jpg"></center>'
-'Albina genuinely smiling at you "Come to my World, sit, chat."'
+'Albina smiles at you and says, "Let''s go to my place and talk."'
 
 act 'Go with Albina':
 	cls
 	minut += 5
 	gs 'stat'
-	'You sat in the back seat of a jeep, sat next to you Albina, sat behind the wheel of a hefty guy in a black jacket and took you through the town. Soon you stopped at the gate luxurious mansion and came out of the jeep.'
+	'You sit in the back seat of a jeep, and next to you sits Albina. Behind the wheel sits a large man in a black leather jacket.'
+	'The man behind the wheel starts engine and quickly drives through town.'
+	'Soon enough the car stops at the gate to a luxurious mansion, and Albina tells you to follow her.'
 
 	act 'Go with Albina into the room':gt 'albinahome'
 end

+ 74 - 34
locations/albinahome

@@ -9,7 +9,7 @@ gs 'stat'
 
 if hour < 20:
 	if npcSex[23] = 0:
-		'Albina you smiling affably "<<$name>>, I have a bottle of fine wine, let''s drink."'
+		'Albina smiles at you affably and says, "<<$name>> I have a bottle of fine wine here, let''s drink."'
 
 		act 'Drink':
 			cls
@@ -17,39 +17,58 @@ if hour < 20:
 			alko += 2
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/albina/drunk.jpg"></center>'
-			'You sat down at a table and Albina brought a bottle of wine. She deftly opened a bottle and poured the wine by the glass. You drank together with Albina. She smiled and said "Once again, that warned me. I was still brought a criminal case, but to prove that it will be very difficult for them. Father of course ranting and raving. His political career was covered with a copper basin anyway, though I otmazhus, though not otmazhus."'
+			'You sat down at the table while Albina grabs a bottle of wine. She deftly opens the bottle and pours wine in two glasses.'
+			'You drink together with Albina. She smiles and says "Once again, you warned me. They still have a case on me, but they''ll have to work very hard to get enough evidence.'
+			'My father is of course not very happy. His political career was doomed to fail anyway, regardless of what I did or didn''t do."'
 
-			act 'Ask her about the reaction of her father when he got scent of her specific business':
+			act 'Ask her how her father reacted when he learned of her business':
 				cls
 				minut += 15
 				alko += 2
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/albina/drunk.jpg"></center>'
-				'You asked Albina "And how did he react to it, that you have a specific business?" Albina laughed again and poured the wine by the glass. "But he knew from the beginning." You surprise staring at Albina "What do you know?" Albina laughed "I have a very strange little family, so easy you will not understand. Let''s have a drink." You drank more wine along with Albina and she continued "Actually, my dad has the bastard. If there is a hell, then it is already there prepared a special pot, for all that he did in his life."'
-
-				act 'Ask her how her father responded':
+				'You ask Albina "And how did he react when he found out about your business?"'
+				'Albina laughs and pours more wine in both glasses. "He knew from the beginning."'
+				'Surprised, you look at Albina and ask "How do you know?"'
+				'Laughing, Albina answers "I have a very strange little family, so it''s perhaps not easy for you to understand. Let''s have another drink."'
+				'You sit quietly for a while, sipping on your wine and thinking about what Albina has just told you.'
+				'Suddenly, Albina says: "Actually, my dad is a bastard. If there is a hell, my dad has a special place reserved for him there to atone for what he''s done."'
+
+				act 'Ask her what she''s talking about':
 					cls
 					minut += 15
 					alko += 2
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/albina/drunk.jpg"></center>'
-					'You shake your head in amazement "You still speak of his father?" Albina suddenly sobered and evil hissed "How can I apply to it? Okay, you want to get into a tangle of snake, please. My dad fucked me from an early age, I do not even remember when it all began. I lived my whole life his litter. My mother, when she learned, My bastard father went to Durkee. Yes, he even had the influence it. The truth is now the scum losing ground one after the other. All his life he was a senior cop, but now retired, and as it turned out, This kid can just money complain. All his business went bankrupt, whatever the context, it do not connect. Political career is his last chance to jump into the passing train." She poured wine into glasses, and it was noticeable how her hands were shaking. "You see this rich house? Guard at the entrance, All this luxury? It''s all a chimera. My father is not something that on the verge of bankruptcy, He is already far beyond. None of my business, we would have gone begging."'
-
-					act 'Ask her how she knows there is no business going on':
+					'You shake your head in amazement, "What are you talking about?"'
+					'Albina suddenly sobers up and her face turns dark and grim. With a hiss she answers:'
+					'"Fine, you want to get into the belly of the beast, be my guest.'
+					'My dad has raped and abused me from an early age, I don''t even remember when it all began. I''ve spent my entire life being his plaything.'
+					'When my mother found out, my bastard father went to Durkee. Yes, he even had some connections there.'
+					'The truth is now the scum is losing ground constantly. All his life he was a senior cop, but now that he is retired he doesn''t have any money left. All his businesses went bankrupt.'
+					'His political career is his last chance to get back to where he once was." She stops talking for a few seconds to pour more wine in the glasses, and as she does you can clearly see her hands shaking violently. "You see this rich house? Guard at the entrance, expensive furniture, all this luxury? It''s all a charade. My father isn''t even on the verge of bankruptcy, he is already far beyond. Without my business bringing in money, we would be begging for scraps and sleeping under bridges."'
+
+					act 'Ask her how she knows her father is bankrupt':
 						cls
 						minut += 15
 						alko += 2
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/albina/drunk.jpg"></center>'
-						'You asked Albina "And how are you now no business going?" Albina shrugged "But I have no idea. Dad poured all the assets in the election campaign. We still have money left serious people. And now it''s over. There is not my business, nor his political career. There is only the debts and bad creditors." She grabbed the bottle and poured more wine, you drink more wine with Albina.'
+						'You asked Albina "How do you know your fathers businesses are bankrupt?"'
+						'Albina shrugged "I''m just guessing. Dad poured all our assets into his election campaign. We still have some money left, but not much. And now it''s over. My business is gone, and so is his political career. There is only a mountain of debts and bad creditors."'
+						'She grabs the bottle and pours more wine.'
 
-						act 'Tell Albina that you didn''t got the whole picture':
+						act 'Tell Albina that you didn''t get the whole picture':
 							cls
 							minut += 15
 							alko += 2
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/albina/drunk.jpg"></center>'
-							'You murmured "I have it all in my head does not fit" Albina smirked "What is there to be laid. Daddy pedophile fucked me from childhood. His influence that would be enough to cover their tracks." She paused and added, "The most worthless, he made me a monster. I just have not had a chance to grow up normal. I understand all this head, but nothing I can not do already. I like to fuck, and with whom pohrenu. I''m down and out, and pervert quite capable of being a normal mother and wife." We always cold and ironic Albina had tears in her eyes and she began to pour wine into glasses.'
+							'You murmur "I''m not quite sure I understand everything."'
+							'Albina smirks and says, "What is there to understand. Dad is a pedophile and fucked me ever since I was a child. His connections were enough to cover his tracks."'
+							'She paused and added, "The worst part is, he made me a monster. I just have not had a chance to grow up like a normal person.'
+							'I understand all this, but there''s nothing I can do about it. I like to fuck, and I don''t care with whom. I''m down and out, a pervert not quite capable of being a normal mother and wife."'
+							'The always cold and ironic Albina has tears in her eyes as she pours more wine into your glasses.'
 
 							act 'Drink':
 								cls
@@ -57,7 +76,13 @@ if hour < 20:
 								alko += 2
 								gs 'stat'
 								'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/albina/drunk.jpg"></center>'
-								'You drank wine with Albina and she took herself spoke again. "Sorry, that a bloody here. Just zadolbalo all. This provincial town anyone would get. Around one bigots. In the mouth and take all, fucked, immediately in nothing put. But men rarely goats, and strive to climb under her skirt, and then all of permission or excuse. You feel like a piece of meat. And most do not know how really nothing, although of course the ego of all th-th. I''ve said nothing about kissing, almost no one knows how to kiss." She smiled at her head tilted towards your face.'
+								'Once again you sit quietly for a while, sipping your wine.'
+								'After a while Albina speaks again. "Sorry about getting all bleedy. I'm just tired of it all.'
+								'Anyone would be in this backwater town. Everyone is a bigot here. They all want to shove their dicks down your throat and face-fuck you.'
+								'But the men rarely want to use their tongues, they just want to get in your pants without permission or excuse. You feel like a piece of meat.'
+								'And most don''t know anything about giving pleasure, although they all have an ego the size of a planet.'
+								'And kissing! Almost no one knows how to kiss properly."'
+								'She smiles as she tilts her head towards your face.'
 
