KevinSmarts 9 жил өмнө
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+ 15 - 15
locations/vokmantoiev

@@ -15,13 +15,13 @@ $d_vok_man_toilet_event = {
 			if gloryholeVokzal = 3:gloryholeVokzal = 4 & ''
 			if gloryholeVokzal = 2:gloryholeVokzal = 3 & ''
 			'!
-			if gloryholeVokzal = 1:gloryholeVokzal = 2 & 'you notice, that the floor, near the hole in the wall located in one of the cabins have strange white drops. You began to wipe them off the floor with a cloth and realized, it''s sperm.'
-			if gloryholeVokzal = 0:gloryholeVokzal = 1 & 'You saw in one of the walls of the booth is fenced off from each other by a circular opening at the waist. You curiously examined the smooth opening and shrug continued to get out.'
+			if gloryholeVokzal = 1:gloryholeVokzal = 2 & 'You notice that there is a puddle of a strange white liquid on the floor, near the hole in the wall between two stalls. When you take a piece of cloth and attempt to clean it, you realize it''s sperm. Suddenly the hole in the wall makes sense to you.'
+			if gloryholeVokzal = 0:gloryholeVokzal = 1 & 'You notice that in the wall between two of the toilet stalls, there is a circular hole around waist height. The edges of the hole are smooth. You shrug and keep cleaning, not thinking anything of it.'
 		elseif vokmantoitipev = 1:
-			'The toilet boss walked station and standing at urinals started writing.'
+			'The station manager walks over to one of the urinals while you work, and lowers his pants just enough to pull his dick out. At least you think so, you can''t actually see.'
 
 			if horny >= 50:
-				act 'peep':
+				act 'Try to sneak a peek':
 					cls
 					minut += 1
 					seepeenach += 1
@@ -31,17 +31,17 @@ $d_vok_man_toilet_event = {
 
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img src="images/qwest/vokzal/seepee.jpg"></center>'
-					'You glanced at the head of the flaccid penis Station'
-					'You became wash the floor in the men''s room, then began to scour bowls.'
+					'You try and sneak a glance at his penis and succeed. It''s flacid, and a stream of urine is steadily flowing from it. When he''s done, he washes his hands before he leaves.'
+					'You wash the floor in the men''s room, and ponder whether you should move out for a minute when you hear a man loudly evacuate his bowels. You decide against it and just focus on finishing your cleaning work as fast as you can, doing your best to ignore the smell.'
 
 					act 'Leave':minut += 1 & gt 'vokzalGin'
 				end
 			end
 		elseif vokmantoitipev = 2:
-			'The toilet and went to the police standing at the urinals began writing.'
+			'The police captain, Katalkin, walks over to one of the urinals while you work. He lowers his pants just enough to pull his dick out and you can hear the clattering of urine against the urinal porcelain.'
 
 			if horny >= 50:
-				act 'peep':
+				act 'Try to sneak a peek':
 					cls
 					minut += 1
 					seepeecop += 1
@@ -51,17 +51,17 @@ $d_vok_man_toilet_event = {
 
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img src="images/qwest/vokzal/seepee.jpg"></center>'
-					'You glanced at his flaccid penis police'
-					'You became wash the floor in the men''s room, then began to scour bowls.'
+					'You try and sneak a glance at his penis and succeed. It''s flacid, and a stream of urine is steadily flowing from it. He doesn''t wash his hands when he leaves... gross!'
+					'You wash the floor in the men''s room, and ponder whether you should move out for a minute when you hear a man loudly evacuate his bowels. You decide against it and just focus on finishing your cleaning work as fast as you can, doing your best to ignore the smell.'
 
 					act 'Leave':minut += 1 & gt 'vokzalGin'
 				end
 			end
 		elseif vokmantoitipev = 3:
-			'The toilet has gone what that guy standing at the urinal and began to write.'
+			'A random passenger walks over to one of the urinals while you work. He lowers his pants just enough to pull his dick out and you can hear the clattering of urine against the urinal porcelain.'
 
 			if horny >= 50:
-				act 'peep':
+				act 'Try to sneak a peek':
 					cls
 					minut += 1
 					seepeeman += 1
@@ -71,15 +71,15 @@ $d_vok_man_toilet_event = {
 
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img src="images/qwest/vokzal/seepee.jpg"></center>'
-					'You glanced at his flaccid penis man'
-					'You became wash the floor in the men''s room, then began to scour bowls.'
+					'You try and sneak a glance at his penis and succeed. It''s flacid, and a stream of urine is steadily flowing from it. He doesn''t wash his hands when he leaves.'
+					'You wash the floor in the men''s room, and ponder whether you should move out for a minute when you hear a man loudly evacuate his bowels. You decide against it and just focus on finishing your cleaning work as fast as you can, doing your best to ignore the smell.'
 