 								act 'Kiss':
 									cls
@@ -65,7 +90,8 @@ if hour < 20:
 									horny += 20
 									gs 'stat'
 									'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/albina/kiss.jpg"></center>'
-									'Albina get you hot and tender kiss on the lips, you feel like the excitement of her kiss you covered.'
+									'Unsure if it''s the alcohol or just the fact that she''s so beautiful, you lean towards Albina and pucker your lips.'
+									'She gives you a hot and tender kiss on the lips, and you feel your excitement growing as your skin becomes flush with heat.'
 
 									act 'Kiss':
 										cls
@@ -73,7 +99,9 @@ if hour < 20:
 										horny += 20
 										gs 'stat'
 										'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/albina/kiss2.jpg"></center>'
-										'Albina her hand and you felt something as her fingers penetrated you between your legs and sliding her panties to the side began to caress your pussy.'
+										'As you continue kissing Albina, you feel her hand slowly working its way up your inner thigh.'
+										'Reaching your crotch, she moves it gently over the front of your panties before slowly sliding your panties to the side.'
+										'As her fingers begin exploring your pussy, you moan into her mouth and move your hips to give her easier access.'
 
 										act 'Kiss':
 											cls
@@ -81,7 +109,10 @@ if hour < 20:
 											horny += 20
 											gs 'stat'
 											'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/albina/kiss3.jpg"></center>'
-											'Albino cleverly section you without stopping to caress your expiring juices from the pussy and continuing desire to kiss you on the lips.'
+											'Without breaking your kiss, Albina slowly inserts a finger in your wet vagina, and a rush of pleasure runs through your body.'
+											'As her finger caresses the inside of your pussy, it creates a wet, sloppy sound.'
+											'Albina''s free hand slowly works its way down your body, stopping only to lightly pinch your nipples through your clothing.'
+											'When her hand makes its way down to your legs, she gently pushes them further apart.'
 
 											act 'Further':
 												cls
@@ -94,7 +125,12 @@ if hour < 20:
 												orgasm += 1
 												gs 'stat'
 												'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/albina/lesb.jpg"></center>'
-												'Albina bent between your feet and you will feel the touch of her tongue and lips to your pussy, Albino cleverly you start to lick and every movement of her wet tongue hit your swollen clit. Soon, a nice fire swept your entire body and you hit stuns orgasm. In the eyes of all faded and when you came to yourself, they saw sitting next to a pretty smiling Albina.'
+												'Kneeling down in front of you, Albina begins trailing kisses up your inner thigh.'
+												'As she gets closer and closer to your pussy, you move one hand up to your breasts and begin kneading and pulling on your nipples.'
+												'Soon you feel the warm touch of her lips on your labia, and shudder with pleasure as her tongue finds its way to your clitoris.'
+												'Moaning, you feel a fire begin to burn in your abdomen and you buck your hips to get Albina''s face buried in your pussy.'
+												'Then an intense pleasure overtakes you, and you momentarily lose control of your body. Moaning loudly, you grab hold of Albina''s hair as an intense orgasm washes over you.'
+												'During your orgasm, you black out for a few seconds and when you regain your senses you find yourself sitting next Albina, who''s smiling prettily.'
 
 												act 'Say goodbye and go home':gt 'gorodok'
 											end
@@ -112,7 +148,7 @@ if hour < 20:
 			cls
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/albina/train.jpg"></center>'
-			'Albina trains in his room doing stretching.'
+			'Albina is training in her room, doing some stretching exercises.'
 
 			act 'Chat':
 				cls
@@ -120,7 +156,8 @@ if hour < 20:
 				minut += 15
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/npc/23.jpg"></center>'
-				'Albina you smiled and said, "Now I can not afford to rent a room for training, Here I train at home, that would not be out of shape. By the way, I could teach you and stripdensu and poledensu."'
+				'Albina smiles at you and says, "I can''t afford to pay the gym, so I have to exercise at home if I want to stay in shape.'
+				'By the way, I could teach you to about stripping and poledancing if you want."'
 
 				act 'Further':gt $curloc
 			end
@@ -129,7 +166,8 @@ if hour < 20:
 				cls
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/albina/train.jpg"></center>'
-				'Albina trains in his room doing stretching. She smiles at you and asks "Well? Potreniruemsya?"'
+				'Albina is training in her room, doing some stretching exercises.'
+				'She smiles at you and asks "Well? Want me to teach you?"'
 
 				act 'Learn striptease (2:00)':
 					cla
@@ -146,12 +184,13 @@ if hour < 20:
 
 					if dance >= 100:
 						stripdance += rand(2, 10)
-						'You taught Albina razdevatsya passionately dancing to the music.'
+						'Albina taught you how to passionately dance to the music while stripping.'
 
-						if stripdance >= 100:'But you could not learn anything new, all that you already know how great and you know.'
+						if stripdance >= 100:'But you could not learn anything new, you already know everything she could teach you.'
 					else
 						dance += rand(5, 15)
-						'Striptease for you too complex, you can not perform the dance moves combining them with strip. Albina recommends that you first learn to ordinary club dances.'
+						'Striptease is too complex for you, you''re not able to dance and strip at the same time.'
+						'Albina recommends that you start with learning to dance.'
 					end
 
 					act 'Rest':gt $curloc
@@ -172,20 +211,20 @@ if hour < 20:
 
 					if dance >= 100 and stripdance >= 100 and stren >= 80:
 						poledance += rand(2, 5)
-						'You taught Albina various acrobatics on the pole.'
+						'Albina taught you various acrobatic moves on the pole.'
 
-						if poledance >= 100:'But you could not learn anything new, all that you already know how great and you know.'
+						if poledance >= 100:'But you could not learn anything new, you already know everything she could teach you.'
 					else
-						'Already in the first exercise. It looks like this kind of dance you until the teeth'
+						'After barely making it through the first exercise, you realize you''re not quite ready for poledancing yet.'
 
-						if stren < 80:'Albina explain to you that dances on a pole, than the ability to dance, require more physical strength.'
+						if stren < 80:'Albina explains to you that other than the ability to dance and strip, you need to be very strong to be successful in poledancing.'
 					end
 
 					act 'Rest':gt $curloc
 				end
 
 				if stren < 80:
-					'Albina grins "You''re still pretty weak for dancing on a pole, we can practice developing your strength."'
+					'Albina grins "You''re still too weak for poledancing, we can practice developing your strength instead."'
 
 					act 'Develop strength (2:00)':
 						cls
@@ -194,7 +233,7 @@ if hour < 20:
 						stren += rand (2, 5)
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/albina/stren.jpg"></center>'
-						'You are led by Albina developed their strength by performing various exercises.'
+						'Albina shows you how to develop your strength using various exercises.'
 
 						act 'Rest':gt $curloc
 					end
@@ -206,7 +245,7 @@ if hour < 20:
 					if hapri <= 0:
 						hapri = 1
 						gs 'stat'
-						'Albina grins looking at your tousled hair and took a comb combs you.'
+						'Looking at your tousled hair, Albina smiles, picks up a comb and proceeds to do your hair.'
 					end
 
 					if albdinday ! daystart:
@@ -214,9 +253,9 @@ if hour < 20:
 						gs 'albdin'
 					end
 				elseif sweat > 0:
-					'Albina grins "Go take a shower <<$nickname>>, you are all sweaty now."'
+					'Albina grins and says, "Go take a shower <<$nickname>>, you are all sweaty now."'
 
-					act 'Get into the shower (0:15)':
+					act 'Get in the shower (0:15)':
 						cls
 						dynamic $showerdin
 						minut += 15
@@ -228,7 +267,8 @@ if hour < 20:
 
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img src="images/pics/dush.jpg"></center>'
-						'You got into the shower and began to lather your body washcloth. After washed off the soap and washed her hair with shampoo. Rinse off the shampoo you become completely clean.'
+						'You get in the shower and begin to lather your body with a washcloth, and then shampoo your hair.'
+						'After washing off the soap and rinsing off the shampoo you feel completely clean.'
 
 						act 'Get out of the shower':gt $curloc
 					end
@@ -239,7 +279,7 @@ if hour < 20:
 end
 
 if hour >= 20:
-	'Albina says, he wants to go to the disco.'
+	'Albina says that she wants to go to the disco.'
 
 	if money >= 25:act 'Go to the disco':money -= 25 & minut += 15 & gt 'gdkin'
 end

+ 4 - 3
locations/albinaporog

@@ -2,12 +2,13 @@
 gs 'stat'
 
 if hour >= 17 and week < 6 and kanikuli = 0 and hour < 20 or hour >= 9 and week >= 6 and kanikuli = 0 and hour < 20 or hour >= 9 and kanikuli > 0 and hour < 20:
-	'You rang the bell on the gate intercom and you opened guard, you said, that go to Albina. He called on the phone and after a brief conversation let you. "Albina now at. Come."'
+	'You push a button on the gates intercom and a guard walks up on the other side of the gate.'
+	'You say that you''re here to visit Albina. He calls someone on his phone, and after a brief conversation opens the gate for you. "Albina is here now, come with me."'
 
 	act 'Go into Albina''s room':gt 'albinahome'
 else
-	if hour >= 9:'You rang the bell on the gate intercom and you opened guard, you said, that go to Albina. He shook his head "Albina is currently not at home."'
-	if hour < 9:'You rang the bell on the gate intercom and you opened guard, "Come no earlier than nine."'
+	if hour >= 9:'You push a button on the gates intercom and a guard walks up on the other side of the gate. You say that you''re here to visit Albina. He shakes his head and says, "Albina is currently not at home."'
+	if hour < 9:'You push a button on the gates intercom and a guard walks up on the other side of the gate, saying "Come no earlier than nine."'
 
 	act 'Say goodbye and go home':gt 'gorodok'
 end

+ 14 - 8
locations/alex

@@ -2,8 +2,8 @@
 minut += 30
 horny += 10
 gs 'stat'
-'Arriving at the apartment Lech that hour dragged various alcohol and made a starter, then you sat down at a table in the hall talking to each other.'
-'Finally you opyaneli and Lech attracted you to her.'
+'Arriving at Alexey''s apartment, he offers you various alcoholic beverages before sitting down at a table in the hall to talk to each other.'
+'After a while of talking and drinking you feel a bit drunk, and Alexey asks you to come closer.'
 
 act 'Get on your knees and take it in your mouth':
 	cls
@@ -14,7 +14,10 @@ act 'Get on your knees and take it in your mouth':
 	gs 'stat'
 	picrand = rand(1, 14)
 	'<center><img src="images/qwest/alexey/bj<<picrand>>.jpg"></center>'
-	'You kneel before him and clasped his dick <<$liptalk>> began to suck. Alexei lying relaxed and caught the buzz finally he dismissed you from the members and led to the bed.'
+	'Kneeling before him, you unbutton his pants and take a firm grasp of his erect cock.'
+	'Leaning in closer, you give it a quick kiss with your <<$liptalk>> before guiding it your mouth.'
+	'As you suck on his hard dick, Alexey relaxes in his chair letting you take care of his needs.'
+	'Suddenly, he removes his penis from your mouth, pulls you up on your feet and leads you to the bedroom.'
 	gs 'oral', '0'
 
 	act 'Strip':
@@ -27,11 +30,15 @@ act 'Get on your knees and take it in your mouth':
 		pose = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img src="images/qwest/alexey/sex.jpg"></center>'
-		'Hardly you undressed as Alesya practically force pulled you on the bed and put the cancer.'
+		'You barely have enough time to undress before Alexey practically throws you on the bed.'
+		'Not wasting any time, he quickly pulls your ass up and without warning shoves his rock-hard cock deep in your pussy.'
 		dynamic $sexstart
-		'Alexei slapped you in the ass with his hand and said, "Well, how are flowing already a slut? Like ass twist on dick?"'
+		'Alexey slaps you on your ass with the palm of his hand and says, "You''re wet like a slut already, do you like being fucked like this?"'
 		dynamic $sexstart2
-		'During sex Alex stuck somehow smeared cream finger in the ass and began to move it there. Soon he took his dick out of your pussy and stuck to them stared you in the ass.'
+		'Without stopping his relentless pounding of your pussy, Alexey smears one of his fingers with your lovejuices, and sticks it in your anus.'
+		'He moves his finger slowly, probing your anus and preparing it for his dick.'
+		'Suddenly you feel his cock exiting your vagina. Not wanting him to stop, you push your hips against him to try and keep his dick inside you.'
+		'But instead of entering your wet pussy, his cock slides into your anus.'
 
 		act 'Moan':
 			cls
@@ -45,7 +52,7 @@ act 'Get on your knees and take it in your mouth':
 			'<center><img src="images/qwest/alexey/anal.jpg"></center>'
 			dynamic $analsex
 			gs 'BDsex', 'ancum'
-			'Alexei had finished with you slipped and went into the bathroom.'
+			'After finishing, Alexey slips out of bed goes to the bathroom.'
 
 			act 'Leave':gt 'nord'
 		end
@@ -53,4 +60,3 @@ act 'Get on your knees and take it in your mouth':
 end
 
 --- alex ---------------------------------
-

+ 17 - 13
locations/alexgang

@@ -2,17 +2,17 @@
 minut += 30
 horny += 10
 gs 'stat'
-'Arriving at the apartment Lech that hour dragged various alcohol and made a starter, then you sat down at a table in the hall talking to each other.'
-'At this moment, the doorbell rang, Lech went to open. You heard a man''s voice in the hallway, "Hi Lech, I do not opazdal?" Lech said, "Come."'
+'Arriving at Alexey''s apartment, he offers you various alcoholic beverages before sitting down at a table in the hall to talk to each other.'
+'Suddenly the doorbell rings, and Alexey walks to the door. You hear a man''s voice in the hallway: "Hi Alexey, I hope I''m not disturbing?" Alexey answers, "Come in."'
 
 if alexgangbang = 0:
-	'You''re a little surprised, who would it be. At this moment entered the room Alexander E., nightclub owner. He greeted you and sat down on a chair.'
-	'Alex began pouring alcohol and you have been drinking threesome.'
-	'Alex finally put down the bottle aside and got dick out of his pants. "Crawl here" You looked at him in surprise and looked at Sasha. Lech urged you "C''mon, do not tushuysya, everything is fine."'
+	'You''re a little surprised and wondering who it could be. Then you see Alexander E., nightclub owner, enter the room. He greets you and sits down on a chair.'
+	'Alexey pours alcohol in three glasses, and you spend some time drinking.'
+	'After a while, Alexey puts the bottle aside and pulls his dick out of his pants. "Get over here.", he says. You look at him in surprise and glance at Sasha. Alexey urges you on ,"C''mon, don''t worry, everything is fine."'
 else
-	'Entered the room Alexander E., nightclub owner. He greeted you and sat down on a chair.'
-	'Alex began pouring alcohol and you have been drinking threesome.'
-	'Alex finally put down the bottle aside and got dick out of his pants. "Crawl here"'
+	'You see Alexander E., nightclub owner, enter the room. He greets you and sits down on a chair.'
+	'Alexey pours alcohol in three glasses, and you spend some time drinking.'
+	'After a while, Alexey puts the bottle aside and pulls his dick out of his pants. "Get over here.", he says.'
 end
 
 act 'Get on your knees and give head':
@@ -24,9 +24,12 @@ act 'Get on your knees and give head':
 	gs 'stat'
 	picrand = rand(1, 14)
 	'<center><img src="images/qwest/alexey/bj<<picrand>>.jpg"></center>'
-	'You knelt before him and clasped his dick <<$liptalk>> began to suck. Alexei sat relaxed and caught the buzz finally he dismissed you from the members and led to the bed.'
+	'Kneeling before him, you unbutton his pants and take a firm grasp of his erect cock.'
+	'Leaning in closer, you give it a quick kiss with your <<$liptalk>> before guiding it your mouth.'
+	'As you suck on his hard dick, Alexey relaxes in his chair letting you take care of his needs.'
+	'Suddenly, he removes his penis from your mouth, pulls you up on your feet and leads you to the bedroom.'
 	gs 'oral', '0'
-	'Lech you lifted and moved to the bed where Sasha was sitting. He put you on all fours, face to Sasha.'
+	'Alexey lifts you up and puts you down in front of the bed, where Sasha is sitting. He puts you on all fours, facing Sasha.'
 