 					act 'Leave':minut += 1 & gt 'vokzalGin'
 				end
 			end
 		end
 	elseif startevtoirand > 0:
-		'You became wash the floor in the men''s room, then began to scour bowls.'
+		'You wash the floor in the men''s room, and ponder whether you should move out for a minute when you hear a man loudly evacuate his bowels. You decide against it and just focus on finishing your cleaning work as fast as you can, doing your best to ignore the smell.'
 	end
 }
 

+ 24 - 24
locations/vokzalGin

@@ -15,24 +15,24 @@ bcolor = rgb(255, 255, 255)
 lcolor = rgb(106, 90, 205)
 
 
-'<center><h4>Train station</h4></center>'
+'<center><h4>Pavlovsk train station interior</h4></center>'
 '<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/vokzal.jpg"></center>'
-'In the center of the station is a waiting room and <a href="exec:dynamic $din_vokzalg_kassi">ticket office</a> with the departures board. In one wing is the <a href="exec:dynamic $din_vokzalg_kabinet">station managers office</a>, and in the other, the <a href="exec:minut += 1 & dynamic $din_vokzalg_toilet">toilets</a>.'
-'Exit to the <a href="exec:GT ''vokzalperG'',''start''">Platform</a>'
+'The center of the station building is a large waiting room, where passengers can wait until their train arrives. Off to one side, the <a href="exec:dynamic $din_vokzalg_kassi">ticket office</a> is situated next to the departures board. Opposite to that you can find the <a href="exec:dynamic $din_vokzalg_kabinet">station manager''s office</a>, and the <a href="exec:minut += 1 & dynamic $din_vokzalg_toilet">toilets</a> on the other end of the building.'
+'You can go to the train <a href="exec:GT ''vokzalperG'',''start''">platforms</a> through the station building.'
 
-if katalkinSexOnce = 1:'There is a small <a href="exec:minut += 5 & gt ''katalkin''">police</a> station inside the terminal.'
+if katalkinSexOnce = 1:'There is a small <a href="exec:minut += 5 & gt ''katalkin''">police station</a> inside the station building.'
 
 if podbros = 0:
 	podrand = rand(0, 1)
 
-	if money >= 1000 and hour >= 8 and hour <= 20 and podrand = 0:'Walking along the station you notice how a man falls thick <a href="exec:dynamic $din_vokzalg_podbros">purse</a>.'
+	if money >= 1000 and hour >= 8 and hour <= 20 and podrand = 0:'As you walk through the station building, you notice a man''s thick <a href="exec:dynamic $din_vokzalg_podbros">wallet</a> dropping from his pocket, not far away from you.'
 end
 
-act 'Leave':minut += 3 & gt 'vokzalG'
+act 'Leave the station building':minut += 3 & gt 'vokzalG'
 
 if vokzalVork >= 1:
 	if cleZalDay ! daystart:
-		act 'Mop the waiting room floor':
+		act 'Mop the waiting room floor (1:00)':
 			cls
 			cleZalDay = daystart
 			minut += 60
@@ -43,14 +43,14 @@ if vokzalVork >= 1:
 
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img src="images/etogame/clener1.jpg"></center>'
-			'You take some supplies from the store, poured water and detergent into a bucket and wash the floor in the waiting room.'
+			'You take some cleaning supplies from the maintenance closet, pour some water and soap into a bucket and wash the floor in the waiting room.'
 
-			act 'Leave':minut += 1 & gt 'vokzalGin'
+			act 'Continue':minut += 1 & gt 'vokzalGin'
 		end
 	end
 
 	if cleMTDay ! daystart:
-		act 'Mop the floor in the men''s toilet':
+		act 'Clean the men''s restroom (0:30)':
 			cls
 			cleMTDay = daystart
 			minut += 30
@@ -61,7 +61,7 @@ if vokzalVork >= 1:
 
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img src="images/etogame/clener1.jpg"></center>'
-			'You take some supplies from the store, poured water and detergent into a bucket and go to the men''s room.'
+			'You take some cleaning supplies from the maintenance closet, pour some water and soap into a bucket and go to the men''s room.'
 			dynamic $d_vok_man_toilet_event
 			!!'You began to wash the floor in the men''s room, and then began to scrub toilets.'
 