 	act 'Give Sasha a blowjob':
 		cls
@@ -48,11 +51,12 @@ act 'Get on your knees and give head':
 		gs 'stat'
 		picrand = rand(1, 10)
 		'<center><img src="images/qwest/alexey/gang<<picrand>>.jpg"></center>'
-		'Standing on all fours, you started to suck Sasha. He was not big and soft dick hard standing in your mouth. Working hard but you got his cock stiffen.'
+		'Standing on all fours, you start sucking Sasha''s limp cock. As you lick, suck and roll your tongue around his dick, you can feel it slowly stiffening in your mouth.'
 		dynamic $sexstart
-		'Dangle your body from bumps in the ass during frictions and Lehi nebilo you need to move your head during a blow job, you just have to work on the lips clasping member tightly.'
+		'The position you''re in doesn''t make it easy for you to move your head the right way. However, with some determination you manage to keep Sasha''s cock in your mouth.'
 		dynamic $sexstart2
-		'Sasha came too in your mouth. Sperm was not much and you can easily swallow all.'
+		'After a while, you feel Sasha''s hard cock begin to throb in your mouth. With a low grunt, he thrusts his hips forward and you feel his sperm coat the insides of your mouth.'
+		'He doesn''t cum a whole lot, and you easily manage to swallow all of it.'
 
 		act 'Leave':gt 'nord'
 	end

+ 3 - 3
locations/amrul

@@ -10,7 +10,7 @@ chi = 100
 x_rul = 100
 gs 'stat'
 '<center><img src="images/casino/amrul.jpg"></center>'
-'You leaned over the table.'
+'You lean over the table.'
 
 act 'Make a bet':
 	st_1 = input 'Enter the amount'
@@ -19,10 +19,10 @@ act 'Make a bet':
 		msg 'You have enough money'
 		gt 'roulette'
 	elseif st_1 < 0:
-		msg 'Wrong, try again'
+		msg 'You can''t bet a negative amount.'
 		gt 'amrul'
 	elseif st_1 > 1000:
-		msg 'The maximum rate of 1000 rubles'
+		msg 'The maximum rate is 1000 rubles'
 		gt 'amrul'
 	end
 

+ 64 - 61
locations/andrey

@@ -2,32 +2,32 @@
 '<b><center><font size="4">Manager Andrew M. Sobulyagin</center></b>'
 
 if hour >= 18:
-	msg '<center>Andrew M. Sobulyagin goodbye and leaves. His work day ended</center>'
+	msg '<center>Andrew M. Sobulyagin says goodbye and leaves. His work day has ended</center>'
 	gt 'young_shop'
 end
 
 if young_shop_work = 0:
-	'I knock on the door and walk into a room to the manager. He sits at a table and reading some papers.'
+	'You knock on the door and open it. Inside, you see the stores manager sitting at a table reading some papers.'
 
 	act 'Talk about work':
 		cla
 		minut += 5
-		'The manager tells me that the store needs a girl consultant to work in the evening. Salary small but stable.'
-		'Begin work on the next working day after employment.'
-		'<b>Details</b>need to work 5 days a week (Monday-Friday) at 2:00. Salary - 800 rubles per day. Work need to come in 15 hours. Salary paid every week on Friday according to hours worked. 3 for truancy fired from his job.'
+		'The manager tells me that the store needs a female consultant to work in the evening. The salary is low but stable.'
+		'You''ll start working the next day after your employment is finalised.'
+		'<b>Details:</b> Your working hours are 15:00 to 17:15, Monday through Friday. The salary is 800 rubles per day. Your salary will be paid out every Friday in accordance with hours worked. If you miss work three times in total, you will be fired.'
 
 		act 'Consider the conditions and come at another time':gt 'young_shop'
 
 		if ((work = 0 and young_shop_work = 0 and cheatWork = 0) or (young_shop_work = 0 and cheatWork = 1)) and hour < 15:
-			'If operating conditions suit me, I can now fill in the blanks and sign documents.'
+			'If the conditions suit me, I can fill in the blanks and sign the documents.'
 
-			act 'Get this job':
+			act 'Take the job':
 				work = 1
 				young_shop_work = 1
 				minut += 5
 
-				if week >= 1 and week <= 4:msg '<b><center>I get a job in youth clothing store ''Kies pussy''. Starting tomorrow</center></b>'
-				if week = 5:msg '<b><center>I get a job in youth clothing store ''Kies pussy''. Starting on Monday</center></b>'
+				if week >= 1 and week <= 4:msg '<b><center>You got a job in the youth clothing store ''Kies pussy''. Your first workday is tomorrow.</center></b>'
+				if week = 5:msg '<b><center>You got a job in the youth clothing store ''Kies pussy''. Your first workday is on Monday.</center></b>'
 
 				gt 'young_shop'
 			end
@@ -36,10 +36,10 @@ if young_shop_work = 0:
 
 	act 'Leave':gt 'young_shop'
 elseif young_shop_work = 1:
-	'I knock on the door and walk into a room to the manager. Andrew M. Sobulyagin normally picks papers, incidentally examining pictures of naked girls in the monitor.'
+	'You knock on the door and open it. Inside, you see the stores manager Andrew M. Sobulyagin. Normally he''d be reading some papers, but you notice he''s currently looking at pictures of naked girls on his monitor.'
 
 	if week = 5 and young_shop_salary > 0:
-		'- Hello <<$name>>. For salary come from?'
+		'- Hello <<$name>>. Have you come for your salary?'
 
 		act 'Get salary':
 			minut += 15
@@ -50,7 +50,7 @@ elseif young_shop_work = 1:
 
 				if young_shop_bonus < 0:young_shop_bonus = 0
 				bonus_mood -= 100
-				'<<$name>>, you are very irresponsible work, I have to deprive you of some bonuses! Try better.'
+				'<<$name>>, you''re very irresponsible at work. Unfortunately, I have to deprive you of some bonuses! You need to work harder.'
 			elseif char_responsible >= 600:
 				'<<$name>>, you are a very responsible person! Keep up the good work. Oh yeah, you also relies nadbavochka.'
 				young_shop_bonus += 2
@@ -61,8 +61,8 @@ elseif young_shop_work = 1:
 			money += young_shop_salary * 800 + young_shop_bonus * 200
 			young_shop_salary = 0
 			young_shop_bonus = 0
-			msg '<center>I worked <b><<young_shop_salary>></b> days and get paid <b><<young_shop_salary * 800>></b> rubles and bonus <b><<young_shop_bonus * 200>></b> rubles. Total <b><<young_shop_salary * 800 + young_shop_bonus * 200>></b> rubles</center>'
-			'The manager counts I <b><<young_shop_salary * 800 + young_shop_bonus * 200>></b> rubles and received my signature again puts his nose in the paper.'
+			msg '<center>I''ve worked <b><<young_shop_salary>></b> days and got paid <b><<young_shop_salary * 800>></b> rubles, with a bonus of <b><<young_shop_bonus * 200>></b> rubles. Total income is <b><<young_shop_salary * 800 + young_shop_bonus * 200>></b> rubles</center>'
+			'The manager counts out <b><<young_shop_salary * 800 + young_shop_bonus * 200>></b> rubles and, after having received my signature, puts his nose back in the papers.'
 
 			act 'Leave':gt 'young_shop'
 		end
@@ -72,7 +72,7 @@ elseif young_shop_work = 1:
 
 	if young_shop_miss >= 3:
 		cla
-		'- What kind of people! - Andrew M. leans back in his studio. - Where have you been? We agreed truancy 3 - dismissal.'
+		'- What a piece of work you are! - Andrew M. leans back in his chair. - Where have you been? We agreed that missing work three times are terms for immediate dismissal.'
 
 		act 'Agree to dismissal':
 			cla
@@ -82,25 +82,25 @@ elseif young_shop_work = 1:
 			work = 0
 			bonus_mood -= 100
 			minut +=15
-			'- Well, I did not get to go to work every day - I sigh.'
-			'Manager pulls paper and begins to fill the blanks. A few minutes later he hands me some papers and I put a signature.'
-			'More I do not work in the store.'
+			'"You''re right, I''ve skipped work a couple times now", you sigh.'
+			'The manager pulls out a document from his desk drawer and begins to fill in the blanks. A few minutes later he hands you some papers and you sign them without a word.'
+			'You are no longer employed at this store.'
 
 			if young_shop_salary > 0 or young_shop_bonus > 0:
 				money += young_shop_salary * 800 + young_shop_bonus * 200
 				young_shop_salary = 0
 				young_shop_bonus = 0
-				msg 'For <b><<young_shop_salary>></b> days I get paid <b><<young_shop_salary * 800>></b> and a bonus rubles <b><<young_shop_bonus * 200>></b> rubles. Total <b><<young_shop_salary * 800 + young_shop_bonus * 200>></b> rubles'
-				'Andrew M. counts I <b><<young_shop_salary * 800 + young_shop_bonus * 200>></b> rubles.'
+				msg 'For working <b><<young_shop_salary>></b> days you get paid <b><<young_shop_salary * 800>></b>, with a bonus of <b><<young_shop_bonus * 200>></b> rubles. Total income is <b><<young_shop_salary * 800 + young_shop_bonus * 200>></b> rubles'
+				'Andrew M. counts out <b><<young_shop_salary * 800 + young_shop_bonus * 200>></b> rubles.'
 			end
 
 			act 'Leave':gt 'young_shop'
 		end
 
-		act 'Beg to not be dismissed':
+		act 'Beg to not be fired':
 			cla
-			'- But I can not lose my job! It is very necessary to me - I have already in tears. - Please do not fire me.'
-			'- Then you have only one option:lock the door and show how your lips are able to convince - Andrew M. rises to his feet and taken the right hand for balls.'
+			'- "Please, I can''t lose my job! It''s very important to me, please don''t fire me!" As you say this, tears begin rolling down your cheeks.'
+			'- "Then you have only one option; lock the door and show me how good your lips are at convincing me" Andrew M. rises to his feet and cups his balls with his right hand.'
 
 			act 'Escape':
 				minut += 2
@@ -119,11 +119,14 @@ elseif young_shop_work = 1:
 				young_shop_miss = 2
 				young_shop_salary = 1
 				young_shop_bonus = 2
-				'"It''s for work, go home and do nothing bad will happen" - I try to calm myself while lock the door. I turned to see how Sobulyagin unzips his pants and throws Mighty 18 centimeter penis. I go over and get up on his knees, his eyes closed.'
-				'- What is stuck? Let''s start! - Andrew grins.'
-				'I open my eyes and take a dick in both hands. From a distance of 5 centimeters, he seems to be simply overwhelming. I slightly open mouth and his tongue. First I lick the head, then the whole barrel member. A few minutes later I put my dick in your mouth and start doing translational movements of the head, the head is constantly licking tongue. I have a feeling that it grows in my mouth.'
-				'I am very fond of their occupation and do not notice as a member starts hitting streaks of sperm into my throat and into the airways. Struggling, I try not to stay and keep coughing, but I have enough on just 15 seconds. Clearing his throat, I open my eyes and see the manager buttons fly and goes to leave.'
-				'- And you did so! Such a valuable employee I can not dismiss. Spis absenteeism and you''ll write the last award for his efforts. And you go home to work today you can not go out, have worked! Only to any more truancy was not! - With these words he comes out of the office, and I''m starting to put itself in order.'
+				'"I have to do this to keep my job, if I go home and do nothing I''ll be in big trouble" You think, trying to calm yourself while locking the door.'
+				'After locking the door, you turn around to see how Sobulyagin unzips his pants and pulls out his mighty 18 centimeter cock. You slowly walk over to him and kneel down on your knees, closing your eyes.'
+				'"Please make this quick", you think.'
+				'- "What''s the matter? Let''s start!" Andrew grins.'
+				'You open your eyes and take his dick in both hands. Looking at it this closely, it looks enormous. You open your mouth slightly and stick out your tongue.'
+				'You start off by gently licking the head, and then move on to licking up and down the entire shaft. After a few minutes you put his cock in your mouth and start moving your head back and forth, your tongue constantly rolling over the head of his shaft. You feel his dick growing and stiffening as you caress it with your mouth and tongue.'
+				'Soon you start enjoying to suck, and you don''t immediately notice as his dick starts spurting streaks of sperm into your throat and airways. Struggling to swallow and breath, you try to keep the cock in your mouth, and within just 15 seconds the stream of cum slows down. Clearing his throat, the manager starts buttoning up his pants as you open your eyes.'
+				'- "You did very well! I can''t fire such a valuable employee. I''ll remove one count of skipping work from your records, and you''re free to go home for today since you''ve already done some work! Just make sure to not miss work anymore!" - With those words he walks out of the office, leaving you to put yourself in order.'
 
 				act 'Leave':gt 'young_shop'
 			end
@@ -151,12 +154,12 @@ elseif young_shop_work = 1:
 	elseif young_shop_miss < 3:
 		act 'Resign':
 			cla
-			'- I would like to resign - I come to the table manager.'
-			'- Are you sure? Of course, I can arrange everything right Wait - Andrew M. scratching his head. - But then suddenly, ?'
+			'- "I would like to resign" You say as you walk up to the managers table.'
+			'- "Are you sure? If you''re sure I can arrange everything right away." Andrew M. scratches his head - "But why so suddenly?"'
 
 			act 'Change your mind':
-				'- You know, I should still think about it - I''m moving back to the door. - Come on, I''ll come next time.'
-				'- Right, something else may like?'
+				'- "You know, I should think about it some more" You say as you''re moving back towards the door. - "I''ll come back some other time."'
+				'- "Right, is there something else you wanted?""'
 
 				act 'Leave':gt 'young_shop'
 			end
@@ -165,15 +168,15 @@ elseif young_shop_work = 1:
 				young_shop_work = 3
 				young_shop_miss = 0
 				work = 0
-				'- No, I already thought about it very thoroughly!'
-				'Okay, owner - a gentleman! - Manager fills several forms and gave me lictochki signature.'
+				'- "No, I already thought about it very thoroughly!" You say'
+				'"Okay", Andrew M. says and starts filling out several forms before handing them over to you for signatures.'
 