@@ -70,7 +70,7 @@ if vokzalVork >= 1:
 	end
 
 	if cleWTDay ! daystart:
-		act 'Mop the floor in the women''s restroom':
+		act 'Clean the women''s restroom (0:30)':
 			cls
 			cleWTDay = daystart
 			minut += 30
@@ -81,7 +81,7 @@ if vokzalVork >= 1:
 
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img src="images/etogame/clener1.jpg"></center>'
-			'You take some supplies from the store, poured water and detergent into a bucket and scrub clean the ladies'' restroom before mopping the floor.'
+			'You take some cleaning supplies from the maintenance closet, pour some water and soap into a bucket and scrub the toilets in the ladies'' room before mopping the floor.'
 			dynamic $d_vokzal_vera_talk
 
 			act 'Leave':minut += 1 & gt 'vokzalGin'
@@ -89,45 +89,45 @@ if vokzalVork >= 1:
 	end
 
 	if cleMTDay = daystart and cleWTDay = daystart and cleZalDay = daystart and cleZarplatDay ! daystart:
-		act 'Get salary':
+		act 'Collect your salary':
 			cls
 			cleZarplatDay = daystart
 			vokzalVork += 1
 			money += 250
 			minut += 3
 			gs 'stat'
-			'You go to the cashier and get your money.'
+			'When you are done cleaning all the places you were told to clean, you go to the cashier and collect your well-earned salary.'
 
-			act 'Leave':minut += 1 & gt 'vokzalGin'
+			act 'Continue':minut += 1 & gt 'vokzalGin'
 		end
 	end
 end
 
 if hour = 11 and minut = 0:
 	poezddalsled = 1
-	'The platform comes long-distance trains.'
+	'The 11:30 long-distance train is currently approaching the platform.'
 elseif hour = 11 and minut > 0 and minut < 30:
 	poezddalsled = 1
-	'At the platform stands distance trains.'
+	'The 11:30 long-distance train is currently waiting at the platform.'
 elseif hour = 11 and minut = 30:
 	poezddalsled = 1
-	'Platform serving long-distance trains.'
+	'The 11:30 long-distance train is currently leaving the station.'
 elseif hour = 18 and minut = 0:
 	poezddalsled = 1
-	'The platform comes long-distance trains.'
+	'The 18:30 long-distance train is currently approaching the platform.'
 elseif hour = 18 and minut > 0 and minut < 30:
 	poezddalsled = 1
-	'At the platform stands distance trains.'
+	'The 18:30 long-distance train is currently waiting at the platform.'
 elseif hour = 18 and minut = 30:
 	poezddalsled = 1
-	'Platform serving long-distance trains.'
+	'The 18:30 long-distance train is currently leaving the station.'
 end
 
 if poezddalsled = 1:
-	'Platform fussy run hucksters vtyuhivat their goods train passengers. On the part of all this fuss watches Police.'
+	'The platform is bustling with passengers that are entering or leaving the currently waiting train, carrying their heavy bags with them. Several police officers are patrolling the platforms while the train is here, keeping an eye out for any unruly activities.'
 
 	if tovarL > 0:
-		act 'Sell your goods to passengers.':gt 'vokzaltorg'
+		act 'Sell your goods to passengers':gt 'vokzaltorg'
 	end
 end
 

+ 16 - 16
locations/vokzalholle

@@ -6,50 +6,50 @@ if sound = 0:PLAY 'sound/vokzal.mp3',30
 cls
 gs'stat'
 '<center><img src="images/pic/vokzalholle.jpg" ></center>'
-'Exit to <a href="exec:GT ''vokzalper''">Platform</a>'
-act 'Leave via main entrance':gt 'vokzal' & minut+=5
-act 'Toilet':gt 'vokzaltoilet' & minut+=5
+'Go to the <a href="exec:GT ''vokzalper''">platforms</a>'
+act 'Return to the station hall':gt 'vokzal' & minut+=5
+act 'Go to the restrooms':gt 'vokzaltoilet' & minut+=5
 
 if money>=200:
-	act 'Buy a ticket to Pavlovsk':
+	act 'Buy a ticket to Pavlovsk (200 rubles)':
 		cls
 		money-=200
 		minut+=15
 		gs'stat'
 		'<center><img src="images/etogame/electri.jpg" ></center>'
-		'You paid for a ticket, and boarded the train going in Pavlovsk.'
-		'Through 15 minute train stopped at the station.'
+		'You pay for a ticket, and board the local train going to Pavlovsk.'
+		'After 15 minutes the train stops at a small station. It''s abandoned, and there is not much activity outside.'
 
-		act 'To go further':
+		act 'Continue towards Pavlovsk':
 			cls
 			minut+=15
 			gs'stat'
 			'<center><img src="images/etogame/electri.jpg" ></center>'
-			'Through 15 minute train stopped at the station.'
+			'After 15 minutes the train stops at another small station. It''s abandoned, and there is not much activity outside.'
 