 				if young_shop_salary > 0 or young_shop_bonus > 0:
 					money += young_shop_salary * 800 + young_shop_bonus * 200
 					young_shop_salary = 0
 					young_shop_bonus = 0
-					msg '<center>For <b><<young_shop_salary>></b> days I get paid <b><<young_shop_salary * 800>></b> rubles and bonus <b><<young_shop_bonus * 200>></b> rubles. Total <b><<young_shop_salary * 800 + young_shop_bonus * 200>></b> rubles</center>'
-					'Andrew M. counts I <b><<young_shop_salary * 800 + young_shop_bonus * 200>></b> rubles.'
+					msg '<center>For working <b><<young_shop_salary>></b> days I got paid <b><<young_shop_salary * 800>></b> rubles, with a bonus of <b><<young_shop_bonus * 200>></b> rubles. Total income is <b><<young_shop_salary * 800 + young_shop_bonus * 200>></b> rubles</center>'
+					'Andrew M. counts out <b><<young_shop_salary * 800 + young_shop_bonus * 200>></b> rubles.'
 				end
 
 				act 'Leave':gt 'young_shop'
@@ -185,15 +188,15 @@ elseif young_shop_work = 1:
 elseif (work = 0 and young_shop_work = 2 and cheatWork = 0) or (young_shop_work = 2 and cheatWork = 1):
 	act 'Beg to return to work':
 		cla
-		'- I do not even know - Andrei Mikhailovich obviously do not want to hire progulschitsu.'
-		'- Oh, please! I''ll do anything, I really need this job! - I do not even know how to convince him ..'
-		'- Anything? Ha! I know what you could do - open the eyes of the manager begins to evaluate my body. - Frankly, I fuck you in the ass, and then you and I still otsosesh. Hand?'
+		'- "I don''t know" - Andrew Mikhailovich obviously does not want to re-hire irresponsible workers.'
+		'- "Oh please! I''ll do anything you want, I really need this job!" You say, trying your absolute best to convince him.'
+		'- "Anything? Ha! I know what you could do!" The manager says, as his eyes begin to wander all over your body. - "To be blunt, I''ll fuck you in the ass, and then you give me a blowjob. Deal?"'
 
 		act 'Tell him you would never do this':
 			cla
-			'Paint rushed to my face. I''m even a little stunned by what he heard:'
-			'- Do you want me to do anal sex, and then I''ll have to lick all the juices from your penis? - It does not even fit in my head. - I will not do it!'
-			'- Do you want, how you want! - Andrew M. clearly upset.'
+			'Your face immediately turns beet-red as you try to understand what he just told you.'
+			'- "You want to have anal sex with me, and then you want me to lick all the juices from your penis?" You don''t understand quite what the hell he''s thinking. - "No way I''ll do that!"'
+			'- "Fine, have it your way then!" Andrew M. is clearly upset with your answer.'
 
 			act 'Leave':gt 'young_shop'
 		end
@@ -202,20 +205,20 @@ elseif (work = 0 and young_shop_work = 2 and cheatWork = 0) or (young_shop_work
 			young_shop_work = 1
 			work = 1
 			minut += 60
-			'That''s not fair! You know how I need this job - I want to try to convince Andrew Sobulyagina.'
-			'- I only give you a chance. Actually, according to the rules, I should have told you categorically refuse! So I''m doing pretty good deed - the manager rises from his chair. - Decide.'
-			'- Okay, I agree - it seems that this is the best way out. - Thank you.'
-			'Andrew goes to the door and locks it, and I undress before the goal.'
-			'- And you have me shalunishka! - He comes up behind me and hugged starts to finger her nipples.'
-			'I''m getting more comfortable in and lean forward. Spreading buttocks with both hands and close my eyes.'
-			'- Okay, we can do without foreplay - Sobulyagin immediately swing plants with cock right up my ass and I turbid in the head from a sharp tearing pain.'
-			'Coming to myself I only when Andrew puts me naked on the couch in his office:'
-			'- I got so carried away your hole that did not manage to take out time and finished in your anus - the manager scratching his head. - Then I saw you some strange:glass eyes, to touch or words not react. You do not worry, everything was perfect! So get dressed and go home, I''ll work now decorated.'
-			'I got up and slowly begin to dress. Hands some cotton and listen hard, and anus just lit. Dressing, I wipe his aching ass palm and fingers is dirty brown sperm.'
-			'- Thank you very much! - I''m trying to smile on his face.'
-
-			if week >= 1 and week <= 4:msg '<b><center>I get a job in youth clothing store '' '' Kies pussy. Starting tomorrow</center></b>'
-			if week = 5:msg '<b><center>I get a job in youth clothing store '' '' Kies pussy. Starting on Monday</center></b>'
+			'"That''s not fair! You know how much I need this job" You say, trying to convince Andrew to let you come back without doing this.'
+			'- "I''m only giving you a chance. Actually, according to the rules I should have categorically refused, so I''m doing a pretty good deed" The manager stands up from his chair. - "It''s time to decide."'
+			'- "Okay, fine. I agree" It seems that this is the only way out. - "Thank you."'
+			'Andrew walks over to the door and locks it, while you stand close to his desk and undress.'
+			'- "And you have me shalunishka!" He walks up behind you, embraces you and starts massaging your breasts and pulling on your nipples.'
+			'As Andrew fondles your breasts, you get a little more comfortable. Deciding you''d rather be done with it quickly, you lean forward slightly, using your hands to spread your buttcheeks and closing your eyes.'
+			'- "Okay, we don''t need any foreplay." With that, Andrew lines his cock up with your anus and with a hard thrust shoves it deep inside you. The pain from having his big dick pierce you so suddenly and forcefully causes you to lose consciousness.'
+			'When you regain your senses, Andrew is gently putting you down on the couch in his office.'
+			'- "I got so carried away by your sexy body and tight hole that I didn''t manage to pull out in time and finished in your anus" The manager scratches his head. - "Then I saw you looked really strange - glassy eyes, not responding to touch or words. But don''t you worry, everything was great! So get dressed and go home, I have some work to do now."'
+			'You slowly stand up, still a little disoriented. Your anus hurts <i>a lot</i>, and as you''re dressing you gently touch your anus with a finger. It stings, and looking at your finger you notice it''s now covered in disgusting brown sperm.'
+			'- "Thank you very much!" You say, trying and failing to keep a smile on your face.'
+
+			if week >= 1 and week <= 4:msg '<b><center>You got a job in the youth clothing store ''Kies pussy''. Starting tomorrow</center></b>'
+			if week = 5:msg '<b><center>You got a job in the youth clothing store ''Kies pussy''. Starting on Monday</center></b>'
 
 			act 'Leave':gt 'young_shop'
 		end
@@ -223,18 +226,18 @@ elseif (work = 0 and young_shop_work = 2 and cheatWork = 0) or (young_shop_work
 
 	act 'Leave':gt 'young_shop'
 elseif young_shop_work = 3:
-	'The manager is not against me again take on the job, so I quit on their own, and was not fired for absenteeism.'
+	'The manager is not against you coming back to work, since you quit yourself and were not fired due to skipping work.'
 
 	act 'Back to work':
 		cla
 		work = 1
 		young_shop_work = 1
 		minut += 15
-		'- And we are waiting for you! - Andrew M. gave me forms. - I even argued with Valera from the male department, that you come back to us!'
-		'I fill forms and return them to the manager.'
+		'- "We''ve been waiting for you to come back!" Andrew M. gives you a few forms. - "I even told Valera from the male department that you''d come back to us!"'
+		'You fill out the forms and return them to the manager.'
 
-		if week >= 1 and week <= 4:msg '<b><center>I get a job in youth clothing store '' '' Kies pussy. Starting tomorrow</center></b>'
-		if week = 5:msg '<b><center>I get a job in youth clothing store '' '' Kies pussy. Starting on Monday</center></b>'
+		if week >= 1 and week <= 4:msg '<b><center>You got a job in the youth clothing store ''Kies pussy''. Your first workday is tomorrow</center></b>'
+		if week = 5:msg '<b><center>You got a job in the youth clothing store ''Kies pussy''. Your first workday is on Monday</center></b>'
 
 		act 'Leave':gt 'young_shop'
 	end

+ 73 - 73
locations/annafrends

@@ -1,231 +1,231 @@
 # annafrends
 gs 'stat'
 
-'Around the house drinking beer culture your sister Anja, Lena, Ira, Rex and Roman.'
+'Your sister Anja and her friends Lena, Ira, Rex, and Roman are sitting outside the House of Culture drinking beer.'
 temprand = rand(0, 4)
 
 if temprand = 0:
 	!!Anja
-	'Anja outraged polutoralitrovogo grasping a bottle of beer "Guys! Well you pour beer today or not?"'
+	'Outraged, Anja picks up a bottle of beer and shouts, "Come on guys! Will you pour me some beer today or not?"'
 
 	if rand(0, 1) = 0:
-		'Rex took poltorashku hands of Anja.'
+		'Rex takes the bottle out of Anjas hands.'
 		temprand = rand(0, 4)
 
 		if temprand = 0:
 			*nl
-			'"And why not to shout! now pour!"'
+			'"Stop shouting, I''m pouring!"'
 			temprand = rand(0, 2)
 
 			if temprand = 0:
-				'Anja giggles "I have not yet started to yell, if I start, you oglohnesh."'
+				'Between fits of giggles, Anja says "I haven''t even started to yell. If I do, you''ll know!"'
 			elseif temprand = 1:
-				'Lena resounding slaps on the shoulder Rex "Hurry! And with a jump of dog shit, with jumps!"'
+				'With a resounding slap on Rex'' shoulder, Lena says "Hurry, you piece of dog shit!"'
 			else
-				'Ira smiling "not outraged, Reksik."'
+				'With a smile, Ira says "Don''t get angry, Rex."'
 
-				if rand(0, 10) = 0:'Anja sprinkles in cam "And then put him on a chain."'
+				if rand(0, 10) = 0:'Anja quickly interjects, "We might need to chain him up to keep him calm."'
 			end
 		elseif temprand = 1:
 			*nl
-			'"Well, you always like to be late for the train. Relax rolls. Now everything will be."'
+			'"Well, you always like to be late for the fun. Relax your ass, I''m sorting it all out."'
 			temprand = rand(0, 2)
 
 			if temprand = 0:
-				'Anja giggles, "I have not started to scream if I start, you oglohnesh."'
+				'Between fits of giggles, Anja says "I haven''t even started to yell. If I do, you''ll know!"'
 			elseif temprand = 1:
-				'Lena resounding slaps on the shoulder Rex "Hurry! And with a jump of dog shit, with a jump!"'
+				'With a resounding slap on Rex'' shoulder, Lena says "Hurry, you piece of dog shit!"'
 			else
-				'Roma giggles "Here and stinks. And if she rolls relax, we run the risk of suffocation!"'
+				'Roma giggles and says "It already stinks here, and if she relaxes her ass more, we run the risk of suffocation!"'
 				temprand = rand(0, 2)
 
 				if temprand = 0:
-					'Anja quips, "You''re so forever remain a virgin, Roma."'
+					'Anja quips, "You''ll forever remain a virgin, Roma."'
 					if rand(0, 10) = 0:
-						'Roma grins "It was an offer?"'
+						'Roma grins "Is that an offer?"'
 						temprand = rand(0, 2)
 
 						if temprand = 0:
-							'Anja laughs "Dream on, saffron."'
+							'Anja laughs "Dream on, punk."'
 						elseif temprand = 1:
-							'Anja laughs "Only in your dreams, saffron."'
+							'Anja laughs "Only in your dreams, punk."'
 						else
-							'Anja laughs "Yeah, schazz. Hear the tramp? Already ran to give."'
+							'Anja laughs "Yeah, right. Can you hear that? It''s a whore coming to help you."'
 						end
 					end
 				elseif temprand = 1:
-					'Anja quips "And you udivlyaeshsya that you girls do not give Roma."'
+					'Anja quips "And you''re just sad because you can''t get any girls Roma."'
 
-					if rand(0, 10) = 0:'Rex grins "Yeah, our eternal virgin Roma is able to enliven the conversation on the topic of anal gases."'
+					if rand(0, 10) = 0:'Rex grins "Yeah, our eternal virgin Roma is truly able to enliven the conversation with the topic of anal gases."'
 				else
-					'Anja quips "It''s from you is the smell."'
+					'Anja quips "The smell comes from you."'
 
 					if rand(0, 10) = 0:'Roma grins "Yes, no, it sobachatiny bears."'
 				end
 			end
 		elseif temprand = 2:
 			*nl
-			'"Che, unscrew the plug does not have a hand?"'
+			'"Come on, just unscrew the cork. Don''t you have hands?"'
 			temprand = rand(0, 2)
 
 			if temprand = 0:
 				'Anja giggles "And then what for you need?"'
 
-				if rand(0, 10) = 0:'Rex with mock indignation "Around one operation."'
+				if rand(0, 10) = 0:'With mock indignation, Rex answers "Around one operation."'
 			elseif temprand = 1:
-				'Lena resounding slaps on the shoulder Rex "You talk like a girl?"'
+				'With a resounding slap on Rex'' shoulder, Lena says "You talk like a girl?"'
 
-				if rand(0, 10) = 0:'Rex with mock indignation "In Russian, I speak with her."'
+				if rand(0, 10) = 0:'With mock indignation, Rex answers "I speak russian with her."'
 			else
-				'Ira smiling "not outraged, Reksik."'
+				'Ira smiles, saying "Don''t get angry, Rex."'
 
-				if rand(0, 10) = 0:'Anja sprinkles in cam "And then on the chain to plant."'
+				if rand(0, 10) = 0:'Anja quickly interjects, "We might need to chain him up to a tree to keep him calm."'
 			end
 		elseif temprand = 3:
 			*nl
-			'"Let me be undermined, madam."'
+			'"Allow me, madame."'
 			temprand = rand(0, 2)
 
 			if temprand = 0:
-				'Anja giggles "Cleared, monsieur."'
+				'Anja giggles "Of course, monsieur."'
 			elseif temprand = 1:
-				'Anja with mock indignation says "Do not Madame and Mademoiselle!"'
+				'With mock indignation, Anja says "Don''t you Madame me!"'
 
-				if rand(0, 10) = 0:'Rex bowing gallantly "Miles sorry mademoiselle."'
+				if rand(0, 10) = 0:'Rex bowes gallantly and answers "I''m truly sorry, mademoiselle."'
 			else
-				'Anja says impatiently "Pour already a clown."'
+				'Impatiently, Anja says "Pour it already, you clown."'
 			end
 		else
 			*nl
-			'"Shit! Where cups? Are we not buy them?"'
+			'"Shit! Where''re the cups? Did we not buy any?"'
 			temprand = rand(0, 2)
 
 			if temprand = 0:
-				'Anja takes cups "Here they are, blind monster."'
+				'Anja picks up the cups, "Here they are, you blind monster."'
 			elseif temprand = 1:
-				'Roma says "Rex, you did them in the store took, all memory is that it is not?"'
+				'Roma says "Rex, you''re the one who bought them, is your memory really that bad?"'
 			else
-				'Lena enough cups "Rex, do not pull the rubber."'
+				'Lena holds up the cups and says "Rex, calm down."'
 			end
 		end
 	else
-		'Roma took the bottle out of the hands polutoralitrovogo Anja and began to print. "Hold somebody cups."'
+		'Roma takes the bottle from the hands of Anja and opens it. "Somebody hold the cups."'
 		temprand = rand(0, 2)
 
 		if temprand = 0:
-			'Rex took the cups and Roma began to pour beer on plastic glasses.'
+			'Rex holds the cup while Roma pours beer in the plastic glasses.'
 		elseif temprand = 1:
-			'Rex took the cups "That same armless horseradish. Itself can not what?"'
+			'Rex takes the cups and mutters "That worthless horseradish. Can''t he use both of his arms at once?"'
 		else
-			'Ira took cups "Pour already onion grief."'
+			'Ira takes the cups and says "Pour it already, you onion."'
 		end
 
 		if rand(0, 3) = 0:
-			'Fracture of beer cups and flooded the ground.'
+			'As Roma pours beer in the cups, they suddenly break and spill all the beer on the ground.'
 			temprand = rand(0, 2)
 
 			if temprand = 0:
-				'Rex was outraged. "That thou armless hell! Nothing can trust you!"'
+				'Outraged, Rex screams "You puny, armless ass! No one can trust you!"'
 			elseif temprand = 1:
-				'Rex was outraged. "No, well, how not to spill it?"'
+				'Outraged, Rex says "How the fuck could you spill that?"'
 			else
-				'Anja was indignant. "Always the same, if saffron pours, make sure you will pour."'
+				'Indignantly, Anja says "Always the same, if saffron wants to pour, do it yourself instead."'
 			end
 		end
 	end
 elseif temprand = 1:
 	!!Lena
-	'Lena indignantly, "We came to drink beer or admire it?"'
+	'Indignantly, Lena says "Did we come here to drink beer or to look at it?"'
 elseif temprand = 2:
 	!!Ira
-	'Ira flirting eyes and flapping "Boys, and today we are going to drink beer?"'
+	'With a flirty look, Ira bats her eyelashes and says "Boys, are we going to drink beer today or not?"'
 elseif temprand = 3:
 	!!Rex
 	if rand(0, 1) = 0:
-		'Rex took poltorashku beer and unscrew the plug.'
+		'Rex picks up a bottle of beer and unscrews the cork.'
 		if rand(0, 2) = 0:
 			*nl
-			'"Shit! Where cups? Are we not buy them?"'
+			'"Shit! Where''re the cups? Did we not buy any?"'
 