-			act 'To go further':
+			act 'Continue towards Pavlovsk':
 				cls
 				minut+=15
 				gs'stat'
 				'<center><img src="images/etogame/electri.jpg" ></center>'
-				'Through 15 minute train stopped at the station near the village of Gadyukino.' 
-				act 'To go further':
+				'15 minutes later the train stops at the station near the village of Gadyukino.' 
+				act 'Continue towards Pavlovsk':
 					cls
 					minut+=15
 					gs'stat'
 					'<center><img src="images/etogame/electri.jpg" ></center>'
-					'Through 15 minute train stopped in Pavlovsk.'
+					'After 15 minutes the train reaches its final stop, Pavlovsk.'
 				
-					act 'Logout':minut+=5&nroad=20&gt'vokzalperG'
+					act 'Leave the train':minut+=5&nroad=20&gt'vokzalperG'
 				end
 
-				act 'Logout':minut+=5&nroad=15&gt'road'
+				act 'Leave the train at Gadyukino':minut+=5&nroad=15&gt'road'
 			end
 
-			act 'Logout':minut+=5&nroad=10&gt'road'
+			act 'Leave the train':minut+=5&nroad=10&gt'road'
 		end
 
-		act 'Logout':minut+=5&nroad=5&gt'road'
+		act 'Leave the train':minut+=5&nroad=5&gt'road'
 	end
 end
 --- vokzalholle ---------------------------------

+ 3 - 3
locations/vokzalper

@@ -4,10 +4,10 @@ $loc = $CURLOC
 gs 'stat'
 gs'time'
 '<center><img src="images/pic/vokzalper.jpg" ></center>'
-'You come out onto the platform,noise and multitudes crowding on the platform with bags, regardless of the time of day ...'
-'At the end of the platform <a href="exec:GT ''dort'',''start''">track</a> Leading the way through to landing'
+'When you arrive at the platform, you can''t help but notice it bustling with activity. Lots of passengers are coming and going, all carrying large bags. It feels like it is always busy here, no matter at what time of the day you are here.'
+'At the end of the platform the <a href="exec:GT ''dort'',''start''">train tracks</a> lead off into the distance.'
 
-act 'At the station':gt 'vokzalholle' & minut+=5
+act 'Return to the station hall':gt 'vokzalholle' & minut+=5
 
 --- vokzalper ---------------------------------
 

+ 4 - 4
locations/vokzalperG

@@ -16,17 +16,17 @@ clr
 gs'stat'
 gs'time'
 
-'<center><H4>Peron Pavlovsky</H4></center>'
+'<center><H4>Pavlovsk station platforms</H4></center>'
 '<center><img src="images/pic/vokzalperG.jpg"></center>'
-'<a href="exec:GT ''vokzalGin'',''start''">At the station</a>'
+'Because Pavlovsk is a place that attracts a fair amount of tourists, the station can be quite busy at times. The busiest times on the platforms are between 11:00 and 11:30, and between 18:00 and 18:30 when the long-distance trains are ready for boarding.'
 
 if snarkozak = 1 and narkossista = 0 and narkozakday!day:
     if money >= 2000:
-        act 'Search tab':dynamic $snarkozaka
+        act 'Find the drug dealer':dynamic $snarkozaka
     end
 end
 
-act 'At the station':minut += 15 & gt'vokzalGin'
+act 'Return to the station building':minut += 15 & gt'vokzalGin'
 
 --- vokzalperG ---------------------------------
 

+ 4 - 4
locations/vokzaltoilet

@@ -12,11 +12,11 @@ FColor = RGB(0,0,0)
 BColor = RGB(255,255,255)
 LColor = RGB(106,90,205)
 
-'<center><b><font color = maroon>Toilet</font></b></center>'
+'<center><b><font color = maroon>City station toilets</font></b></center>'
 '<center><img src="images/etogame/PublicToilet.jpg"></center>'
 ''
 
-act 'Exit out of the closet':gt'vokzalholle'
+act 'Return to the station hall':gt'vokzalholle'
 
 
 act 'Look in the mirror':gt 'mirror', 'start'
@@ -29,9 +29,9 @@ if spdirtyc > 0:
 		gs 'cum_cleanup'
 		minut += 10
 
-		'You have washed out all traces of semen from your clothing.'
+		'You wipe the cum off your clothes and thoroughly rinse out the stains with water.'
 
-		act 'Done':gt 'vokzaltoilet'
+		act 'Finish':gt 'vokzaltoilet'
 	end
 end