 			temprand = rand(0, 2)
 
 			if temprand = 0:
-				'Anja takes cups "Here they are, blind monster."'
+				'Anja picks up the cups, "Here they are, you blind monster."'
 			elseif temprand = 1:
-				'Roma says "Rex, you did them in the store took, all memory is that it is not?"'
+				'Roma says "Rex, you''re the one who bought them, is your memory really that bad?"'
 			else
-				'Lena enough cups "Rex, do not pull the rubber."'
+				'Lena holds up the cups and says "Rex, calm down."'
 			end
 		else
 			*nl
-			'"Roman, cups hold this while I pour."'
+			'"Roma, hold the cups while I pour."'
 		end
 	else
-		'Rex took poltorashku beer and handed it to Roma. "Pour, then froze."'
-		'Roma took polutoralitrovogo beer bottle and began to print. "Hold somebody cups."'
+		'Rex picks up a bottle of beer and hands it to Roma. "You pour this time."'
+		'Roma takes the beer bottle from Rex, opens it and says "Somebody hold the cups."'
 		temprand = rand(0, 2)
 
 		if temprand = 0:
-			'Rex took the cups and Roma began to pour beer on plastic glasses.'
+			'Rex holds the cup while Roma pours beer in the plastic glasses.'
 		elseif temprand = 1:
-			'Rex took the cups "That same armless horseradish. Itself can not what?"'
+			'Rex takes the cups and mutters "That worthless horseradish. Can''t he use both of his arms at once?"'
 		else
-			'Ira took cups "Pour already grief onion."'
+			'Ira takes the cups and says "Pour it already, you onion."'
 		end
 
 		if rand(0, 3) = 0:
-			'Fracture of beer cups and flooded the land.'
+			'As Roma pours beer in the cups, they suddenly break and spill all the beer on the ground.'
 			temprand3 = rand(0, 2)
 
 			if temprand3 = 0:
-				'Rex was outraged. "That thou armless hell! Nothing can trust you!"'
+				'Outraged, Rex screams "You puny, armless ass! No one can trust you!"'
 			elseif temprand3 = 1:
-				'Rex was outraged. "No, well, how not to spill it?"'
+				'Outraged, Rex says "How the fuck could you spill that?"'
 			elseif temprand3 = 2:
-				'Anja was indignant. "Always the same, if saffron pours, make sure you will pour."'
+				'Indignantly, Anja says "Always the same, if saffron wants to pour, do it yourself instead."'
 			end
 		end
 	end
 else
 	!!Roma Meynold
-	'Roma took polutoralitrovogo beer bottle and began to print. "Hold somebody cups."'
+	'Roma picks up the bottle of beer, opens it and says "Somebody hold the cups."'
 	temprand = rand(0, 2)
 
 	if temprand = 0:
-		'Rex took the cups and Roma began to pour beer on plastic glasses.'
+		'Rex holds the cup while Roma pours beer in the plastic glasses.'
 	elseif temprand = 1:
-		'Rex took the cups "That same armless horseradish. Itself can not what?"'
+		'Rex takes the cups and mutters "That worthless horseradish. Can''t he use both of his arms at once?"'
 	else
-		'Ira took cups "Pour already onion grief."'
+		'Ira takes the cups and says "Pour it already, you onion."'
 	end
 
 	if rand(0, 3) = 0:
-		'Fracture of beer cups and flooded the ground.'
+		'As Roma pours beer in the cups, they suddenly break and spill all the beer on the ground.'
 		temprand = rand(0, 2)
 
 		if temprand = 0:
-			'Rex was outraged. "That thou armless hell! Nothing can trust you!"'
+			'Outraged, Rex screams "You puny, armless ass! No one can trust you!"'
 		elseif temprand = 1:
-			'Rex was outraged. "No, well, how not to spill it?"'
+			'Outraged, Rex says "How the fuck could you spill that?"'
 		else
-			'Anja was indignant. "Always the same, if saffron pours, make sure you will pour."'
+			'Indignantly, Anja says "Always the same, if saffron wants to pour, do it yourself instead."'
 		end
 	end
 end
 
-'Finally turned into beer cups and you also gave a plastic cup with a cold beer. Are you drunk with all beer.'
+'Once the cups were filled with cold beer, you each took a cup and started drinking.'
 
 if sisboyQW = 1:
-	act 'Meet with a girl sister':
+	act 'Meet your sister''s boyfriend':
 		cls
 		minut += 5
 		sisboyQW = 2
 		gs 'stat'
 
 		'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/sisterQW/sisboyQW_02.jpg"></center>'
-		'-Sveta, You really wanted to meet with my boyfriend, This is a novel, and this is my sister Sveta, So you met."'
-		'-For acquaintance!!!" He shouted a drunken Rex, and you with all the company continued to drink beer the contrary, Man looking sister.'
-		'Roma, red-haired skinny guy, and very pretty, sister how very lucky you thought.'
+		'-<<$nickname>>, you wanted to meet my boyfriend. This is my boyfriend Roma, and this is my sister <<$nickname>>."'
+		'-To friendship!!!" Rex shouts drunkenly, raising his cup. You pick up a cup full of beer and start drinking, glancing at your sister''s boyfriend.'
+		'Roma, a red-haired and skinny guy, very pretty. You think "Sister, how very lucky you are."'
 
 		act 'Continue to drink beer':gt 'annafrends2'
 	end

+ 5 - 5
locations/annafrends2

@@ -1,22 +1,22 @@
 # annafrends2
 gs 'stat'
 
-'Poltorashka beer was quickly drained and the guys got a new bottle.'
+'The bottle of beer was quickly drained and the guys go to fetch a new bottle.'
 
 if rand(0, 1) = 0:
 	gennpc = rand(0, 2)
 
 	if gennpc = 0:
-		'Anja came to you. "<<$name>>, go to the toilet."'
+		'Anja walks up to you and asks "<<$nickname>>, let''s go to the toilet."'
 	elseif gennpc = 1:
-		'Lena came to you. "<<$name>>, you do not want the toilet?"'
+		'Lena walks up to you and asks "<<$name>>, do you want to go to the toilet?"'
 	elseif gennpc = 2:
-		'Ira came to you. "<<$name>>, you do not want to go some where?"'
+		'Ira walks up to you and asks "<<$name>>, do you want to go somewhere?"'
 	end
 
 	act 'Go together':gt 'annafrendtoilet'
 else
-	'Boys went around the corner of the club, to empty their bladder, leaving the girls alone.'
+	'The boys went around the corner of the club to empty their bladder, leaving the girls alone.'
 end
 
 act 'Leave':gt 'gdk'

+ 1 - 1
locations/annafrendtoilet

@@ -8,7 +8,7 @@ if gennpc = 1:$annafrendname = 'Lena' & $annafrendname2 = 'Lena'
 if gennpc = 2:$annafrendname = 'Ira' & $annafrendname2 = 'Ira'
 
 '<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/Ev/piss.jpg"></center>'
-'You went with <<$annafrendname>> in the bushes behind the club. <<$annafrendname2>> looked around, lifted her skirt, pulled down pantyhose and squatted. Between the legs of a flood of gushing jet on the ground.'
+'You follow <<$annafrendname>> to the bushes behind the club. <<$annafrendname2>> looks around, lifts her skirt, pulls down her pantyhose, squats and begins to pee.'
 
 act 'Leave':gt 'gdk'
 if sisboyparty = 2 and sisboyparty_day + 1 = daystart and hour = 18:act 'Go to the party':gt 'sisterQW', 'sisboyQW_party', 'start'